Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons, and avoid filler words ("umm"). Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "however") and correct basic grammar (e.g., "the park near my house" not "at around"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and include a brief specific detail (what made the park unattractive or what you enjoyed at home).

Example: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child. The park near my house was run-down and had few trees or play facilities, so I preferred staying at home to play video games or bake with my family.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first and use present tense properly. Correct word choice and grammar (e.g., "I still haven't changed my answer", "the park" not "the part"). Avoid repeating ideas and instead add one specific current example of a hobby. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to connect ideas.

Example: I still don’t enjoy going to parks, so I usually stay at home. For example, these days I prefer watching movies or baking with my family because we can relax together comfortably.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opinion and give a concrete reason. Use correct phrasing ("more parks" not "more park") and clearer expressions ("green spaces" or "natural areas"). Provide one specific benefit (e.g., cleaner air, places for exercise) and link ideas coherently.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we lack green spaces. More parks would improve air quality and give people places to exercise and relax, which would make the city more pleasant.

Suggestion: Answer directly and remove redundancy. Use correct grammar ("There is one park in Bangkok that I would like to visit"), and give a specific reason why (mention a known park name if possible, describe particular features). Use linking words ("because", "so") and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: There’s one park in Bangkok I’d like to visit because it’s famous for its lush trees and colorful flower beds. People say it’s very peaceful there, so it seems like a great place to relax with my family.

× Umm, I would say no, because umm, the park at around my house there's not beautiful at all.

✓ Umm, I would say no, because the park near my house is not beautiful at all.

The original sentence has awkward word order and redundant words ('at around', 'there's not beautiful'). This is a sentence structure and subject-verb issue: 'the park' (singular subject) requires the verb 'is', and the prepositional phrase should be 'near my house'. Remove filler words and reorder to 'the park near my house is not beautiful at all.' Suggestion: identify subject first, then use correct verb and concise prepositional phrase.

× So I would say I prefer staying at home playing video games or baking with my family.

✓ So I would say I prefer staying at home, playing video games, or baking with my family.

The sentence uses present preference with 'prefer' which is correct, but needs commas to separate parallel gerund phrases for clarity. Ensure parallel structure when listing activities: 'staying at home, playing video games, or baking with my family.'

× I can't enjoy spending time with them more than playing in the park.

✓ I enjoy spending time with them more than playing in the park.

The original uses a confusing negative 'I can't enjoy... more than', which contradicts intended meaning. Removing 'can't' clarifies that the speaker enjoys family time more than park activities. Maintain comparative structure 'enjoy X more than Y.'

× In the present I would still not changing my answer because the part for me is not attractive at all.

✓ At present I would still not change my answer because the park is not attractive to me at all.

Errors: 'In the present' is better as 'At present'; 'would still not changing' mixes modal and progressive incorrectly — use 'would still not change' or simply 'still do not change'; 'the part' is a typo for 'the park'; 'is not attractive to me' is the correct adjective + prepositional object. Use base verb after modal 'would' and correct noun.

× So I would say I still want to stay at home, enjoy baking or enjoy playing with my family.

✓ So I would say I still want to stay at home, enjoy baking, or enjoy playing with my family.

Add a comma for parallel items and maintain parallel verb forms. The present tense 'want to stay' and 'enjoy' are fine; ensure consistent list formatting and commas between items.

× And right now my hobby is watching a movie with my family.

✓ And right now my hobby is watching movies with my family.

If the hobby is general, use plural 'movies' or 'watching movies' rather than singular 'a movie'. Both are grammatically possible, but 'watching movies' sounds more natural for a hobby. Maintain present continuous nominalized activity.

× Yes, I would like to see more park in my city, because in my city, around my city, there are no beautiful nature or there are no beautiful green.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, because in and around my city there is no beautiful nature or greenery.

Multiple errors: 'more park' should be plural 'more parks' (singular/plural error). 'In my city, around my city' is redundant—combine to 'in and around my city.' 'There are no beautiful nature' is wrong because 'nature' is uncountable and takes singular 'is' or use 'no beautiful natural areas'; 'no beautiful green' is ungrammatical—use 'greenery.' Correct verb agreement: 'there is no... greenery.'

× Something that can make my city more improve and improve the environmental around my city.

✓ Something that can improve my city and the environment around it.

Redundant and ungrammatical phrasing: 'more improve and improve' is incorrect. Use the verb 'improve' once with direct objects: 'improve my city and the environment around it.' Also 'the environmental' should be the noun 'environment.' Keep concise verb-object structure.

× There is one park that I would like to go to in the future is the park that in Bangkok.

✓ One park I would like to go to in the future is a park in Bangkok.

Original sentence incorrectly uses two 'there is' constructions combined, causing redundancy and wrong structure. Use either 'There is one park I would like to go to' or 'One park I would like to go to is a park in Bangkok.' Also use 'a park in Bangkok' rather than 'the park that in Bangkok.' Ensure a single clear subject-verb structure.

× It is one park that's well known by people around the city because the nature around there, the trees, the flowers are so beautiful.

✓ It is a park that's well known to people around the city because the trees and flowers there are so beautiful.

Use 'well known to people' rather than 'by people.' 'The nature around there' is awkward—prefer 'the trees and flowers there.' Also change 'one park' to 'a park' for natural phrasing. Ensure parallel noun list 'trees and flowers' and correct placement of 'there.'

× And when people went there, they said it's so refreshing and they can relax with their families.

✓ And when people go there, they say it's so refreshing and they can relax with their families.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence mixes past 'went' and present 'say/can.' Since this is a general statement about people's experiences, use simple present: 'people go there' and 'they say it's so refreshing and they can relax.' Use present tense for habitual/general truths.