Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct tense, avoid filler words and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, and, so). Remove hesitations and complete the final clause.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my family and I often had Saturday picnics there. For example, I used to spend hours watching birds and climbing trees, which made those visits very memorable.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating words like "still" and tighten the sentence. Use a clear topic sentence in present tense, then add a specific supporting detail with a linking word (for example, because or so).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because my family continues our picnic tradition. For instance, we usually meet every Sunday and I like to sit under the trees and watch the birds while we chat.

Suggestion: Be more specific and correct grammar (verb forms and articles). Provide a concise opinion then one clear example of facilities, using linking words like "for example" and finish the sentence fully.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because Almaty is growing and needs accessible green space. For example, new parks often include a skate park, playgrounds and walking paths, which attract families and young people.

Suggestion: This answer is good but could be tightened and slightly more specific (when or with whom). Keep it to two to three sentences: a clear topic sentence and one specific detail using linking words like "because" or "so".

Example: Yes, I want to visit a new park in Almaty that has a skate park, playgrounds and jogging paths because it offers many facilities in one place. I plan to go there with my family next month so we can all exercise and relax together.

× Yes, I really enjoy going to the parks as a child because my family and I very frequently had picnics there.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed going to parks as a child because my family and I very frequently had picnics there.

The speaker is referring to a past habit ('as a child'), so the past tense 'enjoyed' should be used instead of the present 'enjoy'. Use past tense for actions or states that occurred regularly in the past. Suggestion: match tense to the time frame; use 'enjoyed' for past habits.

× Yes, I really enjoy going to the parks as a child because my family and I very frequently had picnics there.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed going to parks as a child because my family and I very frequently had picnics there.

Using 'the parks' implies specific parks known to the listener; when speaking generally about parks in childhood, omit 'the' and say 'going to parks' or use 'the park' if referring to a particular one. Suggestion: choose 'parks' for general habit or 'the park' for a specific one.

× Moreover, I enjoyed nature and focused on enjoying trees, birds.

✓ Moreover, I enjoyed nature and focused on enjoying the trees and the birds.

The original phrase 'enjoying trees, birds' is a list lacking articles and feels clipped. Adding 'the' before nouns clarifies reference, and adjusting word order to 'enjoying the trees and the birds' makes the sentence natural. Suggestion: include articles for specific natural elements and use parallel structure.

× Uh, we went there every Saturday, so it was kind of our.

✓ Uh, we went there every Saturday, so it was kind of our tradition.

The sentence is incomplete: 'it was kind of our' requires a noun to complete the thought. Adding 'tradition' completes the idea. Suggestion: ensure sentences have all necessary elements (subject, verb, object/complement).

× Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because my family and I still have a tradition to have picnics in parks and I still enjoy sitting in the nature and watching trees and birds.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because my family and I still have a tradition of having picnics in parks and I still enjoy sitting in nature and watching the trees and birds.

'Have a tradition to have' is not natural; use 'a tradition of having'. Also 'sitting in the nature' is incorrect—omit 'the' and say 'sitting in nature'. Add 'the' before 'trees and birds' if referring to specific ones. Suggestion: use 'tradition of doing something' and idiomatic collocations like 'sitting in nature'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because Almaty is a fast developing town with new parks where wide range of facilities opens.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because Almaty is a fast-developing city with new parks where a wide range of facilities is opening or has opened.

'Fast developing' should be hyphenated as 'fast-developing' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. 'Town' can be replaced by 'city' for consistency. 'Wide range of facilities opens' is ungrammatical: 'a wide range' requires the determiner 'a' and the verb should agree; use 'is opening' (present continuous) to indicate ongoing development or 'has opened' for completed action. Suggestion: use 'a wide range of facilities is opening' or 'has opened' and include hyphenation for compound adjectives.

× For instance in new park we have a skate park and other.

✓ For instance, in the new park we have a skate park and other facilities.

Missing commas and the article 'the' before 'new park' are needed. The phrase 'and other' is incomplete; add 'facilities' to complete the idea. Suggestion: use articles where appropriate and complete the noun phrase 'other facilities'.

× Yes, there is a new park in Almaty with the skate park, playgrounds and jogging paths that I want to visit.

✓ Yes, there is a new park in Almaty with a skate park, playgrounds, and jogging paths that I want to visit.

Use 'a skate park' unless referring to a specific skate park already known. Also add a comma before 'and' in a list for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a' for non-specific singular nouns and use commas to separate items in a list.

× I enjoy having a lot of facilities in one place which encourage outdoor exercise and provide safe places for families to meet.

✓ I enjoy having a lot of facilities in one place which encourage outdoor exercise and provide safe places for families to meet.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but has a subject-verb agreement issue if 'a lot of facilities' is taken as plural; 'which encourage' is correct. No change required. Explanation: 'a lot of facilities' is plural so 'encourage' and 'provide' agree. Suggestion: none needed.