Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation sounds (uh) and repeated phrases. Use linking words (for example, and) to make the answer coherent and keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my friends and I would spend hours on the swings and slides, and every weekend my parents packed a picnic for us. It was a great place to play games and spend time with family.

Suggestion: Answer directly and reduce filler words. Provide specific reasons and a short example of what you do there. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas and keep the response concise.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax. For instance, when I feel tired I walk around the nearby park to breathe fresh air, watch people exercising, and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Clarify and organize your points. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific benefits (e.g., cleaner air and space for children). Avoid vague or incomplete ideas and remove fillers. Finish with a concise reason linking back to health or community benefits.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they provide green space and cleaner air. In addition, parks give children safe places to play sports and run around, which improves their physical health and social development.

Suggestion: Be specific and concise. Begin with a clear statement that you want to visit the park, then mention two concrete features (e.g., lake, sports pitches). Remove repetitions and hesitations and use linking words like because and also.

Example: Yes, I want to visit a new park in the city centre. I saw on Google Maps that it has a beautiful lake and several sports pitches, so I hope to go there to enjoy the scenery and maybe join a game.

× spending hours with my friends to play swings and slide and at the weekend my parents would often take me there to take picnics and parks at.

✓ spending hours with my friends playing on the swings and the slide, and at the weekend my parents would often take me there to have picnics in the park.

Use gerund (playing) after 'spending hours' to show continuous activity. Use correct prepositions: 'playing on the swings and the slide' and 'have picnics in the park'. Also fix word order and articles for natural English.

× Great place to spend out to spend time. With friends and families for an adult activity and.

✓ It was a great place to spend time with friends and family, even for adults.

Original fragments lack a main verb and have awkward word order. Combine into one sentence with subject and verb ('It was') and use the uncountable noun 'family' for general sense. Remove redundant words.

× I often visit the park near my house, uh, with, so that I can take a walk, take a walk and breathe in some fresh air and, you know, just, uh, walk or wander around and see people. Doing their activity.

✓ I often visit the park near my house so that I can take a walk and breathe in fresh air, or just wander around and watch people doing their activities.

Delete unnecessary filler words and correct preposition/connector use: use 'so that' without extra 'with'. Use 'breathe in fresh air' (no article) and 'watch people doing their activities' (plural) for clarity.

× mall parks would means there would be more green space and cleaner air and you, you know, uh, there will be more place for children to play outdoor activities like uh, playing sport or just, uh. Run, running or go shopping.

✓ More small parks would mean there would be more green space and cleaner air, and there would be more places for children to play outdoor games, play sports, run, or go shopping.

Use base verb 'mean' after 'would' (do not add 's'). Correct 'small' word order and pluralize 'places'. Use parallel gerund/infinitive forms for activities: 'play games, play sports, run, or go shopping'.

× This active, this activity are very good for their health, uh, because nowadays, uh, children usually skip.

✓ These activities are very good for their health, because nowadays children usually skip them.

Plural subject requires plural demonstrative 'these' and plural noun 'activities'. Add object 'them' for verb 'skip'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'are' matches plural 'activities'.

× Recently my city opened a park in the central of the city and I would like to visit there because the park has a very beautiful lake which I saw on the Google Google map and also there's some.

✓ Recently my city opened a park in the center of the city and I would like to visit it because the park has a very beautiful lake which I saw on Google Maps, and there are also some pitches for people to play different kinds of sports.

Use 'the center' not 'the central'. Use pronoun 'visit it' not 'visit there'. 'Google Maps' is the correct name. Use 'there are' for plural 'pitches' and 'kinds of sports' for pluralization and clarity.

× and also there's some. Pitch for people to play different kind of sport and. MMM.

✓ and also there are some pitches for people to play different kinds of sports.

Use presentational 'there are' with plural 'pitches'. Use plural 'kinds of sports'. Remove filler sounds. Use correct noun forms and agreement.