Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with grammar, word order and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating words like "not" and use correct verb forms ("going to parks," "I preferred").

Example: No, I didn't like going to parks as a child. I preferred staying at home because I enjoyed indoor games and reading books. Also, the parks near my home were poorly maintained, so they were not appealing to me.

Suggestion: Use correct auxiliary verbs and plural/singular forms, and link ideas more smoothly. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons and a short consequence. Replace informal phrases like "my works" with "work" or "my job."

Example: No, I don't often go to parks now. I'm usually too busy with work, and the local parks are not very well maintained, so when I want a break I usually go to a cafe for coffee instead.

Suggestion: Be more precise and organised: start with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons connected by linking words. Avoid unclear phrasing like "I want to see more birds" unless you mean more greenery/wildlife. Use concise sentences and correct articles.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would provide green space and attract wildlife, which would improve the city's atmosphere. Additionally, parks offer safe places for jogging and relaxation, which is especially beneficial for older residents.

Suggestion: Keep responses direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence then add one specific condition. Improve grammar ("I don't like parks that much," "I don't have a specific park on my bucket list"). Avoid long, repetitive clauses.

Example: Not really — I don't have any particular parks on a bucket list because I'm not a big fan of parks. However, if I discover a well-maintained park that offers good facilities and a peaceful atmosphere, I would visit it for relaxation.

× No, I didn't like to going park as a child.

✓ No, I didn't like going to parks as a child.

Use the base verb with -ing after 'like' in past tense: 'didn't like going'. Also use the preposition 'to' before 'parks' and plural 'parks' to match general meaning. Suggestion: 'I didn't like going to parks.'

× I prefer to stay at home and play indoor games, reading books.

✓ I preferred staying at home and playing indoor games and reading books.

When describing habitual past preference, use past tense 'preferred' and parallel -ing forms: 'staying', 'playing', 'reading'. Also insert 'and' to join items. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds for activities.

× There are also not not very nice parks around me so I used to prefer staying at home.

✓ There were also not very nice parks around me, so I preferred staying at home.

Double 'not' is incorrect. For past context use past tense 'were' and 'preferred'. Use comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and maintain past tense consistency.

× No, I still not like going to a park because I remain too busy with my works and also there are not so good local parks around me, so when I need refreshment I enjoy a coffee.

✓ No, I still do not like going to parks because I am too busy with my work and there are not many good local parks around me, so when I need a break I enjoy a coffee.

Use auxiliary 'do' for negative present simple: 'do not like'. Use 'am' for present continuous state 'am too busy'. 'Work' is uncountable in this context, not 'works'. 'Not so good' is awkward—use 'not many good' or 'few'. 'Refreshment' is better expressed as 'a break'. Maintain plural 'parks' for general reference.

× Yes, definitely I want to see more birds in my city, as in parks you can go for jogging or any kind of relaxed refreshment you need.

✓ Yes, definitely I want to see more parks in my city, as in parks you can go jogging or do other relaxing activities.

The student likely meant 'parks' not 'birds'. 'Go for jogging' is incorrect—use 'go jogging'. 'Any kind of relaxed refreshment' is unclear; use 'other relaxing activities'. Keep consistent noun choice.

× So not for us, but also for older people, nice park is very necessary in our city I think.

✓ Not only for young people, but also for older people, nice parks are very necessary in our city, I think.

Use 'not only... but also' structure. 'Us' vague—clarify 'young people' (if intended) or remove. 'Park' should be plural 'parks' and verb agreement requires 'are'. Insert commas for readability.

× As I said, I don't like park that much so I don't have any specific bucket list that I want to go in the future, but definitely if I found a good park in the future which provide benefits also give me refreshment I want.

✓ As I said, I don't like parks that much so I don't have any specific places I want to visit in the future, but if I find a good park in the future that is pleasant and refreshing, I would like to go.

Use plural 'parks' and correct article use. 'Bucket list that I want to go in the future' is awkward—use 'places I want to visit'. Tense consistency: 'if I find' (present) with conditional 'I would like'. 'Provide' should be 'is' or 'that is' and 'give me refreshment' better as 'refreshing'. Use verbs and clauses that match conditional sense.