Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve clarity and grammar, give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 specific supporting details. Reduce repetitions and avoid fragmented phrases. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “and”) to connect ideas. Aim for 3–4 sentences with correct past tense forms.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My father and I often went in the afternoons, and I played cricket and football with other neighbourhood children almost every day. Because the park was close to my home, it became the main place where I made friends and learned team games.

Suggestion: Make your response more coherent and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No, with a brief reason), then give a specific example of when you go and what you do there. Use present simple or present continuous appropriately and avoid vague time expressions like “after 20”.

Example: I still go to parks sometimes, but much less than before. Usually I visit a park when I feel stressed from work or study, because walking there helps me relax. When I go now, I mostly sit and walk rather than play sports.

Suggestion: Provide a focused opinion with clear reasons and specific details. Correct word choice (e.g. “children” not “childhood”) and reduce repetition. Use linking words (for example, “because” and “for instance”) to connect your reasons to the opinion.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they give people space to exercise and children a safe place to play. For instance, a new park near a busy neighbourhood would encourage families to spend time outdoors and improve community health.

Suggestion: Give a clear plan and specific details about the park and why you want to visit it. Use correct tenses (Future: will/would like to) and avoid vague phrases like “etcetera.” Keep to 2–3 concise sentences and include a linking word (for example, “because” or “so”).

Example: Yes, I would like to visit my childhood park, Shishu Park, again when development work is finished. I plan to go there with my family because I want to relive my memories and show the place to them.

× So when I was a child, I used to go to the park in lot, sometimes in the afternoon me and my father used to go to the park and I always like to play.

✓ So when I was a child, I used to go to the park a lot; sometimes in the afternoon my father and I used to go to the park and I always liked to play.

The student describes past habitual actions, so past tense is required. 'in lot' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'a lot'. Pronoun order in English places the other person before 'I' in coordination, and 'like' should be past 'liked' to match 'used to'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for habits and keep verbs in past tense, and say 'a lot' instead of 'in lot'.

× I have like to play, play cricket or football like the sports with other kids all the time.

✓ I used to like playing cricket or football and other sports with the other kids all the time.

The original mixes present forms and incorrect constructions. 'I have like to play' is ungrammatical; for past habits use 'used to like' or 'liked'. After 'like' a gerund ('playing') or noun is required. Also use 'the other kids' or 'other kids'. Suggestion: use 'used to like playing' or 'liked playing'.

× Yes, sometime, but not a lot.

✓ Yes, sometimes, but not a lot.

The adverb should be plural 'sometimes' to indicate occasional frequency in present. 'Sometime' means at an unspecified time and is not appropriate here. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' for frequency expressions.

× So whenever there is some time after 20, after over your teenage, you feel like very low.

✓ So whenever there is some time after your twenties, after your teenage years, you can feel very low.

The phrase needs correct age reference: 'after 20' should be 'after your twenties' or 'after you turn twenty'. 'After over your teenage' is ungrammatical; use 'after your teenage years'. Use modal 'can' to indicate possibility. Suggestion: rephrase age ranges and use 'can feel' for general possibilities.

× So whenever I feel like very low after all the pressure on my head and then sometimes I used to go to the park and but in that time I generally not playing.

✓ So whenever I felt very low from all the pressure on my head, sometimes I used to go to the park, but at that time I generally did not play.

The sentence mixes present and past. When describing past habitual responses, use past tense: 'felt', 'used to go', and 'did not play'. 'In that time' should be 'at that time'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use 'did not play' for past negative.

× Park is a place like in all of Chilo Sefir.

✓ Parks are places all over Chilo Sefir.

The student uses singular 'Park' and awkward 'in all of'. If speaking generally, use plural 'Parks' and 'all over' to indicate widespread presence. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to parks in general.

× They can play any sports, they can play together, they can spend time in nature.

✓ They can play any sport, play together, and spend time in nature.

When listing abilities with 'can', use the base verb form: 'play' not 'playing'. Also 'any sports' should be 'any sport'. Suggestion: use parallel base verb forms after modal verbs and correct noun number.

× So it's healthy, healthy childhood, healthy lip processes.

✓ So it's healthy: a healthy childhood and healthy life processes.

The phrase 'healthy lip processes' seems to be a mispronunciation or wrong word; likely 'life processes' was intended. Use articles and parallel structure: 'a healthy childhood and healthy life processes.' Suggestion: correct the word to 'life' and add article 'a' before 'healthy childhood'.

× But most of the time in Bangladesh, the people are not, they're not going outside from home, so.

✓ But most of the time in Bangladesh, people do not go outside their homes.

The original uses a progressive form and redundant negatives. For habitual or general truth use simple present: 'people do not go outside'. 'Going outside from home' is unnatural; use 'go outside their homes'. Suggestion: use simple present for general habits and simpler phrasing.

× In future I would like to go to the ship park again, which is my childhood park.

✓ In the future I would like to go to Shishu Park again, which is my childhood park.

Add definite article 'the' before 'future' and correct the park name spelling 'Shishu Park' (assuming intended name). 'Would like to' is appropriate for future desire. Suggestion: use 'in the future' and correct proper nouns.

× But in this time Shishu Park is a close place and there are many work going process like developing this park and many etcetera, etcetera.

✓ But at this time Shishu Park is closed and there is a lot of work going on to develop the park, etcetera.

Use 'at this time' not 'in this time'. 'Close place' is wrong; use 'closed' to describe temporary closure. 'Many work' should be 'a lot of work' or 'many works' depending on meaning. 'Going process' should be 'going on'. Suggestion: use 'closed', 'a lot of work', and 'going on to develop'.

× So when I was older, I would like to go to park for one more time so I can.

✓ So when I am older, I would like to go to the park one more time.

The sentence mixes past 'was' with future desire. Use 'when I am older' or 'when I am older in the future' to indicate future time. 'Go to park' needs article 'the' before 'park'. 'For one more time' is better as 'one more time'. The trailing 'so I can' is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Suggestion: use 'when I am older' and complete the clause if a purpose is intended.