Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (umm), correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and give one specific supporting detail. Limit to maximum 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. However, parks were often unavailable near my home because of new housing developments, so I usually played in whatever empty lots I could find. I remember organizing simple games with neighborhood children in those spaces.

Suggestion: Answer directly and reduce hesitation. Use a clear topic sentence and give a brief reason and example. Replace vague phrases like ‘if I have to’ with definitive language and avoid repeated ideas.

Example: I don't often go to parks now, but I still enjoy them on occasion. I prefer quieter open spaces because they remind me of playing in empty lots as a child, which feels nostalgic and peaceful.

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary (use 'parks' not 'bars') and structure your response: topic sentence, two specific reasons with linking words, and a brief concluding sentence. Remove fillers and finish your thought—avoid trailing off.

Example: Absolutely. Parks are important because they provide safe places for children to play and for older adults to exercise. For example, playgrounds encourage physical activity for kids, and walking paths help seniors stay active and social.

Suggestion: Give a clear, specific answer: name the places and say why you want to visit them with one or two concrete reasons. Avoid filler words and repetition; keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I have a few parks on my bucket list, such as the ones in Kathmandu and Godavari. I want to visit them because they are known for lush greenery and peaceful atmospheres, which would be perfect for relaxing and taking nature walks.

× Umm, I used to love going to the park as a child, but the park we're not usually available because of all the housing being built in the society.

✓ Umm, I used to love going to the park as a child, but the park was not usually available because of all the housing being built in the neighborhood.

Incorrect present tense 'we're not usually available' conflicts with past context; also 'we're' is wrong pronoun/verb contraction. Use past tense 'was not' to match 'used to'. Replace 'society' with 'neighborhood' for natural English. Suggestion: Keep past tense for the whole clause when referring to availability in the past; avoid contractions like 'we're' when meaning 'was'.

× So I used to play in whatever the empty space I caught.

✓ So I used to play in whatever empty space I could find.

Original sentence has awkward and ungrammatical structure 'whatever the empty space I caught'. Use 'whatever empty space I could find' which correctly uses modal 'could' plus base verb to express ability/possibility in the past. Suggestion: Use common expressions like 'could find' or 'I found' after 'whatever'.

× Well, I usually do not go to any kind of parks, but if I have to then I would still love to go UMM.

✓ Well, I usually do not go to parks, but if I have to, I would still love to go.

Redundant phrase 'any kind of parks' is unnatural; 'parks' is sufficient. 'Would' is acceptable in hypothetical present but punctuation and filler 'UMM' should be removed. Maintain present habitual 'usually do not go' and conditional 'would' for hypothetical. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and remove filler sounds in formal responses.

× However, I still prefer going to the empty space like in childhood for the nostalgia.

✓ However, I still prefer going to empty spaces like I did in childhood for the nostalgia.

Mix of verb forms: 'prefer going to the empty space like in childhood' is awkward. Use plural 'empty spaces' and parallel past reference 'like I did in childhood' to make the meaning clear. Suggestion: Match plurality and maintain parallel verb structures when comparing present preference to past experience.

× Absolutely, the bars are really important for the children and you know, uh, the oldest people to get the all kind of physical activities.

✓ Absolutely, parks are really important for children and older people to get all kinds of physical activity.

Multiple issues: 'bars' is likely a mispronunciation of 'parks'; 'the children' and 'the oldest people' are incorrect articles and word choice. Use 'children' and 'older people'. 'All kind of' should be 'all kinds of' and 'physical activities' better as 'physical activity' or 'physical activities'. Suggestion: Choose correct nouns and plural forms, and use 'all kinds of' for variety.

× Uh, children love to play in the ground, so parks will help them to do physical activities and even.

✓ Children love to play on the ground, so parks help them to do physical activities and socialize.

Preposition 'in the ground' is wrong; use 'on the ground' or 'on the playground'. 'Will help them to do' is future while general truth needs present 'help them'. Sentence ends with 'and even' incomplete; provide a complete idea such as 'and socialize'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general truths and finish the sentence with a related activity.

× Umm, there are, there are few in my bucket list.

✓ Umm, there are a few on my bucket list.

'There are few' without article implies scarcity; 'a few' indicates some items. Use 'on my bucket list' not 'in'. Also avoid repetition 'there are, there are'. Suggestion: Use 'a few on my bucket list' for clarity and correct preposition 'on'.

× Uh, it's in Kathmandu, Godavari and few other places.

✓ Uh, they're in Kathmandu, Godavari and a few other places.

Use plural pronoun 'they're' to refer to parks (plural). Also include article 'a' with 'few other places'. Use commas correctly when listing locations. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches antecedent and include necessary articles.

× Uh, I love it. I would love to go in the places where it's green, clean and very peaceful, you know?

✓ I love it. I would love to go to places that are green, clean and very peaceful.

Use preposition 'to' rather than 'in' after 'go'. Change 'where it's' to plural 'that are' to agree with 'places'. This corrects verb agreement and preposition usage. Suggestion: Use 'go to' for visiting places and match verb agreement with plural nouns.