Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and relevant: give a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid vague phrasing and grammar errors (e.g., "in here" → "in the Philippines").

Example: I didn’t visit parks much as a child because there were very few public parks in the Philippines where I grew up. For example, the nearest green space was a small playground two kilometers away, so we usually played at home instead.

Suggestion: Keep the answer concise and organized: start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Avoid repetition and correct prepositions (use "in the Philippines" or "here").

Example: I do like parks, however I rarely visit them in the Philippines because there are so few and they are often crowded. For instance, the only park near me is small and lacks seating, so I usually go to shopping malls to relax instead.

Suggestion: Answer directly and add a specific benefit and one concrete example. Use correct phrasing ("I would really like that") and linkers such as "because" or "so" to make your reasoning clear.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would provide peaceful places to relax and exercise, which would improve residents’ wellbeing. For example, a new park with walking paths and benches would encourage people to spend time outdoors instead of staying at home.

Suggestion: Give a clear, specific answer and expand with a reason and a small detail. Use natural phrasing ("I would really like to visit") and mention which park or what attracted you (e.g., Central Park scenes in a film).

Example: I would love to visit Central Park on the Upper East Side in New York City because I’ve seen it in films and it looks beautiful. In particular, I want to see the tree-lined paths and the lawns where people picnic and relax.

× Well, there is barely a park in here in the Philippines, so I cannot say anything on that.

✓ Well, there are barely any parks here in the Philippines, so I cannot say anything about that.

Use of 'there is' with a plural noun is incorrect (There be issue). 'Park' should be plural because 'barely any' refers to a small number of parks. Also, use 'any' with negative/limiting contexts and 'here' should not include 'in' before 'the Philippines' — 'here in the Philippines' or simply 'in the Philippines.' Finally, use 'about' rather than 'on' for the phrase 'say anything about that.' Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun, include 'any' for limited quantity, and use 'about' for the expression.

× Parks are nice, but like I said, there are fewer parks in here in the Philippines so I didn't really get to experience them often.

✓ Parks are nice, but like I said, there are fewer parks here in the Philippines so I didn't really get to experience them often.

The main issue is incorrect prepositional phrase 'in here in the Philippines' (Present tense issue and preposition misuse). Use 'here in the Philippines' or 'in the Philippines.' The rest of the sentence correctly mixes present general statement with past experience ('didn't really get to experience'). Suggestion: remove the extra 'in' and keep tense contrast as is.

× But I have seen parks here of course, but it's just not that much and you will barely see it like.

✓ I have seen parks here, of course, but there are not that many, and you will rarely see them.

Problems: sentence has two 'but' conjunctions (Sentence structure errors), incorrect use of 'not that much' for countable plural 'parks' (quantifier/adjective misuse), and wrong pronoun number 'it' for plural 'parks.' Also 'barely see it like' is colloquial and ungrammatical. Correction uses 'not that many' for countable nouns and 'rarely see them' to match plural. Suggestion: avoid repeating conjunctions, match quantifiers to countability, and use correct plural pronouns.

× Yes, of course, because I think parks are nice to chill at and if there are fewer parks in here, I would very like that.

✓ Yes, of course, because I think parks are nice to chill at, and if there are fewer parks here, I would really like that.

Incorrect phrase 'I would very like that' — English uses adverb 'really' with 'like' or the construction 'would like' + object (Verb + -ing form / incorrect adverb use). Also 'in here' should be 'here.' Suggestion: use 'I would really like that' or 'I would like that very much.' Keep 'would like' followed by noun or clause.

× Probably in New York City on the Upper East Side, because I have seen them in a movie and I think I would very like to travel there.

✓ Probably New York City, on the Upper East Side, because I have seen it in a movie and I think I would really like to travel there.

Issues: 'them' refers to 'parks' but the speaker refers to the Upper East Side or park shown in movie — choose singular 'it' for 'the Upper East Side' or 'parks' if intended. Also 'I would very like' is ungrammatical; use 'I would really like' (Verb + -ing form / incorrect adverb use). Suggestion: use correct pronoun to match the referenced noun and use 'really' or 'very much' with 'would like.'