Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Use past tense consistently, add one or two specific details (who, what activities) and a linking word to improve coherence. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my childhood friends to play football and fly kites. Usually we arrived early, around 6:00 AM, and stayed until it was time to go to school. Those mornings helped me feel refreshed and ready for the day.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence in present tense, then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/so). Use correct collocations (refresh/relax my mind, beautiful fountains) and avoid vague adjectives like 'glamly'. Keep it concise and grammatical.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and clear my mind. For example, I like watching children play and admiring the flowers and fountains, which feel very calming. I usually visit a nearby park once or twice a week.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give specific reasons and comparisons. Use correct vocabulary (metropolitan, relax) and avoid repetition. Use a linking word (for example/because) to present supporting details and mention specific features you appreciate and how more parks would benefit the city.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because in a busy metropolitan area they provide important green space. For instance, additional parks with gardens, playgrounds and fountains would give people places to relax and exercise. This would improve residents' health and make the city feel more pleasant.

Suggestion: Name the park clearly, use future tense or present conditional, and give 2–3 specific reasons why you want to visit (features, atmosphere, activities). Use linking words (for example, because, and) and keep sentences grammatical and concise.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Company Garden in the future because I have heard it has beautiful fountains and large playgrounds. Also, people say it is a friendly place where visitors often chat and share food at picnic areas. I think it would be a relaxing and sociable place to spend an afternoon.

× Yes, I was child I want to go to the park for playing with my childhood friends so from the early in the morning I woke up around 6:00 AM and I for the school and back home at 2:00 PM so I want to refresh my.

✓ Yes, I was a child. I wanted to go to the park to play with my childhood friends, so I woke up early, around 6:00 AM, went to school, and returned home at 2:00 PM to relax.

The original contains run-on sentences, missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and awkward phrasing. Break into clear sentences, add the article 'a' before child, use past tense 'wanted' and 'woke' to match 'as a child', use 'to play' after 'go' not 'for playing', and use 'returned' and 'to relax' for clarity. Suggestion: break long clauses into separate sentences and ensure consistent past tense for childhood descriptions.

× Yes, right now I want to go to the park for refreshing and relaxing my mind and I usually very happy to see the child while they are playing and see the fountains and flowers which is the glamly effect and relax my mind so.

✓ Yes, right now I like to go to the park to refresh and relax my mind. I am usually very happy to see children playing and to see fountains and flowers, which have a calming effect and help me relax.

Errors include incorrect verb forms ('want' vs 'like' for habitual present), incorrect gerund use ('for refreshing' should be 'to refresh'), missing auxiliary in 'I am usually very happy', plural noun 'child' should be 'children', and awkward phrase 'glamly effect' intended as 'calming effect'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, use 'to' + verb for purpose, use correct plural nouns, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× Yes, I would like to visit more parks in my city because I'm living in the metropolitan city and there are a lot of parks and they have a different perspective to make the different, different parks. So they admire me, the flowers, fountains, swings. So I usually go there for laxing.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit more parks in my city because I live in a metropolitan area that has many parks with different features. I admire the flowers, fountains, and swings, so I usually go there to relax.

Problems: incorrect present continuous 'I'm living' should be simple present 'I live' for general fact; awkward phrases 'different perspective to make the different, different parks' unclear and rewritten as 'different features'; 'they admire me' incorrect pronoun and meaning—should be 'I admire'; 'laxing' is misspelled and wrong form—use 'relax'. Suggestion: state general facts with simple present, use clear nouns for park features, and use correct verb forms and pronouns.

× Yes, I would like to visit the park in future that is Company Garden.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the park in the future called Company Garden.

Missing article 'the' before 'future' and awkward noun phrase order. Also 'that is Company Garden' is unnatural; use 'called' or 'named'. Suggestion: use 'in the future' and 'called' to introduce the park's name.

× There is a lot of things which admire me, fountains and I'm very happy to see the child while they are playing and swings and people interact me and I share a lot of things with the people and they also shared with me.

✓ There are a lot of things I admire, such as the fountains. I am very happy to see children playing on the swings. People interact with me, and I share many things with them, and they share with me as well.

Multiple problems: 'There is a lot of things' subject-verb agreement and quantifier—should be 'There are a lot of things' (also covered by other types) but main issue here is pronoun and verb use: 'which admire me' is wrong; people do not admire the speaker—speaker admires features. 'child' should be 'children'. 'People interact me' needs preposition 'with'. 'They also shared with me' tense inconsistency—use simple present 'share' for habitual interactions. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns, appropriate verbs for interactions, include necessary prepositions, and keep tense consistent.