Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses, plural forms and articles. Avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played tag with many friends there, and we spent hours enjoying the swings and playground equipment. Because the parks had lovely trees and flowers, they felt like a peaceful escape.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons connected with linking words. Avoid fillers (uh) and incorrect nouns (oxygens). Use natural expressions for feelings and routines.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I visit a park every morning after my walk because the fresh air and quiet atmosphere help me relax and lift my mood, so I feel more energetic for the day.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison using linking words. Use correct phrasing (man-made, natural areas) and avoid vague terms like “things.”

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Shanghai currently has only a few small man-made parks, whereas cities like Hangzhou have many natural green spaces, so creating more natural parks would improve residents’ wellbeing and air quality.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then provide one specific detail about the park. Use correct name phrasing and avoid fillers and vague adjectives like “most nice picture.” Describe why you want to visit (features, activities, scenery).

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the largest park in Shanghai, called Pudong Park. I want to see its large lakes and tree-lined paths because I have heard it has beautiful scenery and peaceful walking trails.

× I enjoyed going to park to play when I was a child.

✓ I enjoyed going to the park to play when I was a child.

The noun 'park' needs the definite article 'the' and is singular; 'going to the park' is the correct collocation. Use 'the park' when referring to parks in general from the speaker's experience.

× I have a lot.

✓ I had a lot of friends.

The original sentence 'I have a lot.' is incomplete and uses present tense 'have' while the context is past. It should be 'I had a lot of friends.' to match past tense and complete the idea. If keeping 'a lot' alone, specify what is being referred to (e.g., 'a lot of friends').

× I had a lots of friends there and we play around and we enjoying happy time.

✓ I had a lot of friends there, and we played around and enjoyed happy times.

Multiple problems: 'had' is correct for past, but 'a lots' is wrong plural; correct is 'a lot'. 'We play around' should be past 'we played around' to match past narrative. 'We enjoying happy time' mixes forms; change to past simple 'enjoyed happy times' for grammatical past-form consistency.

× I love beautiful sceneries.

✓ I loved the beautiful scenery.

In English, 'scenery' is an uncountable noun; use singular 'scenery' rather than 'sceneries'. Also, the surrounding sentences are past-tense recollections, so use 'loved' and include 'the' for specificity: 'the beautiful scenery.'

× As I get older, I still like to go into the park and I go there every day after my walk because I can, uh, breathe in some good oxygens and air and just exchange my bad feelings out.

✓ As I have gotten older, I still like to go to the park, and I go there every day after my walk because I can breathe in fresh air and let go of my bad feelings.

Use present perfect 'have gotten older' to show change over time. 'Go into the park' is acceptable but 'go to the park' is more natural. 'Oxygens' is incorrect; 'oxygen' is uncountable. 'Fresh air' is the natural collocation. 'Exchange my bad feelings out' is unnatural; use 'let go of my bad feelings' or 'get rid of my bad feelings.'

× Of course Shanghai only has some human made city parks that is really small and not beautiful, but Hangzhou really has a lot of natural parks.

✓ Of course, Shanghai only has some human-made city parks that are really small and not very beautiful, but Hangzhou has a lot of natural parks.

Subject-verb agreement: plural 'parks' requires plural verb 'are' not 'is' (Grammar problem type 27 also applies). Use hyphenated 'human-made' and 'not very beautiful' is more natural than 'not beautiful.' Added comma after 'Of course' for clarity.

× I think we should keep more natural things in our city lives.

✓ I think we should preserve more natural areas in our city life.

'Keep more natural things in our city lives' is awkward. Use 'preserve' or 'protect' and 'natural areas' or 'nature' instead of 'natural things.' 'City life' (uncountable) is the correct phrase rather than 'city lives.'

× Yeah, of course. I want to go to the biggest Shanghai park, which name is Pujang, uh, Park.

✓ Yes, of course. I want to go to the biggest park in Shanghai, which is called Pujang Park.

'Which name is' is incorrect; use 'which is called' or 'whose name is.' Also 'biggest Shanghai park' should be 'the biggest park in Shanghai.' Use 'Pujang Park' without extra comma and filler words.

× And that is really, uh, beautiful, just like the most nice picture.

✓ And it is really beautiful, like the nicest picture.

Avoid filler 'uh' in formal correction. Use 'it' to refer to the park. 'The most nice' is incorrect; use the superlative 'the nicest.' 'Like the nicest picture' is a natural simile.