Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify and organize your response. Start with a clear topic sentence: say whether you liked parks as a child, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (who you went with, what you did, how it affected you). Use correct tense and simple connectors (for example, “because” or “and”). Avoid fragmented sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I spent whole weeks there playing with my friends. For example, we would play football and climb trees every afternoon, and spending time with them helped me become more outgoing.

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatically correct. Give a clear main idea (you still like parks), then one or two specific reasons and an example. Use linking words correctly (e.g., “because,” “so,” “when”), and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax when I feel stressed. For instance, when I have a lot of pressure from school, I go to the nearest park for an hour to walk and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use natural expressions. Say yes or no, then give specific reasons (health, community, environment) with one connector like “because” or “so.” Avoid unnatural words like “compulsory” in this context — use “important” or “beneficial.”

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation. For example, more parks would give families a place to meet and children a safe area to play.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid repetition. Start with a clear yes/no or name the park, then give details: location, what makes it attractive (views, facilities), and why you want to go. Use correct verb forms and one or two supporting details.

Example: Yes, I want to visit the hilltop park in my hometown which is a couple of blocks from my house. It has wide lawns and great views of the mountains, so friends and I can relax, walk, and enjoy the scenery.

× I spend up one week time with my friends.

✓ I spent about one week with my friends.

The speaker describes a past event so the verb should be in the past tense: 'spend' -> 'spent'. Also 'up one week time' is unidiomatic; 'about one week' or 'for one week' is correct.

× They are.

✓ They were my childhood friends.

'They are.' is an incomplete sentence here and unclear. In context the student likely meant to identify who 'they' are; adding 'were my childhood friends' completes the sentence and matches past context.

× Yesterday helped me to become a little extroverted person.

✓ Those experiences helped me to become a little more extroverted.

The sentence refers to past events so use past tense 'helped' (already present) and improve wording: 'Yesterday' is wrong if referring to past activities in general; 'Those experiences' or 'That time' fits. Also 'a little extroverted person' is awkward; use 'a little more extroverted.'

× Yes I do because to visiting the parks really helps me to keep calm and I spend out dozens of hours with my friends there because sometimes when I my mind feel a lot of pressure.

✓ Yes, I do, because visiting parks really helps me stay calm, and I spend dozens of hours with my friends there when my mind feels a lot of pressure.

Remove the infinitive marker 'to' before 'visiting' (gerund required). Use 'helps me stay calm' rather than 'helps me to keep calm' (both are possible but 'stay calm' is natural). 'Spend out' is incorrect; use 'spend'. 'Dozens of hours' is fine. Correct subject-verb agreement: 'my mind feels' not 'my mind feel'. Also remove the extra 'when I'. Ensure commas for clarity.

× So I decided to go in our pass park.

✓ So I decided to go to our park nearby.

Use the preposition 'to' rather than 'in' for 'go to a place'. 'Pass park' is unclear; likely intended 'past park' or 'nearby park' — 'park nearby' or 'our local park' is clearer.

× That's going to be a spectacular concept because it is very compulsory for every village, for every city to have a park, because people really like to go in our parks and spend their times when they feel bored inside their houses.

✓ That's a great idea because it is important for every village and city to have a park, since people like to go to parks and spend time there when they feel bored at home.

'That's going to be a spectacular concept' is awkward; 'That's a great idea' fits. 'Compulsory' means legally required; 'important' is more natural here. Use 'to have a park' without extra commas. Use 'go to parks' not 'go in our parks'. 'Spend their times' should be 'spend time'. 'Inside their houses' -> 'at home'.

× So it's very compulsory.

✓ So it is very important.

'Compulsory' implies a legal obligation; the intended meaning is likely 'important' or 'necessary'. Use 'important' to convey recommendation rather than obligation.

× There there is a very beautiful park in my hometown which is a couple of blocks away from my house and people really like to go there and spend their time with friends and chatting with their friends.

✓ There is a very beautiful park in my hometown a couple of blocks from my house, and people like to go there to spend time and chat with friends.

Remove the duplicated 'There there'. Use 'a couple of blocks from my house' (no 'away' needed). Use 'spend time and chat' rather than 'spend their time with friends and chatting with their friends' to avoid redundancy and ensure parallel structure.

× They really have a good time and enjoying the view, view open mountains and something that.

✓ They really have a good time and enjoy the open mountain views and scenery.

Maintain parallel verbs: 'have' and 'enjoy' (not 'enjoying'). 'View, view open mountains and something that' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'open mountain views and scenery' conveys the intended meaning succinctly.