Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and incorrect prepositions, and keep sentences concise (max 3–4). Include one specific memory or reason to make the answer more vivid. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” appropriately. Also correct collocations: say “playground or park,” “sometimes,” and avoid filler words like “dear.”

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were a place for fun and relaxation. For example, I used to go to the local playground every weekend with my friends, where we would play on the swings and have small picnics with my parents. This gave me both social time and a calm break from school.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, reduce hesitations and fillers (“uh”), and use plural/quantifiers correctly (“a lot of greenery”). Add one specific activity you do there to support your statement and use a linking word like “because” or “so.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they have a lot of greenery and a peaceful atmosphere. For instance, I often go for a short walk or read a book on a bench there, which helps me relax after work.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repetition (“family, family and friends”). Provide one concrete reason or benefit (e.g., health, community space) and link it with “because” or “so.” Use more precise vocabulary like “recreation” or “public green spaces.” Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe recreational spaces for children and help families spend quality time together. Additionally, more green spaces would improve air quality and encourage community events.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, avoid awkward phrases like “dry picnics,” and be specific about what you will do there. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”) and correct word order: “spend a lot of time.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: In the future, I would like to visit the Botanical Garden in Lollipop because it is very peaceful and full of interesting plants. I plan to walk through the different themed sections and have a small picnic there, where I can relax and take photos of rare flowers.

× From since my childhood I was interested in going going to playground or part with my friends and sometime with my family which I will get entertainment and peaceful environment dear so I like going to park in.

✓ Since my childhood I have been interested in going to playgrounds or parks with my friends and sometimes with my family because I could get entertainment and a peaceful environment, so I liked going to parks.

Problems: incorrect prepositions ('From since' should be 'Since'); wrong preposition order ('going to playground or part' -> 'going to playgrounds or parks'); word repetition ('going going'); tense and aspect (use present perfect 'have been' to describe interest from past to present, or simple past 'liked' depending on context); article and plural errors ('playground' -> 'playgrounds', 'park in' -> 'parks'); awkward clause 'which I will get' corrected to 'because I could get'. Suggestion: Use 'Since' to indicate starting point, choose correct plural forms for general activities, remove repeated words, use consistent tense/aspect and natural conjunctions like 'because' or 'so'.

× In the present day also, I, I'm so interested in going to park because there is lot of greenery and the environment is peaceful where I can, uh, feel relaxed and spend my free time, uh, in the park. So I'm all interested there.

✓ Nowadays I am very interested in going to parks because there is a lot of greenery and the environment is peaceful, where I can feel relaxed and spend my free time in the park, so I enjoy going there.

Problems: article omission ('going to park' -> 'going to parks'); missing article before 'lot' ('a lot of'); awkward phrasing 'So I'm all interested there' replaced with 'so I enjoy going there'. Suggestion: Use 'nowadays' or 'these days' for present habits, include articles ('a lot of', 'the park' or plural 'parks'), and remove filler sounds. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Definitely, I like to see more parks in my city because that's the place where children can play a lot and spend their time with their family, family and friends and can get entertainment and relaxation.

✓ Definitely, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are places where children can play a lot and spend time with their families and friends and get entertainment and relaxation.

Problems: repetition ('family, family and friends'); singular/plural mismatch ('that's the place' -> 'they are places'); awkward use of 'can' repeated. Suggestion: Use plural agreement when referring to parks ('they are places'), avoid repetition, and simplify modal verbs by using 'can' once where needed.

× In the future, I would like to visit the Botanical Garden, which is located at Lollipop, because the place is very peaceful and we can get relaxed. We can also have dry picnics and spend time a lot in the park.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit the Botanical Garden in Lollipop because the place is very peaceful and we can relax there. We can also have picnics and spend a lot of time in the park.

Problems: awkward preposition ('located at Lollipop' -> 'in Lollipop'); informal phrase 'get relaxed' -> 'relax'; 'dry picnics' is uncommon—use 'picnics' unless a specific type is intended; word order 'spend time a lot' -> 'spend a lot of time'. Suggestion: Use natural prepositions for locations, prefer 'relax' as a verb, and use standard collocations like 'spend a lot of time'.