Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct tense and article use, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, and, so).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went on weekends because my parents and I would have picnics, and I remember playing on the swings and exploring the trees, which made those days very memorable.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and use correct grammar (I still love going to parks; I am focusing on my studies). Remove repetitions and fillers. Provide one specific reason and a short consequence using linking words (but, because, so).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely have time now because I am focusing on my studies, so I only visit them occasionally when I need a break.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary (skyscrapers, green space). Avoid hesitations and organize the sentence with a reason and a result using linking words (because, so). Be specific about why parks are needed.

Example: Yes, definitely. Because our city has many skyscrapers and little greenery, we need more parks so people can relax, enjoy fresh air, and spend time with family and friends.

Suggestion: Be specific and realistic: either name a type of park or describe exact improvements you want. Use correct sentence structure and vocabulary (cleaner, greener, quieter). Limit to one main idea with supporting details and use linking words (but, however, because).

Example: I don't have a particular park in mind, but in the future I would like to visit parks that are cleaner and greener. For example, I hope parks will have more trees, quiet picnic areas, and better maintenance so families can relax comfortably.

× 'I did, uh, prefer to go into park when I was, uh, when it was a weekend when I was a child because I want to spend the time with my family or my parents more and like spending time outside was very an amazing memorable for me.'

✓ 'I preferred to go to parks when I was a child because I wanted to spend more time with my family, and spending time outside was very memorable for me.'

'Singular and plural issue and general sentence clarity. The phrase "go into park" is incorrect; we use the plural "parks" or the article "the park." Also tense consistency required changing "did prefer" to simple past "preferred," and "I want" to past "I wanted." The phrase "very an amazing memorable" is ungrammatical — choose one adjective and correct order: "very memorable" or "an amazing memory." Suggestion: use simple past for past habits, use plural or add articles as needed, and avoid stacking adjectives without correct order.'

× 'I would say I still I still umm love to going to park but as I growing up I don't have much time to go outside anymore because I have to focusing on my study now. So I if ask me I want I I just say I do.'

✓ 'I would say I still love going to parks, but as I have grown up I don't have much time to go outside anymore because I have to focus on my studies now. So if you ask me, I would say I do.'

'Present tense issue and verb form problems. "love to going" mixes infinitive and gerund; use "love going." "Going to park" needs plural or article: "parks" or "the park." "As I growing up" is missing auxiliary: use present perfect "as I have grown up." "I have to focusing" uses wrong verb form; use base form after "have to": "focus." "my study" is better as plural "my studies." Also corrected conditional phrase to "if you ask me, I would say." Use consistent tense and correct verb forms.'

× 'Yes, absolutely, because CD means that uh, there's an like a lot of uh, how do you say them? A lot of Skyskeeper, a lot of uh, buildings around. So I want to have something green more like a park to relax and spending time with who you love.'

✓ 'Yes, absolutely, because the city has a lot of skyscrapers and buildings around. So I want more green spaces, like a park, to relax and spend time with the people you love.'

'Incorrect use of prepositions and word choice. "CD" was likely "city"; "Skyskeeper" should be "skyscrapers." "There’s an like a lot of" is ungrammatical — use "the city has a lot of." "Something green more like a park" should be "more green spaces, like a park." Also verb form: "spending time" after "to" should be base form "to spend time." Use correct prepositions and noun forms for clarity.'

× 'I don't have the specific park that I want to go in the future, but I'll find that I want to improve my like the park in my country to more clean, to have a a, to have a green or like the environment very quietly and like improve them more.'

✓ 'I don't have a specific park that I want to visit in the future, but I would like to help make parks in my country cleaner, greener, and quieter.'

'Past tense and general sentence structure issues. "I want to go in the future" mixes tenses and prepositions; use "visit in the future." "I'll find that I want to improve" is awkward — express desire clearly: "I would like to help make parks..." "to more clean" is incorrect adjective order and comparative; use "cleaner." "to have a green or like the environment very quietly" is ungrammatical — use "greener and quieter." Also plural agreement: "them" refers to "parks." Simplify sentence and use parallel adjective forms.'