Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement (e.g., use past tense for childhood). Avoid redundant phrases.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, I met many neighborhood friends there and we played tag and football every afternoon, which made those days very fun.

Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions, remove fillers, and organize ideas with linking words. Give a concise topic sentence and one clear reason with a short example. Correct vocabulary and collocations (e.g., “in the sun”, “mental peace” → “peace of mind”).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they give me peace of mind. For instance, I often go there after work to relax and watch children playing in the sun, which helps me unwind.

Suggestion: Keep sentences clear and use correct nouns and plural forms. State your opinion directly, then give one specific reason using a linking word like “because” or “so”. Avoid unclear phrases and repetitions.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many people use them for exercise and socializing. For example, additional parks would provide space for families and reduce crowding at popular green areas.

Suggestion: Be specific and accurate: use future tense correctly and avoid pronoun mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give one or two reasons with supporting detail and a linking word like “because” or “so”. Correct word choice (e.g., “Jurassic Park” or the actual name) and remove fillers.

Example: Yes, I hope to visit Jurassic Park in the future because I saw it in many web series as a child. I want to see the recreated animals and enjoy the attractions, which would be a memorable experience.

× Yes, I like to go park.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park.

The question asks about childhood (past). The student used present tense 'like' and omitted the article before 'park'. Use past tense 'liked' to match time frame and include the definite article 'the' before a specific place: 'the park'. Also change 'to go park' to the gerund 'going to the park' for natural phrasing.

× When I was a kid, there are so many friends daily.

✓ When I was a kid, there were so many friends around every day.

The time frame 'When I was a kid' requires past tense for 'to be' so use 'there were' not 'there are'. Add 'around' or 'around me' and replace 'daily' with 'every day' for natural word order.

× We are supposed to play games and we are enjoyed those days.

✓ We used to play games and we enjoyed those days.

Talking about habitual past actions requires 'used to' or simple past. 'Are supposed to' is incorrect for past habitual actions. Also 'are enjoyed' is wrong: use past simple 'we enjoyed'.

× As I will go to park every day and all of my friends are gathering together and enjoying the moment, uh, in park, I have a mental peace and I will see all those kids are playing in the Suns.

✓ When I go to the park every day and all my friends gather together and enjoy the moment in the park, I feel mentally at peace and I see the kids playing in the sun.

The sentence mixes future and present incorrectly. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'When I go... my friends gather... they enjoy... I feel... I see'. Use 'the park' and singular 'sun'. 'Mental peace' is more natural as 'mentally at peace'. Remove redundant 'will' and incorrect 'are playing in the Suns'.

× I love to see those kind of stuffs.

✓ I love to see those kinds of things.

'Stuffs' is nonstandard; use 'things'. 'Those kind of' should be 'those kinds of' or 'that kind of' for correct agreement.

× Yes, I like to see more pause in my cities, so many people or nowadays going to parks and swap.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city; nowadays many people go to parks to relax.

The student used 'like' and incorrect words 'pause', 'cities', 'swap'. Use conditional 'would like' to express preference. Use singular 'city' to match context. Replace 'swap' with 'relax' or 'socialize' and use present simple 'many people go' for habitual action.

× Personally, I love to go parts uh, because I love to place wings etcetera.

✓ Personally, I love to go to parks because I enjoy the open spaces and fresh air.

Many word choices are incorrect: 'parts' should be 'parks', 'place wings' is unclear. Provide natural phrase 'open spaces and fresh air'. Include 'to' after 'go'.

× Actually actually I felt.

✓ Actually, I used to feel that way.

The fragment 'I felt' is incomplete and lacks context. For habitual past feelings, 'used to feel' is clearer. Avoid repetition 'actually actually'.

× Yes, you will go to Jurafik Park.

✓ Yes, I will go to Jurassic Park.

The student used 'you' instead of 'I' and an incorrect name 'Jurafik'. The question asks about the student's future intention, so use 'I will'. Also correct the park name to 'Jurassic Park' if that was intended.

× I have seen so many web series.

✓ I have seen so many web series about it.

The present perfect 'I have seen' is acceptable for experiences up to now. Add 'about it' to clarify the subject (the park) if needed. No tense change required unless specifying childhood: then use 'I saw'.

× It was my dream when I was child.

✓ It was my dream when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. Past tense 'was' correctly matches the time frame.

× I personally I love to go parts.

✓ Personally, I love to go to parks.

Redundant 'I personally I'; remove duplication. Use 'go to parks' and correct spelling 'parts' -> 'parks'.

× I will see uh, more animals and I will enjoy those moments.

✓ I will see more animals and enjoy those moments.

Future tense 'will' is acceptable, but omit redundant 'will' in the second clause for natural style: 'I will see... and enjoy...'. Remove filler 'uh'.