Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise, correct grammar and remove repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Watch verb tense consistency and article use.

Example: Yes, I loved going to the park near my house when I was a child. Because my bedroom was small and often felt cramped, visiting the park gave me fresh air and space to run around, which helped me relax and feel happier.

Suggestion: Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'wander', 'I am always at home'); use one linking phrase to connect idea of reducing screen time to health benefit. Keep to two to three sentences and be specific about frequency or activities.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually wander there a few times a week to reduce my screen time, because sitting in bed watching films strains my eyes and parks give me a chance to move and relax.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Remove tag questions like 'right?' and fix repetitions. You can mention a specific benefit or example of how parks would help.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Because traffic causes heavy air pollution, additional green spaces and gardens would help improve air quality and provide cleaner places for people to exercise.

Suggestion: Be precise and correct grammar (e.g., 'the biggest zoo', avoid 'anymore' here). State one clear reason and one detail about what you expect to see. Keep it to two sentences and avoid repeating words.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Hong Wong Park in Ho Chi Minh City. I have heard it contains the country's biggest zoo with many native species, which I find fascinating because I enjoy seeing wildlife and learning about conservation.

× I used to go to the park near my house because my my room was quite small so I feel a bit cramped.

✓ I used to go to the park near my house because my room was quite small, so I felt a bit cramped.

Run-on and tense inconsistency: the sentence mixes past ('used to', 'was') with present ('feel'). Correct by keeping past tense throughout for a habitual past action. Also remove duplicated word 'my'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use commas to separate clauses.

× So go going to the parks gave me a chance to immerse myself in some clean atmosphere and I feel very relaxed.

✓ So going to the parks gave me a chance to immerse myself in some clean air, and I felt very relaxed.

Incorrect duplication 'go going' and noun choice 'atmosphere' is unnatural here. Use 'going' as the gerund after 'So'. Keep past tense 'gave' and 'felt' for past habit. 'Clean air' is more natural than 'clean atmosphere'. Use a comma before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses.

× Yes, of course, I usually wonder around the park and I think it is a good way to reduce my screen time, because now I always at home and I always curl up in my bed with my phone to watch some movies and I think it is not good for my eye to become more strained.

✓ Yes, of course. I usually wander around the park, and I think it is a good way to reduce my screen time, because now I am always at home and I always curl up in my bed with my phone to watch movies, which I think is not good for my eyes and makes them more strained.

Multiple issues: 'wonder' is wrong verb; use 'wander'. Missing verb 'am' in 'I always at home' — add 'am'. Tense and agreement: keep present simple for habitual actions. 'Watch some movies' -> 'watch movies' is fine; improved flow by replacing 'and I think it is not good for my eye to become more strained' with 'which I think is not good for my eyes and makes them more strained' for correct plural 'eyes' and clearer causation.

× Yes, I live in a large city with a lot of air pollution from public and private vehicles right?

✓ Yes, I live in a large city with a lot of air pollution from public and private vehicles.

The tag question 'right?' is unnecessary and colloquial in this formal answer; removing it produces a clearer sentence. Structure otherwise correct. Keep present simple for a current fact.

× So I would like to see more parks and green spaces such as gardens to improve air quality of my my city.

✓ So I would like to see more parks and green spaces such as gardens to improve the air quality of my city.

Duplicate 'my' should be removed. Missing definite article 'the' before 'air quality' is required when referring to a specific city's air quality. Suggestion: include 'the' and remove duplication.

× I would like to go to the Hong Wong Park in the Ho Chi Minh City because I have heard that it has a biggest zoo in my country and has a lot of wildlife anymore and I I think it's really fascinating and interesting.

✓ I would like to go to Hong Wong Park in Ho Chi Minh City because I have heard that it has the biggest zoo in my country and a lot of wildlife, and I think it's really fascinating and interesting.

Articles and place names: do not use 'the' before proper names like 'Ho Chi Minh City'. Use 'the biggest' when comparing one zoo as largest. Remove 'anymore' which is incorrect here. Remove duplicate 'I'. Also redundant adjectives 'fascinating and interesting' could be simplified but both are acceptable; keep both if needed. Maintain present conditional 'would like' for future desire.