Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clear, correct word choice (use 'parks' not 'box'), keep sentences concise, and avoid awkward expressions. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so') and natural phrases (e.g., 'part of life', 'we enjoyed').

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My dad often took me to a small park near our house because he believed daily walks were important for our health and routine. We would play on the swings and feed the ducks, so those visits became one of my favorite childhood memories.

Suggestion: Correct mistakes and be more precise: replace 'Box' with 'parks', avoid repeating phrases like 'matter of fact'. Give one clear supporting detail with linking words (e.g., 'also', 'for example'). Keep to a maximum of 4–5 concise sentences.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. As an adult I often go with friends, and we usually have a picnic or walk together. For example, we sometimes take photos and go sightseeing around the park, which makes the visits more social and relaxing.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid redundant or unclear phrases. State your opinion directly, then explain briefly why with specific reasons. Use correct tense and smoother linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'as a result'). Avoid repetitive clauses like 'that's taking place'.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they improve residents' health and provide green spaces for relaxation. As my city develops, more parks would mean easier access for families and communities, so life there would feel healthier and more enjoyable.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid repetition. Give one clear description of the park and explain why you want to visit, using correct grammar and coherent linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Replace colloquial 'wanna' with 'want to' in formal speech.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit several parks in the future, especially a futuristic park in Shanghai. It looks like something from a movie with modern architecture and unusual landscaping, so I'm curious to see the attractions and experience the design in person.

× Yes, I like going to box as a child and matter of fact my dad used to take me to a park which was close to our house just for a walk.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child; in fact, my dad used to take me to a park that was close to our house just for a walk.

The sentence describes past habitual action, so the verb should be in the past tense ('liked') rather than present ('like'). Also use 'the park' for a specific park and 'that' for a defining relative clause. Suggestion: use past tense to match 'used to' and consistent article use: 'liked', 'the park', 'that was'.

× He thought walking around the park is not just lifestyle, it's initial for life and it was amazing.

✓ He thought walking around the park was not just a lifestyle; it was essential for life, and it was amazing.

Reporting verb 'thought' is past, so the subordinate clause should normally use past tense ('was') not present ('is'). 'Not just lifestyle' needs an article and noun form 'a lifestyle'. 'Initial for life' is incorrect word choice; 'essential for life' fits meaning. Suggestion: keep tense sequence (past after thought) and use appropriate nouns and adjectives.

× Yes, I still like going to Box and matter of fact, as an adult now, I don't only go to parks, I also take my friends with me whenever I'm going to a park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park, and in fact, as an adult now, I don't only go to parks; I also take my friends with me whenever I go to a park.

Use 'the park' if referring to a known park or 'parks' for general; original mixed 'Box' unclear—assumed 'the park'. 'Whenever I'm going to a park' is awkward; simple present 'whenever I go' is natural for habitual actions. Maintain consistent present tense for habits.

× Sometimes we take photos of the few of the park, selfies, everything.

✓ Sometimes we take photos of a few parts of the park, selfies, and other things.

'The few of the park' is ungrammatical; use 'a few parts of the park' or 'a few photos of the park'. Also add 'and other things' for 'everything'. Suggestion: use correct quantifier 'a few' and clarify the noun it modifies.

× Absolutely. Why not? I mean, that's what's being taken place in my city due to the modern nation that's taking place in my city.

✓ Absolutely. Why not? I mean, that's what's happening in my city because of modernization.

'That's being taken place' is ungrammatical passive; use active 'that's happening'. 'Modern nation that's taking place in my city' is unclear; use 'modernization' to express the process. Suggestion: use clear noun 'modernization' and correct verb phrase 'happening'.

× I'm go, I'm able, I'm going to be able to see a lot of parks around every corner and every neighborhood.

✓ I can, and I will be able to see a lot of parks around every corner and in every neighborhood.

'I'm go' is incorrect; use 'I can' or 'I will'. Mixed forms 'I'm able, I'm going to be able' are redundant. Use modal 'will' for future ability or 'can' for present ability. Suggestion: choose one clear form: 'I can' (present) or 'I will be able to' (future).

× So it's gonna be fun in the future.

✓ So it will be fun in the future.

Informal contraction 'gonna' should be replaced with 'going to' or 'will' in formal spoken responses. Use 'it will be' to express future prediction. Suggestion: say 'it will be fun' or 'it's going to be fun'.

× Yes, there are plenty of parks that I would like to make a visit in the future.

✓ Yes, there are plenty of parks that I would like to visit in the future.

'Make a visit' is wordy and unidiomatic; use the verb 'visit'. Also keep 'in the future' after the verb. Suggestion: use concise collocation 'would like to visit'.

× There's this specifically, there's this futuristic park in China, in Shanghai.

✓ Specifically, there is a futuristic park in China, in Shanghai.

Redundant phrasing 'There's this specifically, there's this' is awkward. Move 'specifically' before the clause. Suggestion: use 'Specifically, there is a futuristic park in Shanghai, China.'

× It feels like it is came out of from a movie scene.

✓ It feels like it came out of a movie scene.

'Is came' incorrectly combines present auxiliary with past participle; correct past simple is 'came'. Also 'out of from' is redundant; use either 'out of' or 'from'—here 'out of a movie scene' or 'from a movie scene'. Suggestion: use simple past 'came' and a single preposition.

× So I wanna go there and see what is it like being there in person.

✓ So I want to go there and see what it is like to be there in person.

Use standard 'want to' instead of colloquial 'wanna' in formal response. The indirect question should be 'what it is like' not 'what is it like'. Use 'to be there' rather than 'being there' for this intention. Suggestion: use correct word order for reported questions and 'to-infinitive' for purpose.