Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は内容が伝わるが、文法ミスや不自然な表現（例えば “use it to please”, “placing near my house”）がある。構造を簡潔にし、主語・時制を正しく使い、接続詞で文をつなぐ練習をすると良い。具体的には：1) トピックセンテンスを明確にする（Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child.）、2) 理由を1〜2文で述べる（I often played there with friends because it was close to my house and had lots of space to run.）、3) 例を加える。発音では “used to” と過去の習慣を表す表現を練習すること。

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. I used to go with my friends to a small park near my house, and we spent hours running and playing games. For example, we often played tag and climbed the trees, which made it very fun.

Suggestion: 回答は意味が分かるが英語の時制・語順が不自然（“I really go to park these years”）で、情報が断片的。より自然な表現と論理的な流れを作るために、最初に現在の状況を述べ、次に理由、最後に将来の意向を付け加える構成を練習する。接続語（because, but, however, after that）を正しく使うこと。具体的には “I don't go much at the moment because...” の形にする。

Example: I don't go to parks much at the moment because I'm a senior in high school and I'm studying for my entrance exams. However, after the exams are over, I plan to visit parks more often to relax and spend time with friends.

Suggestion: 答えは概ね理解できるが“Trojans can play fluently”など意味不明な語句が混じっている。語彙は文脈に合う単語を選ぶこと（e.g. residents, children）。理由を示す際は簡潔にまとめ、例を使うのは良いが語句の正確さを確認する。接続詞で意見と例を自然に結ぶ練習をすること。

Example: I don't think we need many more parks because there are already several good ones in the city. For example, a new park called Walk the Park was recently opened and it offers plenty of green space and playgrounds for local families.

Suggestion: 回答の意図は分かるが文法・語順と語彙選択が大きく改善できる。特に “It is Timo Park which bring school wars of Studio Ghibli civil life as a citizen” の表現は意味不明なので、訪れたい理由（景観、設備、イベントなど）をはっきり述べる練習をする。短く明確なトピックセンテンスの後に理由と具体例を1文で付けると良い。

Example: Yes, I'd like to visit Jubilee Park, which was opened recently in my city. I've heard it has beautiful gardens and interesting sculptures inspired by local culture, so I'm curious to see it in person.

× Umm yes, I use it to please with my friend in the park umm, which is placing near my house.

✓ Umm yes, I used to play with my friend in the park, which is located near my house.

The student used 'use' and 'please' incorrectly; the intended meaning is a habitual past action so 'used to play' is correct. 'Placing' is the present participle but should be replaced by the passive adjective phrase 'located' to describe the park's position. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habitual actions and 'located' or 'near' to describe position.

× Umm it was fun because I could run freely.

✓ Umm it was fun because I could run around freely.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'run freely' is slightly unnatural; adding 'around' improves fluency. The tense 'was' and modal 'could' correctly indicate past ability. Suggestion: choose natural collocations like 'run around freely.'

× To be honest, I really go to park these years because I am a senior in high school, so I have to be prepared for an entrance exam this year.

✓ To be honest, I haven't been going to parks these years because I am a senior in high school, so I have to prepare for an entrance exam this year.

The student used simple present 'go' with a time expression referring to the ongoing period 'these years'; English requires present perfect progressive or present perfect negative 'haven't been going' to indicate an ongoing lack of action. Also 'to park' needs the plural 'parks' or 'the park'; 'have to be prepared for' is wordy so 'have to prepare for' is more natural. Suggestion: use present perfect continuous or perfect for actions over a period and correct articles/plurals.

× Umm. However, after that I want to go.

✓ Umm. However, after that I want to go to parks again.

The phrase 'I want to go' is understandable but missing the destination; specifying 'to parks again' makes the future desire clear. Tense is fine; suggestion: include the object/place for clarity.

× I don't think so because there are plenty of parks where Trojans can play fluently.

✓ I don't think so because there are plenty of parks where people (or children) can play comfortably.

'Trojans' is an odd or incorrect pronoun here unless referring to a specific group; 'play fluently' is incorrect collocation — 'fluently' applies to language skills. Use 'people/children' and 'comfortably' or 'freely'. Suggestion: choose appropriate noun for people and correct adverb for playing.

× For example, Walk the Park was recently opened in my city and it provides enough green space and playgrounds for local families.

✓ For example, Walk the Park was recently opened in my city and it provides enough green space and playgrounds for local families.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Opened' as past participle in passive voice and 'provides' present tense agreeing with the name of the park are fine. No change needed. Suggestion: none.

× Yes, I want to visit Jubilee Park which was built in my city recently.

✓ Yes, I want to visit Jubilee Park, which was built in my city recently.

The original is acceptable but needs a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which was built...'. This is punctuation rather than a grammar problem from the list, but relates to clause use. Suggestion: add comma for clarity.

× It is Timo Park which bring school wars of Studio Ghibli civil life as a citizen.

✓ It is Timo Park, which features scenes inspired by Studio Ghibli films depicting everyday life.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical: 'which bring' is wrong verb form and 'school wars of Studio Ghibli civil life as a citizen' is incoherent. 'Which features' corrects subject-verb agreement and restructures the idea: use 'inspired by Studio Ghibli films' and 'depicting everyday life.' Suggestion: simplify and clarify the intended meaning, ensure subject-verb agreement and logical noun phrases.

× I want to visit once.

✓ I want to visit it once.

The verb phrase is acceptable but missing an object; 'visit once' without object is vague. Adding 'it' (referring to the park) makes the sentence complete. Suggestion: include the object of 'visit.'