Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn; sửa ngữ pháp (thì, trật tự từ, động từ), tránh từ lặp và tiếng lắp. Ví dụ: nêu một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ các hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên hoặc cảm xúc). Hạn chế dùng 'umm' và từ không chính xác như 'anymore' trong ngữ cảnh này.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there on weekends, and I enjoyed playing on the swings and feeding ducks at the pond. Those visits made me want a pet because I loved being around animals.

Suggestion: Cần dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và câu phụ liên kết hợp lý; sửa ngữ pháp (thời hiện tại, số ít/ nhiều), và cải thiện tính mạch lạc bằng liên từ (because, so, although). Trả lời ngắn gọn (1-3 câu) nêu tần suất, lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks on weekends. Because I am busy during weekdays, my parents and I often spend Sunday mornings there, walking and having a picnic to relax.

Suggestion: Cần đưa ra ý chính rõ ràng và lý do hợp lý; sửa ngữ pháp (mạo từ, thì, cấu trúc điều kiện), và làm cụ thể hơn: nêu vì sao nhiều công viên có thể gây nguy hiểm hoặc nêu giải pháp. Tránh câu mâu thuẫn (Although... but...).

Example: I prefer a balanced number of parks rather than simply more. If parks are poorly managed, wildlife can be harmed, so I would support creating safe, well-maintained parks that protect animals and benefit people.

Suggestion: Nên trả lời trực tiếp tên hoặc vị trí công viên, dùng thì và trật tự từ đúng, tránh tiếng lắp. Bổ sung lý do cụ thể (điểm đặc biệt, hoạt động bạn muốn làm) và một chi tiết về khi nào bạn sẽ đi hoặc với ai.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit a famous park in Korea that I have read about. It is known for its rare animals and interactive exhibits, and I hope to go there on my next holiday to learn more and see the wildlife up close.

× When I was a child my parents used usually give me go to the park because I really love anymore.

✓ When I was a child my parents usually took me to the park because I really loved it.

The adverb 'usually' should come before the main verb phrase, not between 'used' and the verb; use 'used to' or 'usually' with simple past. 'Used usually give me go' is ungrammatical: use 'usually took me' or 'used to take me'. Also 'love anymore' is incorrect: past context needs 'loved it'. Suggestions: place adverbs before the main verb (my parents usually took), use correct past tense 'took', and replace 'anymore' with 'it' or remove it.

× So I would like to umm grow a pet so my parents understand this and they.

✓ So I wanted to grow up with a pet so my parents would understand that.

Sentence lacks clear structure and tense consistency. 'Would like to umm grow a pet' is awkward; use 'wanted to have a pet' or 'grow up with a pet'. The final 'and they' is incomplete. Suggestion: make a complete clause showing purpose or result (so my parents would understand that). Maintain past tense for childhood context.

× Yes, I still like going to the park with my parent in the weekend because I quite busy in the day.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park with my parents at the weekend because I'm quite busy during the day.

Use plural 'parents' when referring to both. 'In the weekend' is incorrect preposition; use 'at the weekend' (British) or 'on weekends' (American). 'I quite busy' lacks auxiliary verb; use 'I'm quite busy'. Also 'in the day' should be 'during the day'. Suggestion: correct pronoun number and include appropriate auxiliary verbs and prepositions.

× So in order to realize my parents usually talk took me to the park when I have a lot.

✓ So, to make my parents understand, they usually took me to the park when I had free time.

Original mixes tenses and incorrect verbs: 'in order to realize' should be 'to make ... understand'. 'Talk took me' is wrong combination; use 'they took me'. 'When I have a lot' is incomplete—likely 'when I had a lot of free time'. Suggestions: use clear causative phrasing 'to make ... understand', past tense 'took', and complete time expression 'had free time'.

× Although I like go to the park but I don't like to see more park in my city because if my country have a lot of park the animal will have a dangerous and so I think animal have to save.

✓ Although I like going to the park, I don't want to see more parks in my city because if my country had many parks the animals could be in danger, so I think the animals need to be protected.

Do not use both 'although' and 'but' together; choose one. Use gerund 'going' after 'like'. 'See more park' should be 'see more parks'. 'If my country have' should be past subjunctive 'had' or 'if ... were to have'; subject-verb agreement: 'country has'. 'The animal will have a dangerous' is ungrammatical—use 'animals could be in danger'. 'Animal have to save' should be passive or modal: 'animals need to be protected'. Suggestions: fix conjunction use, use gerunds, plural nouns, correct verb agreement and clearer modal/passive for protection.

× Uh, for my remember, uh, in the Korea have a famous park, uh, in this park have many special animal.

✓ Uh, from what I remember, in Korea there is a famous park, and this park has many special animals.

'For my remember' should be 'from what I remember'. Do not use 'the' before country name 'Korea' in general reference. Sentence structure requires 'there is' to introduce existence. 'Have many special animal' must be 'has many special animals' (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). Suggestions: use 'there is/there are' for existence, correct article use for country names, and pluralize 'animals'.

× So I really want to go to this park to enjoy and playing with this animal.

✓ So I really want to go to this park to enjoy myself and play with these animals.

Mixing infinitive and gerund wrongly: use 'to enjoy myself and play' (both infinitives) or 'enjoy playing' (gerund). 'This animal' should be plural if referring to many animals in the park—use 'these animals'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure for verbs and match number for nouns.