Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cevap akıcı değil, dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Konuya doğrudan başla, gereksiz tekrarları çıkar ve kısa destekleyici detaylar ver. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri mantıklı şekilde bağla (ör. "because", "so"). Ayrıca doğru zaman ve kelime seçimine dikkat et (ör. "protective", "I wasn't allowed to run").

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents were quite protective, so I often had to be careful and wasn't allowed to run. Because of that I usually played quietly on the swings or read under a tree. Those outings felt safe and enjoyable.

Suggestion: Cümlenin mantığı ve dilbilgisi karışık; "if I would a child in the future" gibi yapı yanlış. Açık bir konu cümlesi kur, sebeplerini açıkla ve bağlaçlarla mantık oluştur (ör. "because", "but"). Ayrıca zamir ve artikel kullanımına dikkat et.

Example: Not really, I don't enjoy parks as much now because I'm an adult and prefer quieter or more productive activities. However, if I had young children in the future, I would likely take them to parks so they could play and explore.

Suggestion: Cümleler karışık ve ifade bozuk; gereksiz tekrarlar ve yanlış kelime kullanımı var (ör. "be parked" yerine "parks"). Doğrudan cevabı ver, nedenini somut örneklerle destekle ve bağlaç kullan. Ayrıca tek bir fikri kısa ve net cümlelerle ifade et.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. For example, there are many children near my apartment and a nearby park would provide a safe place for them to play. Also, more parks would improve the neighbourhood's atmosphere and offer space for exercise.

Suggestion: Cevap çok belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları fazla. Net bir yanıt ver (evet/hayır) ve nedenini somutlaştır. Eğer özel bir park hayalin varsa adını veya özelliklerini belirt. Kısa ve mantıklı cümleler kullan.

Example: I don't have a specific park in mind right now, but I would love to visit any large, scenic park with lakes and walking trails. Such a place would be relaxing and refreshing, and I would enjoy spending an afternoon there.

× Just added my mother and my father wish to me.

✓ My mother and my father warned me.

The original sentence uses incorrect verb and pronoun forms. 'Just added' is nonsensical; 'wish to me' is wrong. Use a clear subject-verb structure: 'My mother and my father warned me.' This uses correct pronoun 'me' as the object and the past verb 'warned' to convey caution.

× Uh, I have to be careful.

✓ I had to be careful when I was a child.

The context is past habit. Use past tense 'had to' and add time reference 'when I was a child' to match the question about childhood activities.

× I have to be careful and I always not to run.

✓ I had to be careful and I was always told not to run.

Negative adverb placement 'always not' is incorrect. Use passive 'was always told not to run' or 'I was always told not to run' to indicate advice given by parents. Also match past tense 'had to' for childhood.

× And my father is very protective person.

✓ And my father was a very protective person.

Missing article 'a' and tense should be past ('was') to describe childhood. 'Protective' is an adjective describing 'person', so include the article: 'a very protective person.'

× And also I love, uh, I love to go to the park.

✓ I also loved going to the park.

For past habitual action, use past tense 'loved' and prefer the gerund 'going' after 'loved'. This sounds more natural for childhood habits.

× No, actually I don't.

✓ No, actually I don't anymore.

The original is short but ambiguous. Adding 'anymore' clarifies that the preference changed from childhood to now.

× I let this feeling when I was a child actually because I am grown up person right now and that's why no I don't like it.

✓ I left that feeling behind when I grew up, so now I don't like going to parks.

Multiple issues: 'I let this feeling' is unnatural; use 'I left that feeling behind.' Tenses must be consistent: past 'grew up' and present 'don't like.' Also include the activity 'going to parks' to be clear.

× But if I if I would a child in the future, I would probably like to go park.

✓ But if I were a child again, I would probably like to go to the park.

This is a second conditional hypothetical. Use subjunctive 'were' for hypothetical present/future condition and include 'to' before 'the park.' Also remove repeated 'if I'.

× I was searching like that because I have school in front of my apartment and there's a lot children around me and that's why maybe I thought it was a good it would be a good idea to be parked around my apartment.

✓ I was thinking about that because my school is in front of my apartment and there are a lot of children around me, so I thought it would be a good idea to have a park near my apartment.

Mixed tenses and incorrect phrases: 'searching like that' is wrong; use 'thinking about that.' 'I have school' can stay present ('my school is') if it's current. 'There's a lot children' should be 'there are a lot of children.' 'Be parked' is wrong; use 'have a park' or 'a park near my apartment.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun phrases.

× Yes, I agree that question.

✓ Yes, I agree with that question.

Use the preposition 'with' after 'agree' when referring to a question: 'agree with that question.'

× Actually there are not sort of, but if it would be the IT if if there is an amazing part, I would probably want to go there because and the air is express excitement feeling as well.

✓ Actually there are none nearby, but if there were an amazing park, I would probably want to go there because the air would feel refreshing and exciting.

'There are not sort of' is incorrect; use 'there are none nearby.' Use proper conditional 'if there were' for hypothetical. 'Amazing part' should be 'amazing park.' 'The air is express excitement feeling' is ungrammatical; use 'the air would feel refreshing and exciting.' Ensure verbs and nouns are correct and the conditional mood is consistent.

× I would probably.

✓ I would probably go.

The fragment 'I would probably.' lacks a verb. Add 'go' to complete the idea: 'I would probably go.'