Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (sister and siblings), and use past tense consistently. Add one specific detail (a memory or favourite activity) linked with a connective to make the answer coherent.

Example: Yes — I loved going to the park as a child, especially with my family. For example, my father would sit on a bench while my sister and I played on the swings, which is one of my happiest memories.

Suggestion: Correct tense and clarity: use present simple for current habits, correct verbs and remove contradictions (uncomfortable/comfortable). Provide one clear reason and a specific routine to support your statement using linking words (for example, because, so).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park because it reminds me of my childhood. For instance, I go every weekend to read or exercise, and the quiet atmosphere helps me relax and concentrate.

Suggestion: Improve sentence accuracy and add a specific reason: start with a direct answer, then give a clear reason and an example of benefits parks would bring (e.g. green space, recreation). Avoid unnecessary words like "Thanks."

Example: Yes, I would. Because my city is very built-up with few green spaces, more parks would provide places for exercise and family outings. For example, a new park near my apartment would make weekend walks much more pleasant.

Suggestion: Use clear tense and structure: state the park you want to visit, explain why, and mention a realistic plan. Remove fillers ("but but but", "thing") and correct modal grammar ('I hope I can go' or 'I wish to visit').

Example: Yes — I have always wanted to visit a Disney park because I enjoy the rides and the magical atmosphere. I hope to go in the next few years when my work schedule allows, and I plan to save money for the trip.

× Yes, I did like to go to park as a child, especially with my family, sister and siblings and my dad, he used to sit there watching us play all around the playground and it was such a good memory to me.

✓ Yes, I did like going to the park as a child, especially with my family, my sister and other siblings, and my dad; he used to sit there watching us play all around the playground, and it was such a good memory for me.

The phrase 'did like to go' is not wrong but 'did like going' is more natural when describing a habitual childhood activity (use of verb + -ing). Also 'to park' needs the definite article 'the park'. 'Sister and siblings' was unclear; 'my sister and other siblings' clarifies plurality. Use 'for me' rather than 'to me' for describing something that is a memory belonging to the speaker. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× Yes, I do still like going to the park because it just bring all the memories to about my childhood and all this time I were as a child and go with two parts.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park because it brings back memories of my childhood when I used to go with two parents.

Subject-verb agreement and tense errors: 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'it' (present tense). 'Bring back' is the correct phrasal verb for recalling memories. 'To about my childhood' is incorrect preposition use; use 'of my childhood'. 'I were as a child' is incorrect; use 'when I used to' to describe past habitual actions. 'Go with two parts' seems to be a mis-saying of 'two parents' (word choice issue).

× So yeah, it it makes me feel uncomfortable, comfortable and make me focus more.

✓ So yeah, it makes me feel comfortable and helps me focus more.

Redundancy and contradiction: 'uncomfortable, comfortable' contradicts; choose the intended adjective 'comfortable'. Remove duplicated 'it'. 'Make me focus more' should be 'helps me focus more' to match subject-verb structure and register. This fixes sentence structure and coherence.

× I do that every week.

✓ I do that every week.

This sentence is correct. It uses present simple to describe a habitual action, which fits the context. No change is needed.

× Yes I would, especially there is no so many parks in here because it's much as a city so they're just buildings and cars.

✓ Yes, I would, especially because there are not many parks here; it is a densely built city with mostly buildings and cars.

Incorrect use of 'there is' with a plural noun: use 'there are' for plural ('parks'). 'No so many' is ungrammatical; use 'not many'. 'In here' is unnecessarily wordy; 'here' is sufficient. 'It's much as a city' is incorrect phrasing; 'it is a densely built city' or 'it is an urban city' is better. Also split into clearer clauses with punctuation.

× Yes I really wanted to go to a Disney park since I was a child it was my like dream and goal but but but as I get older I have so many work to do and I forgot about that so I wish I can go in the future thing.

✓ Yes, I have really wanted to go to a Disney park since I was a child; it was my dream and goal, but as I got older I have had so much work to do and I forgot about it, so I wish I could go in the future.

Tense consistency: 'since I was a child' with 'wanted' is better as present perfect 'have wanted' to show desire continuing to present. 'As I get older' should be past 'as I got older' to match 'I forgot'. 'So many work' is incorrect quantifier and countability; use 'so much work'. 'I wish I can' should be 'I wish I could' to express a hypothetical future possibility (modal verb usage but categorized here as past participle/tense consistency). Also replace 'thing' with nothing; it's unnecessary. Use punctuation to separate thoughts.