Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and clear: start with a short topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and unclear phrases like “moment extremely rising.” Use simple, correct grammar (past tense) and concrete examples about activities you enjoyed.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play on the swings and have picnics with my family, which made me feel happy and energetic.

Suggestion: Answer directly, use clear reasons and link them with connectors (because, and, also). Use present simple tense for habits and avoid vague phrases like “the situation extremely like me.” Be specific about what you do or feel in parks.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I can relax and exercise there. For instance, I often walk or read on a bench, and the fresh air helps me unwind after work.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion first (yes or no), then explain with specific reasons and an example. Mention who benefits and why. Keep sentences concise and use correct grammatical structures.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe outdoor spaces for children. For example, more local parks would let my child play nearby and meet other kids.

Suggestion: Be specific about the park or place you want to visit and explain why with concrete details. Use future tense correctly (I want to visit / I plan to visit) and avoid repeating words. If you mean parks in Dubai, name one or describe what attracts you there.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the parks in Dubai in the future. For example, I hope to see Dubai Miracle Garden because its huge flower displays and creative designs look amazing and very different from parks at home.

× Yes, of course I liked uh, going to parks when I was a child because when I go to uh, parks moment extremely rising.

✓ Yes, of course I liked going to parks when I was a child because going to parks made me feel very excited.

The sentence mixes past and present forms incorrectly ('liked' is past, then 'go' is present). This is a present tense issue (ID 6). Use past tense consistently for past experiences: 'go' -> 'went' or rephrase with 'made me feel' to express the result. Also remove filler words and correct collocations: 'extremely rising' is unidiomatic; use 'made me feel very excited.'

× Yeah, of course, nowadays I still like going to parks because the situation extremely like me. And what is more, when I go going to parks, I I'm rest and other.

✓ Yeah, of course, nowadays I still like going to parks because the atmosphere suits me well. Also, when I go to parks, I can relax and so on.

The original mixes incorrect verb forms and unidiomatic phrases (present tense issue, ID 6). 'the situation extremely like me' is incorrect; use 'the atmosphere suits me' or 'I like it.' 'When I go going' has a duplicated verb; use 'when I go' and for 'I'm rest and other' use 'I can relax and so on.' Maintain present simple for habitual actions and use correct collocations ('suits me', 'relax').

× I would like to see see in my city at parks, uh, for example, but because I have a child and they are really like.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city, for example, because I have a child and they really like visiting parks.

This is primarily a sentence structure error (ID 26) with word repetition and missing elements. Remove duplicate words ('see see'), place 'more' correctly ('see more parks'), and complete the idea by adding a verb for the child ('they really like visiting parks' or 'he/she really likes visiting parks'). Ensure pronoun number matches the referent (see next suggestion).

× I would like to see see in my city at parks, uh, for example, but because I have a child and they are really like.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city, for example, because my child really likes them.

The original uses 'they' ambiguously and omits the object of 'like' (ID 12). If speaking about one child, use 'my child' and 'likes' (third person singular). If plural, 'my children' and 'like'. Also include the object: 'likes them' (parks). This fixes pronoun agreement and completes the sentence.

× Yeah, of course, I'm going to Dubai in the future because I really, really interested in because Dubai, extremely beautiful city and my dream city.

✓ Yeah, of course, I'm going to go to Dubai in the future because I'm really interested; Dubai is an extremely beautiful city and my dream city.

This contains future tense and sentence structure problems (mainly ID 7). 'I'm going to Dubai' is acceptable but more natural with 'I'm going to go to Dubai' or 'I want to go to Dubai.' 'I really, really interested in' lacks the verb 'am' and misplaces 'in'; use 'I'm really interested' or 'I'm really interested in it.' Also use complete sentences: 'Dubai is an extremely beautiful city and my dream city.'