Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a clear direct response, correct basic grammar, and provide concise specific details. Start with a topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then one or two supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear words.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were close to my home and I went there every day with my friends. For example, we often played on the swings and climbed trees, which made those afternoons exciting and memorable.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use clear reasons with correct grammar and linking words. If you no longer go, say so and give one or two specific reasons (e.g., mosquitoes, distance) using correct tenses and vocabulary. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Not really. I rarely go to parks now because there are many mosquitoes that bite me, and the parks near my home are poorly maintained. If the parks were cleaner and had fewer insects, I would visit them more often.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and correct noun forms (elderly, children, parks). Avoid filler words and finish the idea with a concrete suggestion.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for elderly people and children to exercise and socialize. For example, a small park in each neighborhood would allow families to relax without travelling far.

Suggestion: Be clear about the place and explain specific reasons why you want to visit. Use correct names and simple descriptive phrases rather than unclear fragments. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition. Mention one or two attractions you are excited about.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Universal Studios in Tokyo because I have always dreamed of going there. I am especially excited about the themed rides and shows based on my favorite movies, and I would love to experience the seasonal events.

× Yes, well I'm a trial I'm going through the park every day and with my friends.

✓ Yes, well, as a child I used to go to the park every day with my friends.

The student mixes present continuous and an unclear phrase 'I'm a trial'. The context asks about childhood, so past habitual action should use 'used to' (present tense issue and sentence structure). Also 'with my friends' belongs after 'go to the park'. Use clear past habitual form: 'I used to go to the park every day with my friends.'

× I love go to play the swing and is more is many merry to me.

✓ I loved going to play on the swings; it made me very happy.

Multiple errors: after 'love' when speaking of past habits use 'loved' or 'used to love' and the verb should be in -ing form ('going'). 'Play the swing' should be 'play on the swings'. 'is more is many merry to me' is ungrammatical; express emotion as 'it made me very happy.' This corrects verb form and idiomatic expression.

× No I not let me go to park now because I'm not like the inside.

✓ No, I don't like to go to the park now because I don't like crowded places.

The student used 'I not let me go' which is incorrect. For present negative use 'I don't' or 'I do not'. 'I'm not like the inside' is incorrect; likely means 'I don't like being inside' or 'I don't like crowded places.' Choose phrasing that fits common reason for avoiding parks now. This fixes negative present tense and clarifies meaning.

× I when I go to the park every time I got many mosquito to follow me and my leg is throughout.

✓ When I go to the park now, many mosquitoes follow me and bite my legs.

Tense and verb choice errors: 'I got many mosquito to follow me' should be present simple for repeated current experience: 'many mosquitoes follow me'. Use plural 'mosquitoes'. 'My leg is throughout' is unclear; likely 'they bite my legs' or 'my legs get bitten.' This corrects pluralization and present tense usage.

× Yes, I really want you to see more park in my country.

✓ Yes, I really want to see more parks in my city.

The student wrote 'want you to see more park' which misuses pronoun and article. Context asks about parks in your city; use 'I want to see more parks' (plural) and 'in my city' instead of 'in my country' if local. Fixes article/number and pronoun misuse.

× I think that umm like there are of old, elderly and the children is really love to go there and they need some place to hang out and uh.

✓ I think that older people and children really love to go there, and they need places to hang out.

Problems: 'there are of old, elderly' is ungrammatical; use 'older people' or 'the elderly'. 'the children is really love' has subject-verb disagreement and wrong verb form. Use plural subject with 'really love'. Also 'some place' should be plural 'places' for general statement. This fixes pronoun and agreement issues.

× Yes, I want to go to the universal studio at Tokyo is always dream about it.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Universal Studios in Tokyo; I have always dreamed about it.

Tense and article errors: 'is always dream about it' should be 'I have always dreamed about it' (present perfect to express life experience up to now). Also use correct name 'Universal Studios' and preposition 'in Tokyo'.

× Umm, I think their high produce, uh, part is my favorite is my favorite movie.

✓ I think the themed areas based on my favorite movies are what I like most.

Original sentence is unclear and repeats 'is my favorite'. 'Their high produce' is unintelligible; likely referring to high-production parts or attractions based on movies. Rephrase for clarity: 'themed areas based on my favorite movies' corrects adjective/adverb misuse and provides coherent meaning.

× So I I really want to go there and they always crossover any, uh, alarms of enemy that are different season.

✓ So I really want to go there because they always have crossover events and seasonal attractions with different themes.

Sentence is poorly structured and contains unclear words ('alarms of enemy'). Correct structure: 'they have crossover events and seasonal attractions' conveys likely intended meaning. This fixes sentence structure and vocabulary to be coherent.