Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答要更直接並且語法正確，避免填充詞（um, uh）和重複。先給出主句，然後用一兩句具體細節支持，例如具體活動或回憶。注意時態一致（過去式）。

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often rode my bike there with my friends and we would play games or have picnics, which made those afternoons very memorable.

Suggestion: 回答應更簡潔並用更自然的連接詞，少用填充詞。將習慣描述清楚（現在時），並提供具體例子說明如何放鬆（如散步、讀書或做運動）。

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. As a high school student, I often take a short walk or sit and read there when I need to relieve stress and recharge my energy.

Suggestion: 回答要更有條理並用準確詞彙，避免語句未完成。先表達立場，再給一兩個具體原因或益處，用連接詞（because, so, therefore）串聯句子。

Example: Yes, I would. I think parks help people relax and improve their mood because they offer green space for exercise and socializing, so more parks would benefit the whole city.

Suggestion: 回答應避免含糊和重複，提供更清晰的描述（例如公園名稱或特色）並說明原因。用一到兩句具體說明打算做什麼以及為何重要。

Example: Yes. I want to visit the Riverside Park in my city because it has a famous sculpture that I would love to photograph with my friends, and we could enjoy a fun afternoon together.

× Uh yes I did. I always ride my bike to the park umm, the reason why I like going the park is was I can umm ride my bike uh with my besties uh, I like.

✓ Uh yes, I did. I always rode my bike to the park. The reason why I liked going to the park was that I could ride my bike with my besties.

句子描述过去的习惯或事实，应使用过去时。原句中“always ride”用了一般现在时，应改为过去时“always rode”；“like going the park”缺少介词“to”，并且时态应为过去“liked”；“is was”重复且混乱，应使用过去时连词结构“was that”；“can”在描述过去能力或习惯时应改为过去式“could”。建议：描述过去习惯时统一使用过去时态，注意介词to的使用，避免重复词。

× Yes, I do uh, as a Senior High School student, uh, when I feel bored with my studies and works, umm, I will go to the park to uh, relieve my stress and wish to uh, improve my energy.

✓ Yes, I do. As a senior high school student, when I feel bored with my studies and work, I go to the park to relieve my stress and recharge my energy.

此处描述的是现在的常态或习惯，应使用一般现在时。原句混用了将来时“will go”与一般现在时，应改为“I go”。“works”用复数不当，应为不可数名词“work”。“wish to improve my energy”表达不自然，改为常用搭配“recharge my energy”。建议：描述习惯用一般现在时，注意不可数名词和常用搭配。

× Uh, yes I do, uh, because I think park serves as a plan for, to, uh, relieve our stress for people and it improves a level of, uh, energy, umm, by going to parks, I can.

✓ Uh, yes, I do, because I think parks serve as places to relieve people's stress and improve their energy levels when they go there.

原句句子结构混乱，短语顺序不当且有多余词汇。应把主语和谓语对齐：parks serve as places；“plan for, to”错误且多余，应为“places to”；“relieve our stress for people”重复且语序错，应为“relieve people's stress”；“it improves a level of, uh, energy”应为“improve their energy levels”；句尾“by going to parks, I can”不完整，已合并为原因状语从句。建议：重组句子，明确主谓关系，去掉多余停顿词并使用自然搭配。

× Uh, yes. Uh, I want to go to the reaming park in my city. The reaming park has a sculpture which I really want to photograph with my friends. Uh, you know, uh, that is uh, uh, good experience, uh, playing with friends.

✓ Uh, yes. I want to go to the remaining park in my city. The remaining park has a sculpture that I really want to photograph with my friends. It would be a good experience to play with friends there.

关于未来的愿望，句子需保持时态和形式一致。原句“reaming”拼写错误，应为“remaining”。第二句中关系代词可用“that”或“which”，更自然的是“that I really want to photograph with my friends”。最后一句语序和表达不流畅，改为“It would be a good experience to play with friends there”更清晰地表达未来期待。建议：检查拼写，使用恰当的关系从句并保持句子完整和流畅。