Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and keep tense consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence about childhood, then add one or two concise supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid long run-on sentences and unnecessary location shifts.

Example: No, I didn't enjoy going to parks when I was a child. However, that changed after I moved to Sydney, because I now live near a public park and often walk there on weekend mornings and in the evenings.

Suggestion: Use a short clear affirmation then give specific routine details with correct prepositions and word order. Use linking words like 'usually' or 'often' correctly and avoid redundant phrases such as 'like enjoy'.

Example: Yes, I do. I really enjoy walking in the park. Usually I go on weekend evenings and early on weekday mornings when I have time.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Use concise phrasing and correct collocations like 'exercise easily' => 'exercise easily' is okay but 'exercise more easily' or 'exercise conveniently' sounds better.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in Bangkok. More parks would make it easier for residents to exercise, relax and enjoy fresh air on weekends, which could improve public health.

Suggestion: Mention the park clearly, use correct time references and avoid fillers like 'uh'. Give specific reasons and describe features with accurate grammar (e.g., 'opened two years ago', 'cleaner', 'new benches').

Example: Yes. I want to visit Benzac Park, which opened two years ago after renovations. It has new benches, improved paths and cleaner green spaces, so I think it will be a pleasant place to relax.

× Well, I didn't like going to the park when I was a child, but when I grow up I enjoy walking to the park so much because I moved to Sydney and I live near the public park so I visit often late in the morning on weekends and in the evening of.

✓ Well, I didn't like going to the park when I was a child, but when I grew up I enjoyed walking to the park so much because I moved to Sydney and I lived near the public park, so I visited often late in the morning on weekends and in the evenings.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'When I grow up' should be past 'when I grew up'; 'I enjoy' should be past 'I enjoyed'; 'I live' and 'I visit' should match past narrative 'I lived' and 'I visited'. Also pluralize 'evening' to 'evenings'. Suggest keeping past tense consistently when describing past life events and ensure plural forms for recurring times.

× Yes I do, I really like enjoy walking to the park so much. I usually go in the evening of weekends and early morning enough weekdays.

✓ Yes I do, I really enjoy walking to the park so much. I usually go on weekend evenings and early on weekdays.

'Like enjoy' is redundant; use either 'like' or 'enjoy' — 'enjoy' fits naturally. Prepositions and noun forms are incorrect: use 'on weekend evenings' (correct preposition and plural) and 'early on weekdays'. 'Enough' is incorrect here and removed. Ensure correct collocations for time expressions.

× Well, my hometown is in Bangkok, so I would say that I would like to see more parks in my hometown because people can go exercise very easily and get some fresh air on weekends.

✓ Well, my hometown is in Bangkok, so I would say that I would like to see more parks in my hometown because people can exercise more easily and get some fresh air on weekends.

The phrase 'go exercise' is nonstandard; use 'exercise' or 'go to exercise'. Also 'very easily' is awkward with 'go exercise'; change to 'exercise more easily' for clearer modal meaning. The modal 'would' is acceptable; adjust verb collocation for natural English.

× Yes, I want to go to uh, the Benzac Park because it is a brand new park opened by the Bangkok governor last two years and it was renovated, new benches and more clean.

✓ Yes, I want to go to, uh, Benzac Park because it is a brand new park opened by the Bangkok governor two years ago and it was renovated with new benches and is cleaner.

Time expression 'last two years' is incorrect for a completed past event; use 'two years ago'. 'Opened by the Bangkok governor' is acceptable but needs the past time marker. 'Renovated, new benches and more clean' is ungrammatical: use 'renovated with new benches' and comparative 'is cleaner'. Maintain consistent past or present depending on intended meaning; here the park exists now, so 'is a brand new park' then 'opened two years ago' and 'is cleaner' are appropriate.