Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid vague or invented words like “furnishments.”

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, I often played on the swings and slides because they were exciting, and I enjoyed running around the grass with my friends.

Suggestion: Use natural expressions and correct collocations (e.g., “get fresh air” not “receive the vitamin”). Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Keep sentences short and accurate.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks in my free time because they help me relax. For instance, I like to sit under a tree to read and breathe fresh air, which makes me feel refreshed.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar (plural/singular) and clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct answer, then give two specific benefits linked with connectors like “because” or “so”. Avoid vague phrases such as “make the seat.”

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide pleasant places to relax. As a result, the city would feel more attractive and lively for residents.

Suggestion: Give a clear, grammatically correct answer with a specific reason and an example. Name the park or location and explain what attracts you (design, attractions, reputation). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Gardens by the Bay in Singapore because of its impressive architecture and unique plant displays. For example, I want to see the Supertree Grove and the conservatories, which I have read are very beautiful.

× I definitely love to go to parks when I was a child and because there are lots of fun furnishments I can facilities I can place and the most fun facility I love is Slide.

✓ I definitely loved going to parks when I was a child because there were lots of fun facilities and my favorite was the slide.

The sentence mixes present tense 'love' with past time 'when I was a child'; use past tense 'loved'. 'Love to go' should be 'loved going' for natural English. 'Furnishments' is incorrect; use 'facilities'. Word order and redundancy ('I can facilities I can place') are incorrect; simplify to 'there were lots of fun facilities'. Capitalization: 'Slide' should be lowercase 'slide'. Suggestion: keep past narrative consistent, use correct nouns and concise phrasing.

× I still love to go to parks now and in my leisure time and I think it's the most relaxing part in my life I can go through to breathe the fresh air and receive the vitamin.

✓ I still love going to parks in my leisure time because they are very relaxing; I can breathe fresh air and get some vitamin D.

Tense is generally present but phrasing is awkward. Use 'love going' rather than 'love to go' for habitual actions. 'The most relaxing part in my life I can go through to breathe' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'they are very relaxing; I can breathe fresh air'. 'Receive the vitamin' is incorrect collocation; say 'get some vitamin D'. Also plural agreement: 'park' refers to parks, so use 'they'. Suggestion: simplify sentences and use natural collocations.

× From my perspective, I love to see more park in my city because the park can refresh the air and make the seat and make the city more lovely and lively.

✓ From my perspective, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks can improve the air, provide seating, and make the city more pleasant and lively.

'More park' is incorrect; use plural 'more parks'. Article use: 'the park can refresh the air and make the seat' is awkward—use plural 'parks' and 'provide seating' rather than 'make the seat'. 'Lovely' is acceptable but 'pleasant' is more natural in this context. Also modal 'would like' is more polite for desires. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and prefer common collocations like 'improve the air' and 'provide seating'.

× Yes, and the pro I want to go in the future was in Singapore because therefore of significant plans and ice and I think it's uh, much the most special park land.

✓ Yes. The park I want to visit in the future is in Singapore because it has impressive designs and attractions, and I think it's the most special park land.

The original mixes past tense 'was' with future intention 'want to go in the future'; use present 'is' for a current plan. 'Pro' is unclear—use 'park' or 'place'. 'Therefore of significant plans and ice' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'because of significant designs and attractions' or 'because it has impressive features'. 'Much the most special' is redundant; use 'the most special'. Suggestion: state intentions with 'want to visit' and use clear vocabulary for reasons.