Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce redundancy and avoid fragmented phrases.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and cousins, and we would spend hours playing on the swings and running around together. Those outings are my fondest childhood memories because they felt carefree and fun.

Suggestion: Be direct and natural; avoid unnecessary details (like age) unless relevant. Use linking words to connect ideas and a clearer reason for liking parks now. Use accurate vocabulary for health benefits.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I like the open space for walking and light exercise, which helps me stay active and reduce stress. Also, being outdoors improves my mood and gives me a break from screens.

Suggestion: Clarify the main point and use specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like "good quality people" and use linking words to organize ideas. Give one or two concrete benefits of having more parks nearby.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are only a few well-maintained ones at the moment. Having at least two parks in my neighborhood would make green space easily accessible for children and adults and encourage community activities and exercise.

Suggestion: Avoid listing parks awkwardly and correct grammar. Give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit those parks and group them logically with linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

Example: Yes, there are several famous parks I want to visit in the future, such as Hyde Park in London and Central Park in Manhattan. I want to see their landscapes and cultural attractions because they are well known for beautiful walking routes and events.

× Yes, I did like to go to parks as a child at it is a very cool memory for me in which me, my family, my cousins, my brothers, sisters all are running around hanging out by the swings.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child; it is a very fond memory for me, with my family, cousins, brothers and sisters all running around and hanging out by the swings.

The original sentence mixes past and present incorrectly and has awkward structure. 'Did like to go' is better expressed as 'liked going' (past simple for a habitual childhood activity). 'At it is' is ungrammatical; use a semicolon or period and 'it is' to introduce the memory. 'In which me, my family...' uses incorrect pronoun and word order; use 'with my family...' and parallel nouns. Combine verbs with and: 'running around and hanging out'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for childhood habits, correct pronouns, and simplify clause structure.

× Just living life freely without any stress is a very beautiful.

✓ Just living life freely without any stress was very beautiful.

The examiner asked about childhood, so the speaker should use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is'. Also 'a very beautiful' is incomplete; use 'very beautiful' or 'a beautiful experience'. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame and complete adjective phrases (e.g., 'was a very beautiful experience').

× Yes, as I am much older now, around 22 years old, I like going to parks as it is a lot of fun for me to go out, enjoy in a more open environment to get a bit more cardio done.

✓ Yes, now that I am older, around 22, I like going to parks because it is fun to go out, enjoy a more open environment, and get a bit more cardio.

Use 'now that I am' for current age. 'It is a lot of fun for me to go out' is wordy; 'because it is fun to go out' is clearer. 'Enjoy in a more open environment' incorrectly uses 'in'; use 'enjoy a more open environment'. 'To get a bit more cardio done' is awkward—use 'get a bit more cardio' or 'get some exercise'. Suggestion: Simplify phrases, remove unnecessary words, and correct preposition use.

× And yeah, hitting good steps a day keeps the will away.

✓ And yeah, getting good steps a day keeps me motivated.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect idiom/word choice: 'hitting good steps' is informal and awkward, and 'keeps the will away' is ungrammatical. Replace with natural expression 'getting good steps a day' and clarify the subject 'keeps me motivated' or 'keeps my willpower up'. Suggestion: Use common idioms ('get steps', 'keeps me motivated') and include the appropriate subject.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very limited number of areas in which they have good quality parks in which we have a good quality people.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are a very limited number of areas that have good-quality parks and good-quality people.

Missing article before 'very limited number'—use 'a very limited number'. The clause 'areas in which they have' incorrectly uses 'they'; better to use 'that have'. 'Good quality parks' should be hyphenated as 'good-quality parks' when used as a compound adjective. 'We have a good quality people' is ungrammatical; use 'good-quality people' or 'people of good character'. Suggestion: Include necessary articles, avoid redundant 'in which', and use correct relative pronouns and hyphenation for compound adjectives.

× And I would like to see two or more than two parks in my own neighborhood.

✓ And I would like to see two or more parks in my neighborhood.

'Two or more than two' is redundant and incorrect; use 'two or more' or 'more than two'. Also 'my own neighborhood' can be simplified to 'my neighborhood'. Suggestion: Use concise quantifiers like 'two or more'.

× So it is an easy access for children as well as adults.

✓ So they would be easily accessible for both children and adults.

'It is an easy access' is incorrect collocation; use 'they would be easily accessible' to refer to parks (plural). Use 'both children and adults' for parallel structure. Suggestion: Ensure subject agreement (plural 'they') and use natural collocations like 'easily accessible'.

× I would like to visit the EOD park.

✓ I would like to visit EOD Park.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but drop the article 'the' before proper park names unless the name requires it. Use consistent capitalization: 'EOD Park'. Suggestion: For named places, omit 'the' unless part of the official name.

× I would like to visit the London park.

✓ I would like to visit London Park.

Same issue as above: remove 'the' before the proper noun 'London Park' unless 'the' is part of its official name. Suggestion: Use the proper name without 'the'.

× I would like to visit the Manhattan park as they are very of they are very high quality parks available in in future I will go to all these place.

✓ I would like to visit Manhattan Park because they are very high-quality parks; in the future I will go to all these places.

Multiple errors: remove 'the' before 'Manhattan Park' unless required. Phrase 'they are very of they are very high quality parks' is redundant and contains repetition—use 'because they are very high-quality parks'. Remove duplicate 'in'. 'In future' should be 'in the future'. 'All these place' should be plural 'places'. Also ensure subject 'they' refers to parks. Suggestion: Eliminate repetition, correct article and plural forms, hyphenate 'high-quality', and use 'in the future' for time expressions.