Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and provide 1–2 specific supporting details connected with linking words. Reduce redundancy and correct verb forms (e.g., "used to go", "played").

Example: Yes, I used to enjoy going to parks when I was a child. For example, I often played soccer with my friends and tried small arcade rides near the playground, which made those afternoons really fun.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and use present tense to describe current habits. Explain the reason concisely with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid awkward phrases like "the likelihood... when I was older".

Example: Not really. I don’t go to parks as often now because I am busy with work and studies, so I usually spend my free time at home or exercising near my house.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct grammar for conditional or opinion sentences and provide a specific reason. Avoid unclear phrases and censoring. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "however").

Example: I don't think we need more parks in my city because there are already two large parks that serve most people. However, if population grows, adding another small park might be helpful.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement of preference, use correct verb forms ("haven't been"), and give one specific reason or example. Keep it concise and natural, with linking words if needed.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit a water park because I have never been to one before and I imagine the slides and pools would be very exciting.

× Yes, when I was a child I usually go to the parks and I have some fun with it and I usually playing some soccer game in the past and some kinds of arcade that make me fun.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I usually went to the park and had fun there; I usually played soccer and went to arcades.

The sentence mixes present tense with past context. Use past simple for habitual actions in the past: 'go' -> 'went', 'have' -> 'had', 'playing' -> 'played'. Also use singular 'the park' or 'parks' consistently and simplify redundant wording. Use parallel verb forms for coordinated actions.

× Honestly, the likelihood of going to the parks when I was older become significantly lower because it depends on my time. I don't think I have much time to spend on the parks.

✓ Honestly, the likelihood of going to parks now is significantly lower because it depends on my time. I don't think I have much time to spend in parks.

Tense and reference were confused: 'when I was older' contradicts 'now'; use present reference 'now' with present tense 'is'. Use 'in parks' (preposition correction) and drop articles for general plural 'parks'. 'Become' should be 'is' for current state.

× I think that is unnecessary because in my city there are two parts that like I ****** my friend.

✓ I think that is unnecessary because in my city there are two parks that my friend and I like.

Original sentence had incorrect word order and missing words. Replace 'parts' with 'parks' (word choice) and reorder subject 'my friend and I'. Use 'that' to introduce the relative clause. Fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× I don't think it's really necessary if my city have more than three parks and I think 1 is enough for me.

✓ I don't think it's really necessary for my city to have more than three parks, and I think one is enough for me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my city have' should be 'my city to have' or 'my city has'. The corrected version uses an infinitive 'to have' to express necessity. Also write 'one' instead of '1' for formal writing and adjust preposition use.

× Yes, I think I would go to water park or like some kinds of parks that contain water because I haven't went to water park before and I think there's some a lot of fun on these parks.

✓ Yes, I think I would go to a water park or other kinds of parks that have water because I haven't been to a water park before, and I think these parks are a lot of fun.

Use article 'a' before 'water park'. 'Haven't went' is incorrect; use present perfect 'haven't been'. Use 'have water' rather than 'contain water' for natural phrasing. Use 'these parks are a lot of fun' for correct verb and noun order and preposition use.