Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 注意语句的自然流畅与词汇准确性。避免重复（如“went went”），使用更地道的表达并保持句子简洁（不超过5句）。可以用一到两句支持细节并用连接词衔接。

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends and rode my bike around the paths, which made me feel free and let me enjoy the fresh air.

Suggestion: 修正断句和语法错误，避免短句碎片（如“Go in there. Helps me unwind”）。用连接词使句子连贯，并提供具体场景或频率以丰富内容。

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks when I'm tired from studying. I often go with friends to walk and talk, which helps me get fresh air and unwind after a long day.

Suggestion: 句型和词汇需要更自然，注意不定式和介词的用法（例如“let people relax”而不是“let people to relax”）。提供具体理由并用连接词组织观点。

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would give people places to relax and socialize, and they would provide safe spaces where children can play and exercise.

Suggestion: 注意用词准确（“castle views”可能是“coastal views”）。可以增加一句说明为什么这些特点吸引你，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

Example: Yes, I'd love to visit parks in Shenzhen in the future. I've heard many are right by the sea, offering beautiful coastal views and fresh air, and they often have large grassy areas where people can relax and have picnics.

× I often went went there with my friends and rode my bike around the pass, which made me feel free and enjoyed the fresh air.

✓ I often went there with my friends and rode my bike around the park, which made me feel free and allowed me to enjoy the fresh air.

句子中有重复单词“went went”，应删除多余一个。此外原句使用“which made me feel free and enjoyed the fresh air”结构不平行：前半部分是由“made”引导的结果状语从句，后半部分不应使用过去式动词“enjoyed”单独接续。应改为“allowed me to enjoy”或使用并列结构“made me feel free and enjoy the fresh air”。另外“pass”在此语境应为“park”。建议在写作时检查重复词并确保并列成分时动词形式一致。

× Go in there. Helps me unwind and feel happier.

✓ Going there helps me unwind and feel happier.

原句被分成两个不完整的句子：“Go in there.” 是祈使句且与上下文人称不符，“Helps me unwind...” 缺少主语，属于不完整句。应将其合并为现在分词短语作为主语或使用完整主句“Going there helps...”。建议注意主语与动词搭配，避免断句造成残句。

× It is because more parks can let people to relax and chat each other and can give children to play with each other.

✓ It is because more parks can let people relax and chat with each other and can give children places to play together.

错误包括不定式用法和介词搭配：动词“let”后不加“to”，应直接接动词原形“relax”；“chat each other”缺少介词“with”；“give children to play with each other”结构错误，应改为“give children places to play together”或“provide places for children to play”。建议记住特定动词的固定搭配（如 let + 原形），并注意与“each other”连用时常需搭配介词或改写为名词短语。

× I've heard that many parks there are right by the sea so you can enjoy castle views and fresh air.

✓ I've heard that many parks there are right by the sea, so you can enjoy coastal views and fresh air.

语句本身主要问题是词汇选择错误：“castle views”明显不符合语境，应为“coastal views”（海岸景色）。时态“I've heard”与后文“are”及“can enjoy”搭配正确。建议注意拼写和词义，使用语境相关的名词。

× Also I read that they have large grass areas where people relax.

✓ Also, I read that they have large grassy areas where people can relax.

原句缺少逗号和情态补充使语气更自然：将“grass areas”改为形容词短语“grassy areas”更符合英语习惯；并在从句中加上情态动词“can”以表示可能性或用途。“read”作过去时可保留（I read/have read），但此处语境也可用“I've read”。建议注意形容词/名词搭配和在表示用途时加入适当情态词。