Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Старайтесь избегать очевидных ошибок в словах и лишних междометий. Начните с чётного топик‑предложения, затем добавьте одно‑два конкретных примера и завершите кратким выводом. Уберите фразы вроде «uh» и исправьте лексические ошибки (например, «wrote my little bicycle» неверно).

Example: I loved going to parks as a child because my parents often took me there. For example, we would ride my small bicycle to the playground and have picnics, then spend hours on the swings and slides. Those carefree afternoons are some of my happiest memories.

Suggestion: Избегайте повтора «uh» и неясных конструкций; формулируйте предложения грамотно и логично. Используйте связки (for example, because, so) экономно и правильно. Исправьте фразы типа «so when before this I feel myself very free» на простые и понятные выражения.

Example: I still enjoy going to parks when I'm stressed because a walk and a coffee help me relax. For example, I often stroll alone for thirty minutes to clear my mind, which makes me feel refreshed and more focused afterwards.

Suggestion: Избегайте повторов («spaces spaces spaces») и выбирайте точные слова. Дайте одно чёткое мнение, затем конкретный пример и причину. Проверьте согласование существительных («collection of special plants») и порядок слов.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks because green spaces improve quality of life. For example, the nearby Botanical Garden is a favourite of mine: it has a large collection of rare plants and sports courts for volleyball and basketball, so my friends and I often spend the afternoon there.

Suggestion: Будьте точны в названии мест и избегайте лишних слов; используйте корректные имена собственные («Dubai Miracle Garden» или «Dubai Botanical Garden»). Дайте причину и, при возможности, добавьте конкретность (что именно хотите увидеть).

Example: In the future, I would like to visit the Dubai Miracle Garden because I'm passionate about plants. I want to see its huge floral sculptures and the rare species they display, which would be inspiring and educational for me.

× I often went there with my parents and I wrote my little bicycle to the playground where we had picnics and, uh, played on the swings and slides.

✓ I often went there with my parents and I rode my little bicycle to the playground where we had picnics and, uh, played on the swings and slides.

The verb 'wrote' is the past tense of 'write' and is incorrect here. The intended action is moving on a bicycle, which requires the verb 'ride' with past tense 'rode'. Use the correct verb to match meaning: 'ride' -> 'rode'. Suggestion: learn common verbs of motion and their past forms (ride/rode/ridden).

× It's my personal way to unwind so when before this I feel myself very free.

✓ It's my personal way to unwind, so before this I feel very free.

The sentence has awkward adverb placement and an unnecessary reflexive pronoun 'myself'. Remove 'when' and 'myself' and place 'before this' correctly. Use 'feel' with the subject 'I' without 'myself'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb structure simple: 'I feel' not 'I feel myself'. Place adverbial phrases ('before this') next to the clause they modify.

× Yes, my city has many parks and I would like even more green space spaces spaces.

✓ Yes, my city has many parks and I would like even more green space.

The repeated 'spaces' is an error; the correct uncountable noun is 'green space' (or plural 'green spaces'). Use either 'more green space' (uncountable) or 'more green spaces' (countable). Remove repetition. Suggestion: decide countable vs uncountable: 'space' is often uncountable in this context, so 'more green space' is natural.

× For example, the Botanical Garden nearby my home is one of my favorites because it has a large collection of special plant and sports courts for volleyball and basketball, so I often spend time there with friends.

✓ For example, the Botanical Garden near my home is one of my favorites because it has a large collection of special plants and sports courts for volleyball and basketball, so I often spend time there with friends.

Use 'near' rather than 'nearby' before a noun phrase: 'nearby' functions as an adverb ('nearby my home' is informal/awkward). Also 'plant' should be plural 'plants' to match 'a large collection of'. Suggestion: use 'near my home' or 'nearby' after the noun; ensure nouns in 'collection of' are plural when referring to many items.

× In the future, I would like to visit the Dubai in Botanical Garden because I enjoy visiting new special places and I'm passionate about plants.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit the Dubai Botanical Garden because I enjoy visiting new special places and I'm passionate about plants.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before 'Dubai Botanical Garden' when it is a proper name. Also word order should be 'Dubai Botanical Garden' not 'the Dubai in Botanical Garden'. Suggestion: use proper noun word order for named places: 'Dubai Botanical Garden' or 'the botanical garden in Dubai' if you mean the garden located in Dubai.