Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently for childhood, provide one or two specific details, and use a linking word for clarity. Also correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'I used to' not 'I usually I used to').

Example: Yes, I loved going to the Plaza park as a child because it had a large playground. For example, I used to spend hours on the swings and slides with my friends, which made weekends very fun.

Suggestion: Clarify your meaning, use correct grammar, and give specific reasons. Begin with a clear direct response (Yes/No) then explain with linked details, avoiding vague phrases like 'you don't feel'.

Example: Not really. I avoid parks near my area because they are often unsafe; there are groups of drug users and poor maintenance, so I don't feel comfortable visiting them.

Suggestion: Be concise and natural: state your opinion directly, then give one or two specific benefits with a linking word. Avoid repetition and filler words, and use lower-case for common nouns (peace of mind).

Example: Yes, I would. More parks and trees would improve residents' wellbeing because green spaces provide peace of mind and a quiet place to relax amid the city's noise.

Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary and grammar, avoid unclear words (e.g., 'grave' seems incorrect), and provide a specific reason. Start with a direct answer, then add a linking phrase and a clear, descriptive reason.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit parks in New Zealand in the future because they are famous for beautiful, peaceful landscapes. For instance, I want to see Milford Sound and its calm fjords to relax and relieve stress.

× Yes, I like going to the park, most especially in the Plaza park because in our Plaza there's a playground there.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park, especially the plaza because there was a playground there.

The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense. Use 'liked' not 'like', and 'there was' for existence in the past. Also 'Plaza park' is redundant; simplify to 'the plaza'. Avoid repeating 'there'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame of the question; use past simple for habitual past actions.

× When I was a child, I usually I used to play in the playground.

✓ When I was a child, I usually used to play in the playground.

Redundant subject 'I' is repeated and unnecessary. Both 'usually' and 'used to' indicate habitual past; keep one structure. Use past habitual 'used to' or 'would'. Suggestion: Say 'I usually played' or 'I used to play' and avoid repeating the subject.

× I'm not quite really because I'm already old in our Plaza or or parks.

✓ Not really, because I'm already old and I don't go to the plaza or parks much anymore.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'Not really' to answer negatively. 'I'm already old in our Plaza' is incorrect; age applies to person, and 'don't go ... much anymore' expresses reduced frequency. Maintain present tense for current preference. Suggestion: Use clear negative response forms like 'Not really' and follow with a reason in present simple.

× There's lots of drug addict and people you don't feel.

✓ There are lots of drug addicts and people who make you feel unsafe.

'There is' should be 'There are' to agree with plural 'lots of drug addicts and people'. 'Drug addict' must be plural 'drug addicts'. 'You don't feel' is incomplete; 'make you feel unsafe' clarifies the intended meaning. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement for 'there is/are' and pluralize countable nouns; complete the clause to show how people affect the speaker.

× If I give it a chance, umm, my answer will be yes, because umm, parks, parks and lots of trees can give you Peace of Mind, a peaceful life and you can calm yourself in the middle of chaos.

✓ If I had the chance, my answer would be yes, because parks and lots of trees can give you peace of mind, a peaceful life, and help calm you in the middle of chaos.

The conditional about a hypothetical preference should use the second conditional: 'If I had the chance, I would...' instead of 'If I give it a chance, my answer will be'. Use lowercase for 'peace of mind'. Use 'help calm you' instead of 'you can calm yourself' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use appropriate conditional forms ('if I had' + 'I would') for hypothetical situations and simplify repetitive words.

× If I give it a chance then I would go to the park in New Zealand because New Zealand has a grave and more scenic views that you can relax your mind as relieves stress.

✓ If I had the chance, I would go to a park in New Zealand because New Zealand has great and more scenic views that help you relax your mind and relieve stress.

Use the second conditional for hypothetical future trips: 'If I had the chance, I would...'. 'Grave' is likely a typo for 'great'. Use 'help you relax' and 'relieve stress' (infinitive) to express purpose/results. Avoid mixing 'can' and 'as'. Suggestion: Use correct conditional structure, fix typos, and use verbs 'help' and 'relieve' for clarity.