Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조를 명확히 하고 중복과 비음을 줄이세요. (1) 토픽 문장으로 직접 질문에 답한 후 관련 세부사항을 2문장 이내로 덧붙이세요. (2) 불필요한 반복(예: “to to”, “umm”)을 제거하고 시제·관사 오류(예: “A2 wheeled bicycle” → “an A2 wheeled bicycle” 혹은 단순히 “a bicycle”)를 고치세요. (3) 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하기 위해 연결어(예: because, so, which)를 사용하세요.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was in second grade my father bought me a small wheeled bicycle, so I rode it to the park almost every day to practice. Because of that, I learned to ride confidently and made many childhood memories there.

Suggestion: 문법(현재형·완료구조)과 발음(단어 연결) 오류를 고치세요. (1) 주어와 동사의 일치(예: “I still going” → “I still go”)를 바로잡으세요. (2) 불필요한 문장 단절(“So I visit.”)을 피하고 하나의 자연스러운 문장으로 연결하세요. (3) 빈도 표현을 명확히 하여 구체적인 정보를 제공하세요.

Example: Yes, I still go to parks. I have been cycling since middle school, so I often visit the park near my house to ride my bike and relax; usually I go there at least four times a week.

Suggestion: 답변은 자연스럽고 논리적이지만 어휘와 연결어를 조금 다듬으면 더 설득력 있습니다. (1) “Yeah” 대신 정중한 응답 “Yes”를 사용하세요. (2) 이유와 기대효과를 연결할 때 ‘therefore, because, so that’ 같은 연결어를 활용하세요. (3) 구체적 대안(예: 크기, 시설, 위치)을 추가하면 더 풍부해집니다.

Example: Yes, I would. Because there is only one small park near my house that is too narrow for cycling, I believe more parks would allow people to exercise comfortably and provide better spaces for family outings and community events.

Suggestion: 중복 단어 제거와 문장 간 연결을 개선하세요. (1) “lakes lakes” 같은 반복 실수를 고치세요. (2) 이유와 계획을 명확히 하고 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하세요. (3) 세부 묘사(언제, 누구와, 어떤 활동)를 추가하면 더 구체적입니다.

Example: I would like to visit Central Park in New York because it is very large and famous. I hope to walk around the lakes and maybe have a picnic there with friends, enjoying the peaceful green spaces and scenic views.

× When I was in the second grade, my father bought me A2 wheeled bicycle, so I rode it almost every day, umm to to the park to practice it and it was one of my.

✓ When I was in the second grade, my father bought me an A2 wheeled bicycle, so I rode it almost every day to the park to practice, and it was one of my favorite activities.

'A2 wheeled bicycle' needs the indefinite article 'an' because 'A2' begins with a vowel sound. Duplicate 'to to' is a typing/repetition error and should be a single 'to'. The fragment 'it was one of my.' is incomplete; add 'favorite activities' to complete the idea. Suggestion: include the correct article before abbreviations and complete sentence fragments.

× Yes, I still going to parts.

✓ Yes, I still go to parks.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb for the present continuous or should use the simple present. 'Still going' requires 'am' ('I am still going') for present continuous, but the intended habitual meaning fits simple present 'I still go'. 'Parts' is a misspelling of 'parks'. Suggestion: choose correct tense for habitual actions and check spelling.

× I have been practicing cycling since I was in the middle school, as I mentioned earlier.

✓ I have been practicing cycling since I was in middle school, as I mentioned earlier.

'The middle school' is unnecessary in general references to school level in English; use 'middle school' without 'the'. The present perfect continuous 'have been practicing' is correct for an action that started in the past and continues. Suggestion: omit the definite article in common school level expressions.

× So I visit. I often visit the park near my house to ride my bike and relax at least four times a week.

✓ I often visit the park near my house to ride my bike and relax at least four times a week.

The fragment 'So I visit.' is redundant and disrupts sentence flow. Combining into one clear sentence improves coherence. Suggestion: remove unnecessary short fragment and keep one complete sentence.

× Yeah, I would like more parks in my city because there is only one park near my house and it's not big enough for me to cycle.

✓ Yeah, I would like more parks in my city because there is only one park near my house and it isn't big enough for me to cycle.

Grammar is generally correct; minor suggestion: use 'isn't' for contraction consistency. No plural/singular error except clarity on 'more parks' which is correct. Suggestion: keep contraction consistent and sentence is fine.

× I want to visit Central Park in New York because it's so large and famous.

✓ I want to visit Central Park in New York because it is so large and famous.

Original sentence is correct; changed contraction 'it's' to 'it is' for formality. Present tense 'want' correctly expresses future desire. Suggestion: both forms are acceptable; choose according to formality.

× I'd like to walk around the lakes lakes and maybe have a picnic there with my friends because it looks like a relaxing green space for me.

✓ I'd like to walk around the lakes and maybe have a picnic there with my friends because it looks like a relaxing green space.

Duplicate word 'lakes lakes' is an error; remove the repetition. 'For me' at the end is unnecessary because 'looks like a relaxing green space' already expresses a personal impression. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and redundant phrases for clarity.