Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar: use present/past consistently, reduce repetition, and use linking words to make it coherent. Also avoid pronunciation/spelling errors (e.g., 'distressing' vs 'destressing'). Keep answers to 2–4 sentences and provide a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often visited on weekends after school because they helped me relax and were a place for family outings with my parents and siblings.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'destress' or 'relax' instead of 'made me distress'). Avoid repetition and tighten the structure: topic sentence + one supporting reason with a linking word. Make details specific and natural.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. They help me relax after a busy day and, moreover, I can meet neighbors and socialize with friends there.

Suggestion: Clarify your idea and correct grammar: use 'hope' instead of 'pray' if you mean expectation, and say 'invest in parks' and 'suitable for families and children'. Avoid vague phrasing and finish the sentence. Use one or two concrete reasons why more parks are needed.

Example: Yes, I hope to see more parks in my city because they provide safe, green spaces for families and children to play. If the government invested in family-friendly facilities, more people could enjoy outdoor activities.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid hesitations ('uh', repeated words). Name one or two parks and give a brief reason why you want to visit them. Use complete sentences and correct phrases (e.g., 'on my bucket list' and 'I hope to visit them one day').

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Korea Park and the KCC Mall Park because I heard they have beautiful gardens and cultural events. They are on my bucket list, and I hope to visit them when I have the chance.

× Absolutely, I really like to go in the parks, most specially in weekends after classes.

✓ Absolutely, I really like to go to parks, especially on weekends after classes.

Use of prepositions: 'go in the parks' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to parks'. Use 'on weekends' not 'in weekends'. 'most specially' is nonstandard; use 'especially'. Suggestions: replace 'in' with 'to', 'in weekends' with 'on weekends', and 'most specially' with 'especially'.

× Park is my way off distressing and also it gives me the opportunity to have a Family Day with my parents and my siblings.

✓ The park is my way of destressing and it also gives me the opportunity to have a family day with my parents and my siblings.

Article and word form errors: Missing definite article 'The' before 'park' when speaking generally about a specific concept. 'off' is wrong; should be 'of'. 'distressing' (adjective) is incorrect for the intended meaning; use 'destressing' (verb/gerund). 'Family Day' should be lowercase as a common noun 'family day'. Suggestions: add 'The', change 'off' to 'of', use 'destressing', and lowercase 'family day'.

× It also serves as a a stress reliever.

✓ It also serves as a stress reliever.

Duplicate article and spacing: There is a repeated 'a a'. Remove the extra 'a'. Suggestion: use a single 'a'.

× Yes I do. Even though I'm already an adult I still love to go to the park.

✓ Yes, I do. Even though I'm already an adult, I still love to go to the park.

Punctuation and flow: Add commas for natural pauses. Grammar is otherwise acceptable. Suggestion: include commas after 'Yes' and after the subordinate clause 'Even though I'm already an adult'.

× It made me distress and also give me the the way of of exhaling out bad energies or negative energies and also give me the the opportunity to socialize with other people.

✓ It makes me less distressed and also gives me a way to release bad or negative energy and the opportunity to socialize with other people.

Tense and word choice errors: 'It made me distress' is incorrect; present habitual action requires present tense 'It makes me distressed' or better 'makes me less distressed'. Verb agreement: 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular 'It'. Redundant words: 'the the' and 'of of' should be removed. 'exhaling out' is awkward; use 'release'. 'bad energies' is nonstandard; use 'bad or negative energy'. Suggestions: use present tense 'makes' and 'gives', remove duplicates, and replace 'exhaling out' with 'release'.

× Yes, I am hoping to see more parks in my city and also I'm also praying that the government would invest on those parks that has a more communication with with daughters and children, but they may also.

✓ Yes, I am hoping to see more parks in my city, and I'm also praying that the government will invest in parks that promote better communication between parents and children.

Modal/use of verbs and prepositions: 'would invest on' is incorrect; use 'will invest in' or 'would invest in'. Subject-verb agreement: 'parks that has' should be 'parks that have'. Phrase 'more communication with with daughters and children' is unclear and has duplication; likely intended 'better communication between parents and children'. Remove trailing fragment 'but they may also'. Suggestions: use 'will invest in', change 'has' to 'have', correct duplicated 'with', and rephrase for clarity.

× Actually, I have a lot in mind, uh, most especially the Korea Park, the Malaysia Park or the KCC Mall Park.

✓ Actually, I have a lot in mind, especially Korea Park, Malaysia Park, and KCC Mall Park.

Article and structure: 'the Korea Park' and 'the Malaysia Park' are unnecessary if these are proper park names; omit 'the' unless part of the name. Remove filler 'uh' and use commas appropriately and 'and' before last item. Suggestions: remove filler, drop unnecessary 'the', and use parallel list structure.

× I have a lot in my bucket list.

✓ I have a lot on my bucket list.

Preposition and article: Correct collocation is 'on my bucket list' not 'in my bucket list'. Suggestion: replace 'in' with 'on'.

× But right now I am looking forward to, to have an opportunity to go there and also praying that one day I may be able.

✓ But right now I am looking forward to having an opportunity to go there, and I am also praying that one day I may be able to go.

Verb form and sentence completion: 'looking forward to' must be followed by a gerund ('having'), not an infinitive 'to have'. 'praying' as a standalone needs a subject 'I am also praying'. Sentence ends incomplete 'may be able' needs an infinitive complement 'to go'. Suggestions: use 'looking forward to having', add 'I am' before 'also praying', and complete the clause with 'to go'.