Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (verb forms, tense agreement) and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often walked there with my friends and we would play games or explore the trees, which made me feel relaxed and happy.

Suggestion: Work on fluency and clarity: remove hesitations (umm), correct plural/singular (friend → friends) and use linking words to connect ideas. Provide a clear reason and one concrete detail.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go there with my friends after dinner because we like the fresh air and quiet atmosphere, and we often sit and chat about our day.

Suggestion: Improve coherence and complete the thought. Use correct collocations (coastal city, build more parks) and finish sentences. Add a specific reason or example to support your opinion.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Since it is a coastal city, adding more parks would create pleasant places to relax and exercise, and they could attract more families and tourists.

Suggestion: Fix grammar (have already gone, like having BBQs) and avoid fillers. Give a concise answer and one supporting detail about why that park is special.

Example: No, I don't have any particular parks I want to visit because I've already been to my favorite one near my home. It is a coastal park where I enjoy having barbecues with friends and relaxing by the sea.

× Sure, I really like go to park as a child because I really like take walks with my friends like what we was a child still and that's makes me really relax and happy.

✓ Sure, I really liked going to parks as a child because I really liked taking walks with my friends when we were children and that made me feel relaxed and happy.

Multiple errors: 'like go' should be 'liked going' because verb 'like' is followed by gerund for habitual past actions (Grammar ID 8 and 6). 'park' should be plural 'parks' for general places (ID 1). 'like take' -> 'liked taking' (ID 8). 'what we was a child still' is incorrect: use 'when we were children' for correct time clause and subject-verb agreement ('were' for plural 'we') (IDs 27 and 26). 'that's makes me' -> 'that made me' to match past tense narrative (ID 5). Suggestions: use past tense consistently for childhood memories, use gerunds after 'like', correct plural nouns and subject-verb agreement, and reorder the time clause to 'when we were children'.

× Sure, I often go to the park with my friend after the dinner 'cause we really like we really enjoy the place that umm about nature and we like to chat the things about.

✓ Sure, I often go to the park with my friends after dinner because we really enjoy places that are about nature and we like to chat about things.

Errors: 'my friend' -> 'my friends' if speaker means more than one companion; keep plural to match earlier 'friends' or use singular consistently (ID 1). Remove 'the' in 'after the dinner' -> 'after dinner' (article error, ID 22). Redundant 'we really like we really enjoy' simplify to 'we really enjoy' (sentence structure, ID 26). 'the place that umm about nature' should be 'places that are about nature' or 'places with nature' using correct relative clause and verb 'are' (IDs 26 and 3). 'we like to chat the things about' -> 'we like to chat about things' correct preposition placement (ID 11 and 20). Suggest using simpler structure: 'we enjoy natural places and like to chat.'

× Sure, because I live in a coastal city so umm I believe that it's really good condition to umm build more park and have a place to unwind and.

✓ Sure, because I live in a coastal city, I believe that it's a really good idea to build more parks and have places to unwind.

Errors: 'it's really good condition' is unidiomatic; use 'it's a really good idea' or 'good conditions' (article/adjective error, IDs 13 and 22). 'build more park' -> 'build more parks' for plural (ID 1). 'have a place to unwind and.' is incomplete; make 'have places to unwind' or finish the sentence (sentence structure, ID 26). Also remove redundant 'so' after 'because' (conjunction error, ID 16). Suggest phrasing: 'I believe it's a good idea to build more parks so people have places to unwind.'

× Umm, actually no, because I believe I have already went to the best park.

✓ Umm, actually no, because I believe I have already gone to the best park.

Error: 'have already went' mixes present perfect auxiliary 'have' with simple past 'went'. After 'have' use past participle 'gone' (ID 9). Use present perfect 'have gone' to indicate past experience relevant now. Suggest: use 'I have already gone to the best park' or simple past 'I already went to the best park' depending on nuance.

× Umm that's my that's the park near my home and it's a coastal park. I really like have BBQ there so that's.

✓ Umm, that's the park near my home and it's a coastal park. I really like having BBQs there.

Errors: 'I really like have BBQ there' should be 'I really like having BBQs there' — use gerund after 'like' (ID 8) and pluralize 'BBQ(s)' for general activity or 'a BBQ' for one event (ID 1). The trailing 'so that's.' is incomplete; remove it or complete the thought (sentence structure, ID 26). Suggest: 'I really like having BBQs there' or 'I really like to barbecue there' for clarity.