Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clear and direct. Start with a simple topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid unclear phrases and slang, reduce hesitations, and add one or two specific details (what you did there or a memory) using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents and aunts often took me there on weekends, and we would play games on the grass and feed the ducks. Those visits are some of my happiest childhood memories.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and make the structure clearer: start with a topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using a linking word (because, so). Use more precise vocabulary (relaxed, refreshed) and avoid repeating similar words.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After a busy workday, I often walk there because the fresh air and green surroundings help me relax and feel refreshed.

Suggestion: Give a clear reasoned answer and avoid vague phrases. Start with a direct response, then provide two concise reasons linked coherently (for example: because... and because...). Use correct grammar for plurals and articles.

Example: Definitely. I would like more parks because they provide places for relaxation and exercise, and they also improve air quality and reduce pollution in the city.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use a clearer structure: topic sentence plus supporting detail. Correct grammar (I don't have any specific parks I want to visit) and use precise vocabulary (visit, design, layout). Add a linking word (however/if) and one specific example of a country or park type to make it concrete.

Example: I don't have a specific park in mind at the moment. However, if I have the chance, I would like to visit famous parks abroad, such as Central Park in New York, to see how their design and layout differ from parks at home.

× Yes, it's made me remains from my childhood long time ago, and it's connected to my parents and my aunts, the very umm, the smart kwaijiu ah.

✓ Yes, it brings back memories from my childhood a long time ago, and it is connected to my parents and my aunts, especially the smart kwaijiu.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect verb choices. 'It's made me remains' is ungrammatical; use 'it brings back memories' to express recall. 'Remains' is the wrong noun. Add 'a' before 'long time ago'. 'The very umm' is filler; replace with 'especially' for clarity. Ensure subject-verb agreement and logical noun usage.

× Yes, actually I really like to spend some time, uh, walking around in a park for myself when umm, after working or after a hustle bustle day because it really makes me relaxed and chilling and.

✓ Yes, actually I really like to spend some time walking around in a park by myself after work or after a hectic day because it really relaxes me.

Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I like to spend' is fine, but 'for myself' should be 'by myself'. 'After working' is better as 'after work'. 'Hustle bustle day' is unidiomatic; use 'hectic day'. 'Makes me relaxed and chilling' is incorrect: use 'relaxes me'. Remove trailing 'and'.

× Definitely. I think Greens is not only help us relaxed and it also makes our country, our city with better air quality and yeah, that's all.

✓ Definitely. I think green spaces not only help us relax but also improve our city's and country's air quality.

'Greens' is nonstandard; use 'green spaces' or 'parks'. Subject-verb agreement: plural subject needs plural verb ('help' not 'helps') and correct verb form 'relax' (base form) after 'help'. 'Makes our country, our city with better air quality' is awkward; use 'improve our city's and country's air quality'. Remove filler 'yeah, that's all' for conciseness.

× Actually I don't have any specific parks want to go in the future, but if I have opportunities I really want to go to the other countries park to view the difference construction and structure at that time.

✓ Actually I don't have any specific park I want to visit in the future, but if I have the opportunity I would really like to visit parks in other countries to see the differences in construction and layout.

Sentence needed correct infinitive and relative structure: 'parks want to go' is incorrect; use 'park I want to visit'. 'If I have opportunities' should be 'if I have the opportunity' or 'opportunities'. Use conditional 'would really like' for polite future wishes. 'Other countries park' should be 'parks in other countries'. 'Difference construction and structure' is redundant; use 'differences in construction and layout'.