Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and use past tense consistently for childhood. Avoid filler sounds and unclear words. Organize into a clear topic sentence plus two supporting details using linking words. Also use specific vocabulary (e.g., 'scooter' instead of 'skecher') and correct articles/plurals.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents and we spent hours there. For example, I usually took my bicycle and my scooter to ride, and I played games with my sister on the grass.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use concise sentences. Explain reasons clearly with linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Avoid repetition and filler phrases. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing to express time constraints.

Example: Yes, I still like parks, but I rarely go now because I am busy studying. For example, I usually have long study sessions and part-time work, so I prefer to relax at home instead.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opinion then provide a reason. Use singular/plural correctly and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas, and be specific about what 'many options' means (e.g., playgrounds, green spaces).

Example: I don't think we need many more parks because my city already has a lot of green spaces. For example, there are several playgrounds and community gardens that are well maintained and easily accessible to residents.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, use past and future tenses correctly, and organize reasons with linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Be specific about what you want to do there and why it matters emotionally. Reduce repetition.

Example: Yes, I would like to revisit the park where I spent my childhood because it holds many memories. I plan to go there with my old friends and family to walk around, revisit my favourite spots, and try the snacks we used to buy there.

× When I was little, I allowed to go to park with my parents.

✓ When I was little, I was allowed to go to the park with my parents.

The original sentence omits the passive auxiliary 'was' before the past participle 'allowed' and misses the definite article 'the' before 'park'. Use passive voice 'was allowed' to indicate permission in the past and include 'the' because 'the park' refers to a specific place. Suggestion: use 'was allowed to' + base verb and include articles where needed.

× It was so fun.

✓ It was so much fun.

'So fun' is colloquial and not fully grammatical in this context. Use 'so much fun' to modify the noun 'fun' correctly. Alternatively, use 'It was great'.

× Uh, especially I would have taken, uh, my bicycle and my skecher and my other tall other physical toys and play there with my sister.

✓ Especially I would take my bicycle, my sneakers and my other outdoor toys and play there with my sister.

The phrase 'would have taken' is incorrect for a habitual past action; use 'would take' or 'used to take'. 'Skecher' seems to refer to 'sneakers' and 'tall other physical toys' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'other outdoor toys' is clearer. Use base verbs after 'would' and ensure vocabulary is accurate. Suggestion: say 'I would take... and play there' or 'I used to take... and play there.'

× Yes I do but now I am grown up so umm due to time like I don't I don't have time to go there so I have to spend more time in studying and and stay and my hard work holds.

✓ Yes, I do, but now I am grown up so I don't have time to go there; I have to spend more time studying and working hard.

This sentence has tense and word-choice issues. 'Due to time like' is ungrammatical; simply 'I don't have time' suffices. 'Spend more time in studying' should be 'spend more time studying' (no preposition). 'Stay and my hard work holds' is unclear; replace with 'working hard' to express effort. Suggestion: use simple present 'don't have', 'have to', and gerund without 'in' after 'spend time'.

× Actually there are many many options available in this cities in the city where I am living and it is also easy accessible to all people and.

✓ Actually there are many options available in the city where I live, and it is easily accessible to all people.

'This cities in the city' mixes singular and plural; use 'the city' (singular) and 'where I live' (not 'am living' for general fact). 'Easy accessible' should be 'easily accessible' (adverb). Remove duplicate words. Suggestion: keep noun number consistent and use adverb form for accessibility.

× Yes, the part that I used to spend my childhood days I I would like to visit once again with my old friends and with my family also and to explore it all and also eat the food that I used to eat that time.

✓ Yes, the park where I spent my childhood, I would like to visit once again with my old friends and my family, to explore it and eat the food I used to have then.

'Part' should be 'park' (semantic error). 'That I used to spend my childhood days' is ungrammatical; use 'where I spent my childhood'. Remove repeated words 'I I' and simplify 'and also' repetitions. Use 'used to have then' to refer to past habitual foods. Suggestion: use clear relative clause 'the park where I spent my childhood' and concise phrasing for activities.