Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition, make a clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid verbosity. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. However, I didn’t visit them often because I focused heavily on my studies. For example, I usually stayed home after school to finish homework and read, so weekends were mainly for extra studying rather than outdoor activities.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and unnecessary repetition. Be specific about frequency or circumstances.

Example: Not really — I rarely go to parks now. I usually only go when friends invite me to celebrate a birthday or if I need a break from studying; perhaps once every few months.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, then add two specific reasons linked logically. Remove fillers like "you know" and combine short fragments into one or two sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe spaces for exercise and socialising. For instance, I could go running in the mornings and meet friends for walks or conversations in a pleasant environment.

Suggestion: Answer directly, avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. If you have no specific park in mind, say so and then give a clear alternative or a specific example of the kind of park you’d like to visit. Use precise vocabulary.

Example: I don’t have a particular park in mind at the moment. However, I would love to visit well-known green spaces abroad, for example the parks and alpine meadows in Switzerland, because I enjoy scenic landscapes and peaceful walks.

× I did like going to parks as a child, but I I used to not go very frequently to parks because I used to be more study oriented so I used to spend most of my time at home.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child, but I did not go to parks very often because I was more study-oriented, so I spent most of my time at home.

The original mixes past simple and 'used to' awkwardly and includes a doubled 'I'. Use consistent past simple for childhood habits: 'liked', 'did not go', 'was', 'spent'. Hyphenate 'study-oriented'. Remove duplicate word. This keeps tense consistent and clearer.

× Now as a grown up I don't like stepping out of my house so except if I have to go out with my friends to celebrate their birthdays or rarely when I feel exhausted studying or being at home is when I go out.

✓ Now, as a grown-up, I don't like stepping out of my house, except when I have to go out with friends to celebrate their birthdays, or rarely when I feel exhausted from studying or from being at home.

Use present simple for current habits: 'don't like'. Replace 'except if' with 'except when' for correct conditional phrasing. Use 'from' with 'exhausted' and remove redundant words. Add commas for clarity and hyphenate 'grown-up'.

× I would prefer having more parks in my city. Especially if I want to, you know, work out. And so for working out, for running or talking, I think parks would be a great place to do so.

✓ I would prefer having more parks in my city, especially if I want to work out. For activities like running or walking while talking with friends, I think parks would be a great place to do so.

Combine fragments into full sentences and use present conditional 'would prefer'. Replace informal filler 'you know' and correct 'talking' to 'walking while talking with friends' for clarity. Ensure consistent verb forms: 'want to work out', 'would be'.

× I as of now I have not thought about any or I don't have any part in mind which I have which I which I want to go in future. But if I get an opportunity to visit green spaces like Switzerland, I think though it's not a spark.

✓ At the moment, I have not thought of any specific park, and I don't have any particular park in mind that I want to visit in the future. But if I get an opportunity to visit green spaces in places like Switzerland, I would be very interested.

Use present perfect 'have not thought' for current state and present simple 'don't have' for current lack of choice. Remove repeated words and correct 'part' to 'park' and awkward 'which I have which I which I'. Replace 'in future' with 'in the future'. 'It's not a spark' is unclear; replace with a clear phrase 'I would be very interested' to express desire. Use consistent tense and clear vocabulary.