Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (use past tense for childhood). Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly.

Example: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because my parents often took me there for fresh air and relaxation. For example, we would sit under trees and play games, which gave me a break from studying.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct topic sentence in present tense, then give specific reasons with clear linking words. Correct common grammar errors (use ‘there is/are’, ‘go to parks’, ‘conversation’). Limit to 2–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary for ‘stress’ and ‘exercise’.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relieve daily stress from work and family life. In the park I often jog or chat with friends, which helps me relax and feel refreshed.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion followed by one or two specific benefits. Avoid repetition and incorrect agreement (use ‘we are’, ‘people who live there’). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ and be concise.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they promote public health and provide safe places for morning or evening walks. More parks would benefit everyone, from young children to elderly people.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement about the park, then give specific details you know and why you want to visit. Avoid fillers like “uh” and redundant phrases. Use linking words such as ‘because’ and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Bear Creek Park in the future because a friend told me it has many ponds and fountains and is surrounded by trees. It sounds beautiful and peaceful, so I think it would be a great place to relax and take photos.

× Yes, I do like to going to going to parks as a child because when I was small I like to be honest that with my parents I go to park for some refreshment and also to reduce some study.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because when I was small, to be honest, I used to go to the park with my parents for some refreshment and to take a break from studying.

Errors: incorrect use of 'to' before gerund (should be 'like going' not 'like to going'); repetition 'going to going to'; tense inconsistency ('do like' present vs 'as a child' past); missing articles ('the park'); awkward phrasing 'reduce some study'. Suggestions: use 'liked' for past habit, use 'used to' to describe repeated past actions, remove redundant words, use 'take a break from studying' for clarity.

× Yes, definitely. I still try, I still like to going to parks now because if you see there are so much burden in today's life like work stress, daily life stress, family stress.

✓ Yes, definitely. I still try; I still like going to parks now because there is so much burden in today's life, such as work stress, daily life stress, and family stress.

Errors: 'like to going' incorrect gerund form; 'there are so much burden' subject-verb and quantifier wrong (should be 'there is so much burden' or better 'there is so much stress'); list needs commas. Suggestions: use 'like going', use 'there is' with uncountable noun 'burden' or replace with 'stress', and punctuate lists with commas.

× So whenever we go to park, we can reduce our stress for doing some exercise and also have conservation with our friends.

✓ So whenever we go to the park, we can reduce our stress by doing some exercise and also have a conversation with our friends.

Errors: missing article 'the park'; 'for doing some exercise' should be 'by doing exercise' (preposition usage with gerund); 'conservation' is wrong word, should be 'conversation'; unnecessary 'some' before exercise. Suggestions: include articles, use 'by' to indicate method, choose correct noun 'conversation'.

× Yes, I always trying to see more parks in our city because if we have more, more more parks in our city, so it will be good for each and every person who are living there because it is good for health for doing some morning or evening walks for each and every person like his elder old child.

✓ Yes, I am always hoping to see more parks in our city because if we have more parks, it will be good for everyone living here since they are good for health and allow people to do morning or evening walks, including older people and children.

Errors: 'I always trying' needs auxiliary verb 'am trying' or better 'am hoping'; redundant repetition 'more, more more'; 'each and every person who are living' subject-verb agreement ('who are' vs 'everyone living'); awkward phrase 'his elder old child'. Suggestions: use 'everyone' and 'living' phrase, simplify redundancy, use 'including older people and children' for clarity, and ensure present continuous 'I am hoping/trying'.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future? Student: Yes, there is one more specific park which I like the most.

✓ Yes, there is one particular park that I like the most.

Errors: 'one more specific park' is unnatural; 'more' unnecessary when indicating a single park. Suggestions: use 'one particular park' or 'one specific park' and 'that' as a relative pronoun.

× It is Bear Creek Park because there, uh, I heard from my friend that it has so many ponds or also fountains there.

✓ It is Bear Creek Park because I heard from my friend that it has many ponds and fountains.

Errors: redundant 'there' and 'also' and filler 'uh'; 'so many' is colloquial but acceptable—'many' is better; incorrect repetition 'there' at end. Suggestions: remove fillers and redundancy, use 'and' to join nouns, place modifiers appropriately.

× It is so much beautiful and also covered with the trees.

✓ It is very beautiful and is also covered with trees.

Errors: 'so much beautiful' is incorrect; use 'very' or 'so' before adjective, not 'so much'; 'covered with the trees' article 'the' unnecessary unless specific trees. Suggestions: use 'very beautiful' and 'covered with trees' and keep verb 'is' before 'also' for clarity.

× So I like to visit there in my in future.

✓ So I would like to visit there in the future.

Errors: 'I like to visit there in my in future' incorrect tense and extra words; use conditional/polite future 'would like' to express desire and correct phrase 'in the future'. Suggestions: use 'I would like to visit it in the future' or 'I would like to visit there in the future' and remove extra 'my'.}]} PMID:27} /> Note: The trailing characters after the JSON are accidental and should not be included.