Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and expand with one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g., "introverted", "I found it more enjoyable").

Example: No, I didn't enjoy going to parks as a child. Instead, I preferred reading books at home because I was quite introverted and felt more comfortable alone. For example, I would spend my afternoons reading in my bedroom rather than playing outside.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and reduce hesitations. Use linking words to connect reasons and provide one concrete example. Correct grammar ("I enjoy going on picnics", "I enjoy nature").

Example: Yes, I do like going to parks now. I often go on picnics with friends in spring or autumn because the weather is pleasant, and I enjoy sitting on the grass to relax. For instance, last weekend we had a picnic and spent the afternoon chatting and reading under a tree.

Suggestion: Respond directly and use formal linking phrases rather than informal fillers. Make reasons specific and avoid vague phrasing. Correct expressions ("people now lead hectic lives", "relax and unwind"). Limit to two sentences max.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because people now lead hectic lives and need places to relax and unwind. Additionally, more green spaces would improve air quality and make the city more pleasant to live in.

Suggestion: Be precise and avoid unrelated or confusing references (mentioning Paris seems off-topic). Start with a clear statement, give a concise reason, and one brief example of what you like about your local park. Remove repetition.

Example: I don't have any specific big parks in mind; I usually prefer the small park near my house because it's quiet and convenient. For example, its shaded benches and short walking paths make it easy to relax without travelling far.

× No, I didn't really enjoy outdoor activities when I was a child since I prefer maybe reading books at home.

✓ No, I didn't really enjoy outdoor activities when I was a child since I preferred reading books at home.

The sentence mixes past tense 'didn't enjoy' with present tense 'prefer'. Use past tense 'preferred' to maintain consistent time reference. Also remove 'maybe' which is unnecessary and awkward in this context.

× And yes I I was really introvert so I didn't want to communicate a lot with others and I find myself more enjoyable.

✓ And yes, I was really introverted so I didn't want to communicate a lot with others and I found being alone more enjoyable.

'Introvert' is a noun; use the adjective 'introverted'. The clause 'I find myself more enjoyable' is ungrammatical and unclear; use 'I found being alone more enjoyable' to match past tense and express the intended meaning.

× Well, I enjoy going out outside now.

✓ Well, I enjoy going outside now.

'Going out outside' is redundant. Use 'going outside' or 'going out'. Also present tense 'enjoy' is correct here so only redundancy needed.

× I enjoy go on a picnic with my friends when it's spring or autumn, when it's not very hot, the temperature is comfortable and umm, I also enjoy just enjoy the nature and sit on the grass.

✓ I enjoy going on picnics with my friends in spring or autumn when it's not very hot and the temperature is comfortable, and I also enjoy just enjoying nature and sitting on the grass.

After 'enjoy' use gerund 'going' not base form 'go'. Use plural 'picnics' for general habit. Remove repeated 'enjoy'. Use 'in spring or autumn' for seasons and gerunds 'enjoying' and 'sitting' for parallel structure.

× Yes, 'cause people are now live a hectic existence and they really need space to relax themselves to unwind after a day of walking.

✓ Yes, because people now live hectic lives and they really need space to relax and unwind after a day of walking.

Incorrect verb phrase 'are now live' should be 'now live'. 'A hectic existence' is awkward; use 'hectic lives'. 'Relax themselves to unwind' is redundant; use 'relax and unwind'. Also replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because' for formal correctness.

× So I think more parks will also help to improve the environment.

✓ So I think more parks will also help improve the environment.

Use 'help improve' rather than 'help to improve' — both are acceptable, but 'help improve' is more natural. Tense and meaning are fine.

× So I think I like to.

✓ So I think I would like that.

The original fragment 'I like to' is incomplete and mixes present preference with intent. 'I would like that' expresses a desire for more parks and fits the context.

× Well, to be honest I don't really know much about Paris, maybe just the park near my near my house.

✓ Well, to be honest I don't really know much about parks, maybe just the park near my house.

The speaker likely meant 'parks' not the city 'Paris'. Remove duplicated phrase 'near my'. Maintain present tense 'don't really know' for current knowledge.

× I think it's enough for me to go out and I'm not really interested in some very big parks just to make sure that I can feel enjoyable and relaxing.

✓ I think the park near my house is enough for me to go out, and I'm not really interested in very large parks; I just want to feel comfortable and relaxed.

'Feel enjoyable and relaxing' is incorrect — people feel 'comfortable' or 'relaxed', not 'enjoyable' (which describes things). Clarify antecedent (park), use 'very large parks' not 'some very big parks' for natural phrasing, and maintain present tense.