Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if needed.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. Because Malaysia is quite hot, the trees and grass made the parks feel cooler, and I often went jogging there with my friends in the evenings.

Suggestion: Be direct and use consistent tense. Remove filler phrases like “like” and “I don't know.” Give a clear routine and one specific detail about when or how often you go. Use a linking word to connect idea to reason.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go jogging there every weekend because it is a pleasant place to exercise and clear my mind.

Suggestion: This answer is fairly good but can be improved with a stronger topic sentence and a specific example. Add one concrete benefit and a linking phrase to make it more persuasive.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. For example, more parks would beautify the neighbourhoods and create safe spaces where families can relax and people can exercise regularly.

Suggestion: Correct factual/confusing phrasing and be specific. Use a clear topic sentence, fix the word order and accuracy (e.g., ‘sakura in Japan in spring’), and give a reason why you want to visit. Keep it to one or two supporting sentences.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit parks in Japan, especially in spring when the cherry blossoms (sakura) are in bloom, because the scenery looks beautiful and I want to take photos and walk under the trees.

× Yes, I like going to parks as as a child as the weather in Malaysia is kind of hot and with all the greeneries around it feels a bit cooler and I do enjoy jogging around the parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because the weather in Malaysia is quite hot, and with all the greenery around it felt a bit cooler; I also enjoyed jogging around the parks.

The question asks about past habit (as a child), so past tense should be used (liked, felt, enjoyed). 'As as' is a typographical duplication. 'Greeneries' is incorrect; use the uncountable noun 'greenery'. Use 'because' for reason and punctuation to separate clauses.

× Of course I do, I like working out during the weekends so I plan to jog at the park for like every week. I don't know.

✓ Of course I do. I like working out on weekends, so I plan to jog in the park every week.

Mixed present habits require consistent present simple (like, plan). Use 'on weekends' not 'during the weekends' for general habit. 'At the park' -> 'in the park' is more natural. Remove filler 'like' and 'I don't know' which weakens the sentence.

× Of course, I would like to see more parks in my city as it will beautify our cities and provide a lot of places for people to exercise and relax.

✓ Of course, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would beautify the city and provide many places for people to exercise and relax.

Use consistent reference: singular 'my city' so keep singular 'the city' rather than 'our cities'. 'Would like' is a polite present desire, so use conditional 'would' with 'would beautify' or simple future 'will beautify'; here conditional is more consistent. 'A lot of' -> 'many' is more appropriate for 'places'.

× I would like to go to the parks at Japan as I saw those sakura trees blooming in the ALT autumn. It's autumn.

✓ I would like to go to the parks in Japan because I saw images of the sakura trees blooming in autumn.

Use preposition 'in Japan' not 'at Japan'. Remove 'the' before 'sakura trees' only if speaking generally; both are acceptable but 'the sakura trees' is okay if referring to specific ones. 'ALT' appears to be an error—removed. 'Because' connects reason. Use past simple 'saw' for when you viewed images. Repeating 'It's autumn' is unnecessary and unclear in context.