Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has several grammar mistakes, awkward phrasing, and is too long and unfocused. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and correct grammar (verb forms, articles, singular/plural). Use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

Example: As a child I didn’t often go to parks. Now I enjoy visiting them because the views and quiet atmosphere help me relax. I also like taking photos of flowers and landscapes, and sometimes I take a selfie to share on social media.

Suggestion: Your answer seems to confuse 'parks' with 'pubs' and includes filler sounds. This makes your response unclear and off-topic. Answer directly with a topic sentence about parks, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove filler words like 'uh' to sound more fluent.

Example: Yes, I still like going to parks. I often sit on a bench and listen to music while enjoying the fresh air, which makes me feel calm and refreshed. Also, I sometimes read or take photographs when I visit.

Suggestion: This answer is unclear and contains many grammar errors and incomplete thoughts. Start with a direct response (Yes/No), then give specific reasons and one concrete example. Use correct tense, articles, and plural forms. Keep sentences complete and coherent, avoiding repetition.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the existing ones are quite far from my home. If there were more nearby, I would visit them more often, take photos, and create a photo album of my favorite spots.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but has grammar mistakes and is vague. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No/Maybe), then give a specific example or a brief plan. Use correct noun forms and prepositions, and include linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I don’t have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit famous parks abroad if I travel to other countries. For example, I would love to see Central Park in New York and take photos of its landscapes and city views.

× When I was a child I never went to parks but now I enjoy visiting them because I like the views and the peaceful atmosphere and I often take photos of sensory and sometimes takes pictures of myself to post on social media.

✓ When I was a child I never went to parks, but now I enjoy visiting them because I like the views and the peaceful atmosphere, and I often take photos of scenery and sometimes take pictures of myself to post on social media.

Errors: 'takes' is a wrong verb form for the first person singular (subject-verb agreement) and 'sensory' is the wrong word; the correct noun is 'scenery'. Also run-on sentence needs commas. Suggestion: Use 'take' with subject I, replace 'sensory' with 'scenery', and add commas to separate clauses. This fits Past/Present context: 'went' for past habit, 'enjoy/like/often take' for present habits.

× Uh, I really like going to pubs now because they help me to relax and I often sit on the bench and listen to music while I breathe the fresh air which makes me feel really calm and refreshed.

✓ Uh, I really like going to parks now because they help me to relax, and I often sit on a bench and listen to music while I breathe the fresh air, which makes me feel really calm and refreshed.

Errors: 'pubs' is likely wrong word choice given context (parks vs pubs); 'the bench' should be 'a bench' because it is not a specific bench. Also needed commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'parks' to match topic, use indefinite article 'a bench' when not referring to a specific bench, and add commas before conjunctions and relative clauses.

× I would like to buy some parks are really far from my house so I think if I have much times I will go to visit them and I will take some photos and I will make an album about parts that I.

✓ Some parks are really far from my house, so I think if I have much time I will visit them; I will take some photos and make an album about those parks.

Errors: The original is an incoherent run-on with wrong verb 'buy' instead of 'some' placement; 'much times' is incorrect quantifier; 'parts' should be 'parks'; sentence ends incomplete. Suggestions: Start with 'Some parks...', use 'much time' or better 'enough time' or 'a lot of time', use 'visit' without 'go to' twice, and combine actions succinctly. Ensure object words are correct ('parks' not 'parts').

× Honestly I don't know every parks in the world so if I go to other country I would like to visit and take photo in that too.

✓ Honestly, I don't know every park in the world, so if I go to another country I would like to visit parks there and take photos too.

Errors: 'every parks' mixes singular quantifier with plural noun; should be 'every park' or 'all the parks'. 'Other country' needs article 'another country'. 'Take photo' should be plural 'take photos'. Suggestions: Use matching quantifier and noun ('every park' or 'all the parks'), use 'another country' for a non-specific single country, and pluralize 'photos' for general activity.