Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use articles, verb forms), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail using a linking word. For example, mention who you went with and a brief reason or memory. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my classmates and we played hide-and-seek and tag, which I remember fondly because it kept us active and made school friends closer.

Suggestion: Answer the question directly and clearly with correct tense and grammar. If you no longer go, say so and give a concise reason using linking words (e.g., because, so). Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect words — use "study hard" not "belly hard." Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Not really. I stopped going after junior high because I now study hard to prepare for college entrance exams, so I spend most of my free time revising.

Suggestion: Be clearer and use correct grammar and vocabulary (children, supervised, sedentary). Begin with a direct opinion, then give a specific reason with a linking word and one example or suggestion. Avoid vague wording.

Example: Yes, I would. Because children today spend too much time on electronic games and are often sedentary, more parks would encourage outdoor play and regular exercise, for example by providing safe playgrounds and sports fields.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and expand slightly with a specific plan or reason. Use correct phrasing for future family references (e.g., "when I have a baby" and "go with my child"). Keep it natural and concise, and link sentences with words like "but" or "so."

Example: Not at the moment, but when I have a child I would like to take them to local parks to play and enjoy nature, so they can grow up active and make new friends.

× Yes I did. I used to hang out my friends when I was a elementary elementary school and I I was enjoying hide and seek and chase game.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to hang out with my friends when I was in elementary school, and I enjoyed playing hide-and-seek and tag.

Multiple issues: 'hang out my friends' needs preposition 'with' (preposition error, but prioritize past tense and structure). 'when I was a elementary elementary school' should be 'when I was in elementary school' (article and preposition and duplication). 'I I was enjoying' has repeated word and wrong tense and progressive form; simple past 'I enjoyed' fits because these were habitual past actions. 'hide and seek and chase game' should be 'hide-and-seek and tag' (idiomatic nouns). Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and simple past for activities, include correct prepositions and articles, and use standard game names.

× No I don't until I was at a junior high school student and now I'm studying belly hard to pass the exam of college.

✓ No, I didn't. I stopped when I was a junior high school student, and now I'm studying very hard to pass the college entrance exam.

Tense and word choice errors: 'No I don't until I was' mixes present and past incorrectly; use past 'I didn't' or 'I stopped' to refer to ending in the past. 'at a junior high school student' is incorrect: use 'when I was a junior high school student' (preposition and noun phrase order). 'belly hard' is incorrect word choice; correct phrase is 'very hard'. 'the exam of college' should be 'the college entrance exam' or 'college exam' (article and noun order). Suggestion: keep tense consistent, fix noun phrase order, and use correct adverb and collocations.

× Yes, because children's are now assisted with games and I think that is so unhealthy. So I want them to know the importance of the exercises.

✓ Yes, because children are now distracted by games, and I think that is very unhealthy. So I want them to learn the importance of exercise.

'children's are' is incorrect possessive form; use 'children are' (pronoun/possessive error). 'assisted with games' is wrong verb choice; 'distracted by games' or 'preoccupied with games' fits. 'so unhealthy' should be 'very unhealthy' (adverb use). 'know the importance of the exercises' is awkward; use 'learn the importance of exercise' or 'understand the importance of physical activity'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms, choose appropriate verbs, and prefer singular uncountable 'exercise' for general concept.

× No, but when I have a baby I would like to go with it and hang out.

✓ No, but when I have a baby I would like to go with them and hang out.

Pronoun choice: 'it' for a baby is inappropriate and impolite; use 'them' (singular they) or 'him/her'. Also 'would like to go with them and hang out' is acceptable future-inclined intention. Suggestion: use 'them' for gender-neutral reference to a future child, and keep modal 'would like' for polite intention.