Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking phrases (for example, "because" and "also") correctly and avoid fragmented sentences. Correct verb forms (e.g., "enjoyed going", "take me", "develop my communication skills") and remove redundancy.

Example: Yes, I loved going to the local park as a child because my grandmother took me there every morning for walks. She would introduce me to her friends, which helped me develop my communication skills and feel more confident around adults.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific, correctly linked reasons. Fix tense/word choice errors ("go to the park", "I practice what I preach", "I run into local friends and we chat", remove "in the past"). Keep within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "because" and "also" appropriately.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park. As a dietitian I try to stay active, so I walk there every morning because it keeps me fit and helps me reduce stress. I also often meet local friends there, and we chat, which strengthens our relationships.

Suggestion: Respond directly and give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Use singular/plural correctly ("high-rises", "houses"), and clarify actions (e.g., "I moved to a rural area"). Avoid trailing incomplete sentences. Add one prediction or consequence to enrich the answer.

Example: Yes, I would. My city is becoming overcrowded and many green spaces have been replaced by high-rises, so people struggle to find room to exercise. For that reason I moved to a rural area, and I think creating more parks would improve residents' health and quality of life.

Suggestion: Give a clear statement about interest, then add two specific details: why you want to visit and what you expect to learn. Correct grammar and word choice ("I'm interested in visiting a national park in Gujarat", "I have seen videos showing endangered species and conservation efforts"). Avoid filler words and finish sentences fully.

Example: Yes, I'm interested in visiting a national park in Gujarat. I have watched videos showing that it protects several endangered species and cares for a rare wildcat, so I would like to see their conservation methods and learn how they manage wildlife and tourism.

× Yes, I enjoyed lot going to local park during my childhood, especially with my grandmother because she used to take me to the park daily for a morning walk so that I can keep myself fit and healthy.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed going to the local park a lot during my childhood, especially with my grandmother because she used to take me to the park daily for a morning walk so that I could keep myself fit and healthy.

Incorrect or missing quantifier 'a lot' and missing article 'the' before 'local park'. Also tense consistency: 'used to' implies past habit so the purpose clause should use past modal 'could' rather than present 'can'. Suggestion: place 'a lot' after the verb 'enjoyed', add 'the' before 'local park', and change 'can' to 'could' for past reference.

× As well as she used to introduce to me lots of her friends so that I can develop a good communications care.

✓ She also used to introduce me to many of her friends so that I could develop good communication skills.

Incorrect word order and pronoun placement: 'introduce to me' should be 'introduce me to'. 'Lots of' is colloquial; 'many of her friends' is better. 'communications care' is incorrect collocation; intended 'communication skills'. Tense/case: use 'could' to match past habitual 'used to'. Suggestion: use correct verb-object order, choose appropriate noun phrase, and maintain past tense.

× Just because of her today I'm able to handle.

✓ Just because of her, today I'm able to handle things.

Sentence is incomplete and missing the object 'things' (or specific noun). Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: include the object the speaker can 'handle' and punctuate the clause.

× Definitely yes. Being a dietitian I practice what I preach so going to park is my daily routine and I religiously follow it.

✓ Definitely yes. Being a dietitian, I practice what I preach, so going to the park is part of my daily routine and I follow it religiously.

Missing article 'the' before 'park' and awkward word order 'religiously follow it' is acceptable but 'follow it religiously' is more natural. Also 'is my daily routine' shifted to 'is part of my daily routine' for naturalness. Suggestion: add commas for clarity and include the definite article.

× It keeps me fit and healthy and helps me to unwind from daily stress.

✓ It keeps me fit and healthy and helps me unwind from daily stress.

The infinitive 'to unwind' is acceptable but omitting 'to' after 'helps me' is more natural in English. Suggestion: use 'helps me unwind' for idiomatic phrasing.

× Sometimes I also run into my local friends so we do chit chat with them in the past and help us strengthen our relationship with the.

✓ Sometimes I also run into my local friends, so we chat, which has helped strengthen our relationships.

'Run into' is fine but 'do chit chat' is incorrect; use 'chat'. 'In the past' conflicts with present tense; rephrase to show past effect (has helped). 'Help us strengthen our relationship with the.' is incomplete and incorrect preposition and article. Suggestion: use 'chat' and a clear clause 'which has helped strengthen our relationships'.

× Definitely yes. My city has become overcrowded, most of its green space is consumed by high riser and skyscrapers and people are very struggling to do their daily exercise because lack of space.

✓ Definitely yes. My city has become overcrowded; most of its green spaces have been consumed by high-rises and skyscrapers, and people are struggling to do their daily exercise because of the lack of space.

Quantifier/plural errors: 'green space' should be plural 'green spaces' in this context. 'High riser' should be plural 'high-rises'. Verb tense/voice: 'is consumed' changed to 'have been consumed' to agree with plural subject. Missing preposition 'because of the lack of space'. Suggestion: make nouns plural where appropriate and include necessary prepositions.

× Even house are smaller in the region where I was living and that's why I also shifted to rural area and.

✓ Even houses were smaller in the region where I was living, and that's why I moved to a rural area.

Article and number errors: 'house' should be plural 'houses'. Tense: use past 'were' to match 'was living'. 'Shifted' is acceptable but 'moved' is more natural. Missing article 'a' before 'rural area'. The sentence ended abruptly with 'and.' Suggestion: pluralize nouns, match past tense, and include articles.

× Ionem highly interested to explore natural park which is situated in Gujarat.

✓ I am highly interested in exploring a natural park that is situated in Gujarat.

Missing spaces and auxiliary verbs: 'Ionem' should be 'I am'. Incorrect verb pattern: 'interested to explore' should be 'interested in exploring'. Missing article 'a' before 'natural park' and relative pronoun 'which' can be 'that'. Suggestion: include 'am', use 'interested in' + gerund, and add the article.

× I saw many video of it umm which depict that it has many endangered species as well as taking care of hybrid cat.

✓ I saw many videos of it, which depict that it has many endangered species and takes care of hybrid cats.

Pluralization 'video' to 'videos'. Preposition 'of it' is acceptable but 'videos of it' is fine. Verb agreement: 'which depict' should agree with plural 'videos'—it is correct; ensure 'takes care of' matches subject 'it' (the park). 'Hybrid cat' should be plural 'hybrid cats'. Suggestion: pluralize nouns and use correct verb form 'takes care of'.

× It has become a tourist attraction point and I really want to explore that and want to know the way they are keeping.

✓ It has become a tourist attraction, and I really want to visit it and learn how they care for the animals.

Awkward phrase 'tourist attraction point' should be 'tourist attraction'. Repetition 'want to ... and want to' is redundant. 'Know the way they are keeping' is ungrammatical; intended 'learn how they care for' or 'maintain the animals'. Suggestion: simplify phrases, avoid redundancy, and use clear verbs like 'visit' and 'learn how they care for'.