Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with grammar and word choice, keep answers natural and concise, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g. 'to cycle' not 'to cycling'), and combine related ideas with linking words. Avoid small factual errors and redundant phrases.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my dad and my younger sister, and we would cycle around the paths and play on the swings. After playing, we often went to a nearby restaurant for a meal, which made the whole outing really enjoyable.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and reduce redundancy. Use one clear reason and link clauses smoothly (use 'because' or 'although', not both clumsily). Use natural phrases like 'I don't go as often' and avoid repeating ideas.

Example: I don't go to parks as often as I did when I was a child because my study schedule is very busy, even on weekends. However, I do visit a park occasionally when I have free time to relax.

Suggestion: Make comparisons concise and use accurate expressions. Replace vague phrases like 'starting to enhance' with 'become more like' and use plural/singular correctly ('gardens'). Provide a specific reason why more parks are needed.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city so it can be more like cities in countries such as Japan or Australia. More green spaces and public gardens would improve air quality and provide places for people to exercise and relax.

Suggestion: Avoid fillers like 'umm' and use correct future tense forms. Combine short sentences to be more fluent and correct verb forms ('visit a sakura tree' -> 'see the cherry blossoms', 'taking' -> 'take'). Be specific about which parks or experiences you want.

Example: Yes, there are several parks I'd like to visit. For example, I hope to go to Japan within the next ten years to see the cherry blossoms in person and take many photos in parks such as Ueno Park in Tokyo.

× We went there to cycling, playing at the playground.

✓ We went there to cycle and play at the playground.

The original uses an infinitive with to plus a gerund ('to cycling') which is incorrect. Use the base verb after 'to' for infinitive purposes ('to cycle'), and parallel verbs should match form, so use 'and play'. Suggestion: use 'to' + base verb or use gerunds in parallel: 'We went there to cycle and play' or 'We went there for cycling and playing' (less natural).

× After that we went to the restaurant to eat delicious foods.

✓ After that we went to the restaurant to eat delicious food.

'Foods' as a plural is usually used when referring to different types of food; for general eating use the uncountable 'food'. Use 'delicious food' or specify dishes (e.g. 'delicious dishes').

× Nowadays I'm not quite going to the park like when I was a child because I have my very busy schedule that I have to study every single day, even weekends, but however I still go there when I'm free.

✓ Nowadays I don't go to the park as much as I did when I was a child because I have a very busy schedule and have to study every single day, even on weekends; however, I still go there when I'm free.

Multiple tense and structure problems: 'I'm not quite going to the park like when I was a child' is unidiomatic. Use simple present 'I don't go ... as much as I did' to compare present habit with past habit. 'My very busy schedule that I have to study' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'I have a very busy schedule and have to study'. Add preposition 'on' before 'weekends'. Remove double connectors 'but however' (both mean contrast); keep 'however' with appropriate punctuation. Suggestions: use 'as much as' for frequency comparisons and keep consistent verb tenses.

× For me, I would love to see my country or my city starting to enhance like other country such as America, Japan or Australia.

✓ For me, I would love to see my country or my city develop like other countries such as the United States, Japan, or Australia.

Several issues: 'starting to enhance' is awkward; use 'develop' or 'improve'. 'Like other country' needs plural 'countries'. Country names: 'America' should be 'the United States' or 'the USA' and requires the definite article. Also choose consistent noun: 'my country or my city' is odd but acceptable; ensure verbs match. Suggestion: use 'develop like other countries' and correct country names/articles.

× I would love to see a lot of green area and a lot more of garden in my city.

✓ I would love to see a lot more green areas and many more gardens in my city.

'A lot of green area' is unidiomatic; use 'a lot more green areas' or 'more green space'. 'A lot more of garden' is incorrect; use plural 'gardens' or 'garden spaces' and quantifier 'many more'. Ensure noun number matches quantifier.

× There are multiple parks that I want to go.

✓ There are multiple parks that I want to go to.

Missing preposition 'to' at end makes sentence incomplete; original also acceptable rewording: 'There are several parks I want to visit.' The problem is more prepositional, but keeping to list, treated as singular/plural issue because 'want to go' needs 'to' or use 'visit'. Suggestion: use 'want to go to' or 'want to visit'.

× Maybe in the next 10 years I'll be able to go to Japan.

✓ Maybe in the next 10 years I'll be able to go to Japan.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (Included to indicate checked tense.)

× I will visit umm A sakura tree and taking a lot of picture there.

✓ I will visit a sakura tree and take a lot of pictures there.

Parallel verb forms are required after 'will': use base form 'take', not gerund 'taking'. 'A sakura tree' should be lowercase 'a sakura tree' and 'picture' should be plural 'pictures'. Also remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: use 'visit a sakura tree and take many pictures' for natural phrasing.