Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid filler words (umm) and grammar errors (subject-verb agreement, articles). Use linking words if you add details.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I loved the swings and seesaws, and there was even a small roller-coaster for kids, which made visits very exciting.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Begin with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Correct articles and word order (the park has many trees).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I like to get fresh air and relax. For example, the many trees make the atmosphere pleasant and cooler, which helps me unwind.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid unrelated phrases. Fix grammar (I would like my city to have more parks). Provide 2 clear benefits with linking words and specific examples (improve air quality; places for exercise). Keep within 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like my city to have more parks because they improve air quality and provide green spaces for relaxation. In addition, parks often have exercise equipment and paths for walking or jogging, which encourage people to be active.

Suggestion: Give a clear, concise response. Start with whether you plan to go or not, then give a specific preference with a reason. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like but or however.

Example: I don't have definite plans at the moment because my schedule is busy. However, if I go to a park in the future, I would choose one with city views because the scenery is beautiful and relaxing.

× I think that so many children that like to go to the parks and so did I umm, I love to go to the park because there are so many places to play like the swing, the seesaws and also the small roller coaster for children to play.

✓ I think that many children like to go to parks and so did I. I loved going to the park because there were so many places to play, like the swings, the seesaws, and also a small roller coaster for children.

Errors: unnecessary relative pronoun 'that' after 'children', article and singular/plural mistakes ('the parks' -> 'parks', 'the swing' -> 'the swings', 'the small roller coaster' -> 'a small roller coaster'), and inconsistent tense and verb form (mixing present 'love' with past context 'did I'). Suggestions: Remove 'that' after 'children', use plural nouns for general references (parks, swings), use 'a' for one small roller coaster, and keep tense consistent (past: 'loved', 'were') when talking about childhood memories.

× Still now I really enjoyed going to the parks because I want to, uh, absorb some fresh air and relax because the park was so many trees and it brings the atmosphere more pleasant and cold.

✓ Even now I really enjoy going to parks because I want to absorb some fresh air and relax. The parks have many trees, which make the atmosphere more pleasant and cooler.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('Still now' with past 'enjoyed'), article and singular/plural issues ('the parks' vs 'parks', 'the park was so many trees'), incorrect verb choice ('brings' with 'atmosphere more pleasant and cold'). Suggestions: Use present tense 'enjoy' for current habit, use plural 'parks' for general statement, say 'parks have many trees', and use 'which make' to link to the plural subject; use comparative adjective 'cooler' instead of 'cold'.

× That is a good question and I would like my savings has more parts because it help freshen up the air and it springs a lot of green spaces for people here to relax and it's also have many exercise equipment for the people here.

✓ That is a good question. I would like my city to have more parks because they help freshen the air and provide a lot of green spaces for people to relax, and they also have much exercise equipment for people here.

Errors: incorrect pronoun and noun choices ('my savings' -> likely 'my city'; 'has more parts' -> 'to have more parks'), subject-verb agreement ('it help' -> 'they help'), articles and quantifier ('many exercise equipment' -> 'much exercise equipment' or 'many pieces of exercise equipment'). Suggestions: Replace incorrect words with 'city' and 'parks', use infinitive 'to have', ensure subject-verb agreement for plural 'parks' ('they help'), and use appropriate quantifier for uncountable/compound nouns ('much' or 'many pieces').

× Oh this time I hope so but I have a busy schedule so I have no idea to go to the park and if I had to I would choose I would choose some parks that have the city views because it's really beautiful when you are in the.

✓ Oh, I hope so, but I have a busy schedule, so I have no time to go to the park. If I had the chance, I would choose parks that have city views because they are really beautiful when you are there.

Errors: awkward phrasing and incorrect infinitive use ('have no idea to go' -> 'have no time to go'), repetition ('I would choose I would choose'), incorrect clause ending ('when you are in the.'), tense and pronoun issues ('it's really beautiful' -> 'they are really beautiful' referring to parks). Suggestions: Use 'have no time' or 'no chance' for lack of opportunity, remove duplicate phrase, use conditional 'If I had the chance' and refer to 'parks' with plural verb 'are', and finish the clause with 'when you are there'.