Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu; trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh dùng thì hỗn hợp không hợp lý (ví dụ “did” + “can” trong cùng câu).

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played team games with my friends and went for walks with my family, which helped me stay active and healthy.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và nối câu mạch lạc hơn; tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Nên tóm tắt ngắn gọn lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm khi ở công viên.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially when I'm stressed after a long day. For instance, I often take a 30-minute walk there to relax and breathe fresh air, which helps me clear my mind.

Suggestion: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên bằng cách dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ; thay từ lặp lại (“parks”, “do exercise”) bằng từ đồng nghĩa và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lợi ích cộng đồng.

Example: Yes, I would. More green spaces would allow neighbours to meet, exercise and relax outdoors. For example, small local parks could host morning tai chi or weekend family picnics, improving community health.

Suggestion: Sửa ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ chính xác; giới thiệu tên công viên rõ ràng, mô tả cụ thể lý do muốn đến và tránh câu mơ hồ. Dùng liên từ để nối ý và tránh sai trật tự từ.

Example: I would like to visit Crescent Park in Ho Chi Minh City in the future because it is spacious and lively in the evenings. People gather there to chat, enjoy street food and watch performers, which creates a fun atmosphere.

× Yes I did, I can play with my friends and did exercise or walking around in the parks to maintain healthy lifestyle.

✓ Yes, I did. I could play with my friends and exercised or walked around the parks to maintain a healthy lifestyle.

Original mixes past and present/modal incorrectly and has verb form errors. Use past tense consistently after 'Yes, I did.' Use 'could' to indicate ability in the past; use simple past 'exercised' or 'walked' for completed actions; include articles 'a healthy lifestyle.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct past verb forms.

× Yes I do. I still like going to parks. Now I am stressed. After a long daily and I want to go to the parks now to relax and get some fresh air.

✓ Yes, I do. I still like going to parks. Now I am stressed after a long day, and I want to go to the parks to relax and get some fresh air.

Sentence 'After a long daily and I want...' is ungrammatical. Replace 'daily' with 'day' and connect clauses correctly using a comma and 'and'. Remove redundant 'now.' Suggestion: combine related ideas into one clear sentence and use correct noun 'day.'

× Yes, I would. I like to see more parks in my city because in the parks people can play together and do exercise to keep fit and relax after a long day or enjoy the greenery.

✓ Yes, I would. I would like to see more parks in my city because people can play together in parks, exercise to keep fit, relax after a long day, and enjoy the greenery.

Mix of 'like' and 'would' reduces clarity. Use 'would like' to express preference. Improve parallelism in the list of activities and correct word order ('play together in parks'). Suggestion: use consistent modal phrasing and parallel verbs in lists.

× I want to go to create park at Ho Chi Minh City in the future because it is a large and in the evening it is so crowded and bustling, people gather together to talk each other.

✓ I want to go to the Creative Park in Ho Chi Minh City in the future because it is large, and in the evening it is very crowded and bustling; people gather together to talk to each other.

Several article and word choice errors: use 'the' before a specific park name 'the Creative Park' and correct name form 'Creative Park' rather than 'create park.' Remove extra 'a' before 'large.' Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formal clarity. Use 'talk to each other' (phrasal verb requires 'to'). Suggestion: use correct proper noun capitalization, appropriate articles, and the verb phrase 'talk to each other.'