Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, use correct tense and simpler phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar: use past tense for childhood and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends to play on the swings and slides, and we frequently played hide-and-seek, which was my favourite game.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and fix grammar. Use present tense habits and clear time expressions. Give one reason and a specific routine with linking words to make it coherent.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. I usually go for a run there in the evenings or at weekends because outdoor exercise helps me stay fit and relax after work.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Start with a direct answer, then give two clear, specific reasons with linking words. Use appropriate vocabulary (environment, stress, relax).

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would encourage people to be more active and provide peaceful green spaces where stressed residents can relax and enjoy leisure time.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid hesitations. Name the park clearly and give concrete reasons (features, atmosphere) using linking words. Correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., 'sea breeze', 'walking path').

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Batu Kawan Park because my sister told me it has long walking paths and a lovely sea breeze. I want to enjoy the fresh air and take photographs of the scenery.

× Yes I would like going to parks when I'm child because I could meet my friends and play together and I also enjoy playing play swings and slides or even I can play hide and seek with my friends.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I could meet my friends and play together; I also enjoyed playing on swings and slides or even playing hide-and-seek with my friends.

Errors: incorrect tense and form. 'would like going' is wrong for habitual past; use past simple 'liked'. 'I'm child' should be 'I was a child' (past tense). 'I also enjoy playing play swings' duplicates 'play' and wrong preposition: use 'enjoyed playing on swings and slides'. 'Even I can play' should be 'even playing' to maintain parallel structure. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits, remove duplicate words, and use correct prepositions ('on swings').

× I would say yes because I want to feed my body with running everyday, not everyday but in weekend, in every evening. So so I just park for the place and I really.

✓ I would say yes because I like to exercise by running every day, or not every day but on weekends and in the evenings. I go to the park for that purpose.

Errors: tense and word choice. 'I want to feed my body with running' is unnatural; use 'I like to exercise by running' or 'I run to stay healthy'. 'everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverb) — use 'every day' or 'on weekends'. 'in weekend' should be 'on weekends'; 'in every evening' should be 'in the evenings' or 'every evening'. 'I just park for the place and I really.' is ungrammatical and unclear; corrected to 'I go to the park for that purpose.' Suggestion: use natural verbs (exercise/run), correct adverb forms, and complete sentences.

× Yes. My answer is yes, because parts can make people more healthy and feel their leisure time and make the environment calm so the people are stressed can be so calm.

✓ Yes. My answer is yes, because parks can make people healthier and help them relax during their leisure time; they can also calm the environment so stressed people feel calmer.

Errors: word choice and adjective forms. 'parts' is a typo for 'parks'. 'more healthy' should be comparative 'healthier'. 'feel their leisure time' is incorrect; use 'help them relax during their leisure time'. 'make the environment calm so the people are stressed can be so calm' is ungrammatical and redundant; rephrase to 'they can also calm the environment so stressed people feel calmer.' Suggestion: correct typos, use comparative adjectives, and simplify sentence structure for clarity.

× Yes, I want to go at the Batu Kawan parks because uh, I don't, I know from my sister that Batu Kawan has leg at the park, so I want to feel the neck and uh with the flashing air so.

✓ Yes, I want to go to the Batu Kawan Park because I heard from my sister that it has a lake and nice scenery, so I want to enjoy the fresh air there.

Errors: prepositions and many word choices. 'go at' should be 'go to'. 'Batu Kawan parks' likely singular 'Batu Kawan Park' or 'parks' depending; corrected to singular. 'I don't, I know from my sister' is confused; use 'I heard from my sister'. 'has leg at the park' is nonsensical; likely 'has a lake'. 'feel the neck' and 'flashing air' are incorrect; corrected to 'enjoy the fresh air'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('to'), replace unclear words with appropriate nouns ('heard', 'lake', 'fresh air'), and make sentence concise.