Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答总体表达了意思，但存在语法和流利度问题：时态不一致（“like”应为过去式“liked”），多次重复词汇（“it it”, “relaxed, relaxed”），句子结构较松散。建议：1) 使用正确时态并开头给出主题句（I liked going to parks when I was a child）。2) 使用一到两句具体细节支持（什么时候、和谁、做什么游戏或运动）。3) 注意避免重复和填充词，控制在最多五句话内。

Example: I liked going to parks when I was a child. After school I often met my friends there, and we played football or hide-and-seek. Those afternoons were relaxing because we could run around and chat together, which helped me forget about schoolwork.

Suggestion: 回答表达了喜好和理由，但有语法和用词问题（“help me realized”应为“help me relax”或“help me realise” depending 意思；“meet some new friends”与“chat with the strangers”搭配不自然）；存在重复（“it's it's”）且连贯性欠佳。建议：1) 开门见山给出主题句（I still enjoy going to parks）。2) 用连接词（for example, because）组织理由并给出具体细节（看到哪些树花、如何放松、和谁聊天）。3) 注意常见动词形式和搭配。

Example: I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax. For example, I like walking among the cherry trees and noticing different flowers, and sometimes I meet neighbours and have short conversations, which is pleasant and refreshing.

Suggestion: 回答表达了愿望和一些理由，但语法错误较多（“I like it”语义模糊；“think see more parks”应为“I think having more parks”；“it makes me felt wondering”错误，建议改为“it makes me feel curious”或“wonder”）。建议：1) 用简洁明确的主题句（I would like to see more parks in my city）。2) 给出具体原因并举例（更多休闲空间、不同主题公园、儿童活动场所等）。3) 注意动词时态和主谓搭配，避免模糊表达。

Example: I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer more places to relax and explore. For instance, different parks could have playgrounds, flower gardens or lakes, so each one feels unique and makes me curious to visit.

Suggestion: 回答传达了意图，但语法错误和用词不当明显（“which is building now”应为“which is being built now”；“I and I'm really Cru crucial about it”不通顺，可能想表达“I'm really curious or excited”）。句子过长且不够连贯。建议：1) 开始用清晰主题句（There is a new park near my apartment I want to visit）。2) 用1–2句具体描述公园特色（位置、景观、为什么想去）。3) 避免冗言和错误搭配，控制句子长度。

Example: There is a new park being built near my apartment that I want to visit. It is small but located by the river and has many plants, so I'm excited to walk there and enjoy the riverside views.

× Yes, I like it, especially after schools and I met my friends every day in the park, you know, we can play some games or do some sports there and it it makes me feel relaxed, relaxed.

✓ Yes, I liked it, especially after school. I met my friends every day in the park. We could play some games or do some sports there, and it made me feel relaxed.

句子包含时态混用问题。谈论童年习惯应使用一般过去时（liked, met, could, made），而原句使用了现在时和过去时混杂，且有重复词“it it”。建议将叙述童年经历的动词统一改为过去式，并把“schools”改为单数形式“school”，拆分长句为短句以提高清晰度。

× Yes, for me, I think it's a good, it's a great way to help me realized. And you know, in the parks you can see many different trees or flowers and you can meet some new friends. You can chat with the strangers. It's it's interesting.

✓ Yes, for me, I think it's a great way to help me realize things. In parks you can see many different trees and flowers, and you can meet new friends. You can chat with strangers. It's interesting.

句中时态和动词形式错误："realized" 为过去分词/过去式，但此处应使用动词原形"realize"（help sb do sth 结构）。另外，冠词和复数使用不当：去掉不必要的定冠词“the parks/ the strangers”，使用复数或不可数形式更自然。删除重复词“It's it's”。

× Yes, I like it. For me, I think see more parks in my city is like exploring my own world. You know, you can see many different things in different parks and it makes me felt wondering.

✓ Yes, I like that. For me, seeing more parks in my city is like exploring my own world. You can see many different things in different parks, and it makes me feel wonder.

句子结构与动名词使用错误：英語中主语短语应为"seeing more parks"而非"see more parks"。另外，"felt wondering" 用法不正确，應為"feel wonder"或更自然的"feel amazed/wonderful"。建议使用动名词作主语，动词“feel”用现在时以表一般事实。

× I would like to talk about a new park near my apartment which is building now. It's small but it's near the river and there are many plants there and I and I'm really Cru crucial about it.

✓ I would like to talk about a new park near my apartment which is being built now. It's small but it's near the river and there are many plants there. I'm really excited about it.

原句中“which is building now”缺少被动结构，應為"which is being built now"表示正在被建造。此外短句“I and I'm really Cru crucial about it”有语法和拼写错误（Cru crucial 无意义），应改为表达情感的形容词如"excited"或"interested"。此外将长句分为短句更清晰。