Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be natural and accurate with tense and verb forms, reduce hesitations and repetitions, and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers under five sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my grandfather after school, and I would fly kites and ride bicycles with my friends. Those visits helped me relax and enjoy fresh air, which I still remember fondly.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar errors (e.g., 'which are good for my eyes'), avoid long run-on sentences by using linking words like 'but' or 'however', and give one specific example of what you do now in the park.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks nowadays. Although I no longer play games there, I often walk among the trees because the greenery is good for my eyes and helps me relax. For example, I usually sit on a bench and read for twenty minutes.

Suggestion: Give a clear, concise opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons. Fix repetitions and grammar (e.g., 'more parks mean more trees' and 'good for people's health'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more parks mean more trees, which improve air quality. In addition, they provide healthy outdoor spaces for people to exercise and relax, so overall community well-being would increase.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give specific details and correct word choice (e.g., 'China's national parks' or a specific park name; 'precious' → 'rare' or 'endangered'). Avoid fillers and be more precise about what you want to see.

Example: In the future, I would like to visit a national park in China, such as Sichuan's reserves. I hope to see rare plants and endangered animals like giant pandas, and to learn about conservation efforts to protect these species.

× Yeah, I really like going to parks. When I was a child, I always go to the parks with my grandfather after every day, and I fly the kite with my friends, ride the bicycles, uh, or just breathe, get a deep breath to get a refresh.

✓ Yeah, I really liked going to parks. When I was a child, I always went to the park with my grandfather every day, and I flew kites with my friends, rode bicycles, or just took deep breaths to feel refreshed.

Mix of past and present tenses: the speaker is describing past habitual actions, so verbs should be in the past tense (liked, went, flew, rode, took). Use 'park' singular after 'the' for a habitual visit to a specific place: 'the park' or omit 'the' and use 'parks'. 'Every day' is the correct order (not 'after every day'). 'Get a refresh' is unidiomatic; use 'feel refreshed'. Suggestions: keep past tense consistently for past descriptions; use idiomatic phrases ('take a deep breath', 'feel refreshed'); choose singular/plural consistently.

× Nowadays I still like going to parks, although I don't play or fly kites and ride a bicycle with my friends, I still like to go to the park to see some green plants which can good for my eyes or just take some deep breaths to.

✓ Nowadays I still like going to parks. Although I don't play or fly kites or ride bicycles with my friends anymore, I still like to go to the park to see green plants, which are good for my eyes, or just take some deep breaths.

Tense and coordination issues: use present simple for current habits ('I still like'). Use parallel structure for a list of activities ('play, fly kites, or ride bicycles'). 'Which can good for my eyes' is ungrammatical: use 'which are good for my eyes'. Remove unnecessary ending 'to'. Suggestions: maintain parallel verb forms in lists; use correct relative clause verb ('are'); avoid trailing prepositions or words.

× That's definitely, definitely good and I'd like to see see them 'cause the more park, the more tree and this can be good for the environment and it's also good for Health Tomorrow park, which means more people can have the chance to just take a look.

✓ That's definitely good and I'd like to see them, because the more parks there are, the more trees there will be, and this can be good for the environment and for people's health. More parks mean more people have the chance to visit them.

Incorrect singular/plural and article use: 'the more park, the more tree' should be pluralized and expressed with 'there are' ('the more parks there are, the more trees there will be'). 'Health Tomorrow park' is unclear and ungrammatical; use 'people's health' or 'public health'. Use clearer clause separation and correct pronoun references ('them' to refer to parks). Suggestions: pluralize nouns when making general comparative statements; use 'the more ... the more ...' structure correctly; clarify noun phrases.

× In the future, I want to go to the China National Park. There are lots of precious plants and animals on there. Uh, if I go there, I can see the pandas, some trees, endangered and other precious animals.

✓ In the future, I want to go to China's national parks. There are lots of rare plants and animals there. If I go, I could see pandas, trees, endangered species, and other rare animals.

Incorrect article and preposition use: 'the China National Park' is awkward; use 'China's national parks' or 'a national park in China'. 'On there' is wrong—use 'there'. Word choice: 'precious' is odd for species; use 'rare' or 'endangered'. List items need parallel forms and clearer nouns ('endangered species'). Modal choice: use 'could' to express possibility. Suggestions: use possessive or plural forms for country-related attractions ('China's parks'); use 'there' rather than 'on there'; choose precise vocabulary ('rare', 'endangered species'); keep list items parallel.