Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer grammatical, concise and directly state your feeling first. Use one clear topic sentence and then one or two supporting details (specific activities, who you went with). Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. After school I often went there with my friends to play football and climb trees, which was a great way to relax and have fun.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct verb tenses. Give one clear reason and a specific example, linked with a connector (because, although). Avoid unclear phrases like 'stand by the oldness.'

Example: Not really, because I have a heavy workload at university so I rarely have free time to visit parks. For example, I usually study in the evenings and prefer short home workouts instead of going out.

Suggestion: Start with a direct opinion then support it with specific reasons and one concrete benefit. Use clearer vocabulary (obesity → unhealthy diets, convenient → accessible) and avoid vague endings.

Example: Yes, I would. With unhealthy diets and sedentary lifestyles becoming common, more parks would give people accessible places to exercise and walk their children, which could improve public health.

Suggestion: Give a clear, correctly phrased answer and add one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, using linking words (because, for example). Correct facts (Aylestone may not be a US national park) or phrase uncertain information cautiously.

Example: I would like to visit Aylestone National Park in the United States because it is famous for dramatic volcanic landscapes and unique wildlife. For example, I want to see the rare rock formations and go hiking on the volcanic trails.

× Actually I want to park almost every day when I was a child because after school it it has lots of time to play fun so I can play games with my friends in the park and.

✓ Actually I wanted to go to the park almost every day when I was a child because after school I had a lot of free time to have fun, so I could play games with my friends in the park.

The original mixes present tense verbs (want, has) with a past time frame (when I was a child). Use past tense for actions in the past: 'wanted', 'had', 'could'. Also correct phrases: 'go to the park', 'a lot of free time', 'to have fun'. Suggestion: match verb tenses to the time reference and use natural collocations.

× Probably no because nowadays we have lots of homework studies to do so I didn't have a lot of time to want to park to relaxed. Also I think nowadays park almost uh, stand by the oldness.

✓ Probably not, because nowadays we have a lot of homework and studying to do, so I don't have much time to go to the park to relax. Also I think many parks are becoming old.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly and uses wrong forms: use 'probably not' (negative reply), 'we have' and 'I don't have' for present routines. 'Homework studies' should be 'homework and studying'. Use 'go to the park to relax' not 'want to park to relaxed'. Replace 'stand by the oldness' with 'are becoming old' or 'are in poor condition'. Suggestion: keep present tense consistent for current habits and use correct verb forms.

× Of course, because, uh, with the food people eat now, more and more people get fat, so umm, park is a good place to exercise everyday and it's very convenient. So umm, the more parks can invite.

✓ Of course, because with the food people eat now, more and more people are becoming overweight, so parks are a good place to exercise every day and are very convenient. Therefore, the city should build more parks.

Quantifier and article errors: 'park is a good place' should be 'parks are' to speak generally. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). 'More parks can invite' is ungrammatical; use 'the city should build more parks' or 'we need more parks'. Also prefer 'becoming overweight' over 'get fat' for formality. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and correct adverb form 'every day'.

× Well, I want to go to the Aylestone National Park. It is located in United States, umm, the area, the view there is a special in the world. It has some uh, volcano that is very rare. So maybe sometimes I want to go there.

✓ Well, I want to go to Aylestone National Park. It is located in the United States. The scenery there is unique in the world. It has some volcanoes that are very rare, so I would like to visit sometime.

Multiple grammar issues: add the definite article 'the United States'. Use plural 'volcanoes' if more than one, and match verbs: 'are very rare'. 'The view there is a special in the world' is awkward; 'scenery...is unique' is natural. 'Maybe sometimes I want to go there' should be 'I would like to visit sometime' to fit future intention. Suggestion: use correct articles for country names, pluralize nouns consistently, and choose natural expressions for uniqueness and future intention.