Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatical, concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Correct verb tenses and use articles/prepositions. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'and', 'because', 'so').

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents, and I enjoyed playing games with my friends because the parks had swings and open space for running.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and natural phrasing. Avoid confusing or contradictory statements (e.g., "I feel tired when I relax"). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and help me relax. I often sit on a bench to watch children play, and I also chat with neighbors and older people, which helps me feel connected to the community.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases. Use correct grammar (subject–verb agreement, articles) and give specific benefits using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and walking areas for older people. For example, a new park with benches and paths would encourage families to spend time outdoors.

Suggestion: Start with a clear short response, then give one or two specific hopes or reasons. Fix grammar (use contractions sparingly, correct word order, plural/singular). Avoid repetition and be concise.

Example: I don't have a specific park in mind at the moment, but I would like to visit an unusual park in the future that has distinctive architecture and creative landscaping. For instance, a park known for its sculptures and themed gardens would interest me.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I really like to go parks with my mother as well as father.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I really liked going to parks with my mother and father.

The sentence refers to past habits, so the past tense 'liked' is required rather than present 'like'. Also use the gerund 'going' after 'liked' and include the article or preposition for 'go to parks' -> 'going to parks'. Use 'and' instead of 'as well as' for simple coordination of nouns.

× Apart from that, it's really enjoyable moment of my life because I played with my friends in my childhood.

✓ Apart from that, it was a really enjoyable moment of my life because I played with my friends during my childhood.

The noun 'moment' needs a determiner: 'a really enjoyable moment'. The context is past, so use past 'it was'. Use the preposition 'during' or 'in' before 'my childhood' for natural phrasing.

× Of course, because it's really soothing place for me.

✓ Of course, because it's a really soothing place for me.

The noun 'place' requires the article 'a' for a singular countable noun. The rest of the sentence uses present tense appropriately for a general statement.

× Sometimes I feel tired when I relax myself to watch some children who play in the park.

✓ Sometimes I feel relaxed when I sit and watch the children playing in the park.

The original mixes 'feel tired' and 'relax myself' awkwardly. 'Feel relaxed' matches watching children as a calming activity. Use 'sit and watch' for clarity and 'the children playing' (present participle) to show the ongoing action.

× Apart from that I talk with my neighbors and some elder people, which is really good for.

✓ Apart from that, I talk with my neighbors and some elderly people, which is really good for me.

Add comma after introductory phrase. Use 'elderly' (adjective) rather than 'elder' as a noun in this context. Complete the comparative phrase 'good for me' to include the beneficiary. 'Which' clause should refer clearly to the preceding activity.

× To be honest, if I talk about this thing, it's really innovative idea for the people because it's really beneficial for children who likes to play in the play garden.

✓ To be honest, if I talk about this, it's a really innovative idea for people because it's very beneficial for children who like to play in playgrounds.

Use 'a' before 'really innovative idea' (singular countable). 'People' is used without 'the' for general reference. 'Children who like' requires plural verb 'like' not 'likes'. Use 'playgrounds' or 'the playground' instead of 'play garden'.

× It's provide a playground for the kids as well as The Walking area for the elder peoples who like to walk in.

✓ It provides a playground for the kids as well as a walking area for elderly people who like to walk.

Use third person singular verb 'provides' to agree with 'it'. Add articles: 'a walking area'. 'Elderly people' is correct noun phrase; 'peoples' is incorrect plural. 'Who like to walk' matches plural subject.

× Still in my mind I have I don't have any particular name about the park apart from that if I get a chance in future, definitely I visit a unique park which have a unique name and a unique decoration and the architecture work.

✓ I don't have any particular park in mind right now, but if I get a chance in the future, I would definitely visit a unique park that has a special name, distinctive decorations, and interesting architecture.

Original sentence is fragmented and contains contradictions. Start with clear negative: 'I don't have any particular park in mind right now'. Use conditional 'would definitely visit' for a hypothetical future possibility. 'That has' uses correct third person singular. Use parallel nouns 'name, decorations, and architecture' and adjectives 'special'/'distinctive' for clarity.