Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., activities you enjoyed at parks) using linking words. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I was very outgoing, and I enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring nature, which made me feel energetic and refreshed.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clearly. Use one or two specific reasons and linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') but avoid filler words and repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Not as much as before. Because of my heavy school workload and other responsibilities, I rarely have time to visit parks, so I usually relax at home instead.

Suggestion: Clarify your message and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'beneficial' rather than 'reproductive'). Start with a direct answer, then give specific benefits with linking words (such as 'because' and 'for example').

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would be beneficial because they provide places for relaxation and exercise; for example, office workers and students could use them to reduce stress during breaks.

Suggestion: Be confident and concise. Give a clear choice and one or two specific reasons why you want to go, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler sounds and repeat words.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Disneyland in the future because it is the most impressive park I have seen, with many attractions and entertainment options that would be fun to experience.

× I was an extrovert kind of girl when I was a child and I was more like outgoing person and uh, going to the parks make me feel more energetic and more refreshing till now from from my child to till now.

✓ I was an extroverted girl when I was a child and I was more of an outgoing person, and going to parks made me feel more energetic and refreshed from my childhood until now.

Incorrect adjective forms and awkward adjective/adverb choices: 'extrovert' should be the adjective 'extroverted'; 'more like outgoing person' should be 'more of an outgoing person'; 'going to the parks make' has subject-verb agreement and tense issues (see separate entries) but here 'refreshing' is misused as an adjective for the person; use 'refreshed'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and natural collocations: 'extroverted', 'more of an outgoing person', 'refreshed'.

× going to the parks make me feel more energetic and more refreshing till now from from my child to till now.

✓ going to parks made me feel more energetic and refreshed from my childhood until now.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: plural subject 'going to parks' (gerund phrase) requires singular verb form 'makes' if present, but context refers to past habit so use past 'made'. Also 'more refreshing' incorrectly modifies 'parks' rather than 'me'; use 'refreshed'. Suggestion: choose correct tense for the context and ensure verb agrees with the subject: 'going to parks made me feel...'.

× I was so fond of going to park when I was a child.

✓ I was so fond of going to the park when I was a child.

Missing definite article: when referring to a type of place in general as a specific category in past experience, English commonly uses 'the park' or plural 'parks'. Here 'the park' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'the park' or 'parks' depending on intended meaning.

× I'm not sure about it because because of my school works and many stuff and works, I don't feel like I'm going, uh, I'm going fond of going out nowadays.

✓ I'm not sure because of my schoolwork and many other things; I don't feel like going out nowadays.

Tense and word choice: 'school works' is nonstandard; use 'schoolwork' (uncountable). Redundant 'because because' and repeated 'works' and 'going, I'm going' create disfluency. 'Fond of going out' is better as 'I don't feel like going out'. Suggestion: simplify phrases, use uncountable nouns correctly (schoolwork), and use present simple for current habitual feelings: 'I don't feel like going out nowadays.'

× because of my school works and many stuff and works

✓ because of my schoolwork and many other things

Incorrect pluralization and uncountable nouns: 'school works' should be 'schoolwork' (uncountable) and 'stuff' is informal; use 'many other things' or 'many things'. Suggestion: use correct singular/uncountable forms and more appropriate vocabulary.

× So yeah, I don't think I still like going to park now.

✓ So yeah, I don't think I still like going to the park now.

Awkward sentence structure and article omission: word order 'I don't think I still like' is awkward but understandable; main issue is missing article 'the' before 'park'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'I don't think I still like going to the park now.' or 'I don't think I still enjoy going to parks.'

× I feel like the if there will be more parks in the city, then it will be very reproductive to the people who are the very relaxing and getting refreshed from their working staff and studies.

✓ I feel that if there were more parks in the city, they would be very beneficial to people who want to relax and get refreshed from work and study.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'reproductive' is wrong word; use 'beneficial'. 'to the people who are the very relaxing' is incorrect — should be 'people who want to relax'. 'getting refreshed from their working staff and studies' is ungrammatical; use 'from work and study'. Conditional phrasing should be 'if there were... they would be...' Suggestion: use correct prepositions and collocations: 'beneficial to people', 'relax and get refreshed from work and study'.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future? ... It might be in the Disneyland because it's, it's the most beautiful park I have ever seen in my entire life and there are so many fun things to do.

✓ It might be Disneyland because it's the most beautiful park I have ever seen, and there are so many fun things to do there.

Awkward future phrasing and article use: 'in the Disneyland' is incorrect; 'Disneyland' does not take 'the'. Also repetitive 'it's, it's' is disfluent. Keep tense consistent: 'might be Disneyland' is fine. Add 'there' for clarity: 'so many fun things to do there.' Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles before proper nouns and avoid repetition.

× it will be very reproductive to the people who are the very relaxing and getting refreshed from their working staff and studies.

✓ it would be very beneficial to people who want to relax and get refreshed from work and study.

Word choice errors: 'reproductive' and 'working staff' are incorrect in context. Use 'beneficial' for advantage, and 'work and study' for activities causing fatigue. Also conditional mood: 'would' fits 'if there were'. Suggestion: choose words that match intended meaning and use conditional correctly.